Runouw's Forums of Evil Pt.1 Genesis

[XThecommander]

This will be like how brando's is but mine is more towards the theme of resident evil and if you want to be in the story after reading then just post if people have intrest i'll make more if not i will stop with the stories it's your choice.


Pt.1 Genesis

I sat in the off-topic forum deciding what I would do i considered posting in the Ultimate showdown but it was far too late for that the forums where a ghost town and in any case there where barely any people in the forums especially in the rules forum. i then got up from the chair and went to the end of the forums where I logged off

Meanwhile hours later in Superyoshis user control panel.

SuperYoshi:ughhh why did i log on so early... anyway lets check the off-topic forum.

UserControlPanel:Warning!!Warning!!A Virus Has Been Detected.

SuperYoshi:Whoa What Th--.

The UserControlPanel Interrupted him.

UserControlPanel:Quarintine in progress in Graveyard Forum.

SuperYoshi:why is there a virus in the Graveyard Forum whats important there?

SuperYoshi starts to walk to the locked gates of the Graveyard Forum he peers inside the forums and at first wonders what is wrong then all the sudden strange mis-shaped looking human figures. (that are mostly made of mostly letters and numbers rams the locked gates many more ram the gate but have no effect)

SuperYoshi:Holy....What are those things?( he takes out a anti-virus weapon)

the Computer then starts to spray the strange creatures away and they run back into the graveyard.

SuperYoshi runs back to his UserControlPanel where he immediatly sends a private message to runouw.

*Morning 8:30 AM*

XThecommander:time to see if anyones up god why did i wake up so early...

I head by the Graveyard Forum and realize the entire forum is locked up.

XThecommander:strange... any wa-- AHHHH (SuperYoshi is dressed in a biohazard black suit with a gas mask)

SuperYoshi:Ahhhhh o hello sorry i scared ya(takes off mask)

XThecommander:ummm why are you in a biohazard suit and wearing a gas mask.

SuperYoshi:listen before i tell you Dont go near the Graveyard forum...ok?

SuperYoshi tells him what happend and tells of the weird creatures.

XThecommander:and thats all you know right?

SuperYoshi:ya well i sent a private message to runouw hope he gets it.

brandobrawl then logs-in to the forum and sees the Graveyard forum which is covered up by a Metal dome brando then sees SuperYoshi and goes up to him and asks one thing.

Brandobrawl:We Got A Paintball Arena now??

SuperYoshi:....Thats the Graveyard Forum

Brandobrawl:i've never seen it so whats with the weird clothing and the gas mask.

XThecommander:well... *suddenly a strange voice comes out of nowhere*

Runouw:SuperYoshi what is... Ahh we got a virus i see.

SuperYoshi:ya look insid--.

just then a creature rams the gates again and starts pounding on them followed by a few more.

Runouw:O thats plesant we seem to have a virus that can take over peoples accounts and use them.

SuperYoshi:but who's behind the virus then???

Runouw:I Don't know however i will make sure all of the members get a virus scanner to destroy any viruses that breakout its not likely but i've seen it happen before in at other websites... in any case Don't worry I will put up an announcment to meet in the General Forum In the new Anti-Virus Topic i'll give anti-virus scanners at 4:30PM Be there.

Runouw then walks away and starts checking the forums and everything else for viruses

SuperYoshi: well untill then be careful of the forums i have made sure that now no one can view the inside of the Graveyard forum

Brandobrawl and XThecommander:ok

SuperYoshi then walks back to the gate and stands guard.

XThecommander:about the next chapter of your story...

Brandobrawl:not done yet and also i put up that next chapter will have a filler in it's place

XThecommander:will i be in the filler?

Brandobrawl:just wait like everyone else *walks towards off-topic forum*

XThecommander:ughhh...

End of the first chapter

[XThecommander]

I have made a list of people who are going to be in the next chapter as more apply i will put more people in

1.TheBetterGamer
2.NeroTheDemonslayer
3.Niklaw
4.Ridder
5.Brandobrawl
6.Fourinone
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10.

Four Spaces are open for Pt.2 i won't have more untill my story gets to a point where people want a Pt.2 till then i will wait for people apply and i shall consider if you should or should'nt be in the next chapter also yes i know im making a topic and posting in it late at night.
(this will be edited when all people are selected for the next chapter also respond throught private message or more likely posting in this topic)

[MICrophone]

Um…OK. I haven't seen Resident Evil, so I guess that I wouldn't get everything. You are sort of copying brando's idea, but I guess that is all right; you gave him credit.

BIGGEST PROBLEM: PLEASE, PLEASE, CHECK YOUR GRAMMAR! I COULD BARELY UNDERSTAND THE STORY!!!

[fourinone]

BIGGEST PROBLEM: PLEASE, PLEASE, CHECK YOUR GRAMMAR! I COULD BARELY UNDERSTAND THE STORY!!!

marioiscool254 speaks the truth. If you want your story to be taken seriously, you MUST follow the basic grammatical rules! Capitalize the first letter of every sentence. Don't capitalize words that should not be capitalized, unless used for effect. Punctuate the end of your sentences. Place spaces between each word!!! These are just basic things; I don't care if you use a comma instead of a semicolon, but we need to at least be able to read it without getting a headache! Otherwise, it'd look like you typed your story up in a hurry, and did not put very much work into it at all.

[XThecommander]

please note the time i posted the story and see that it was at mid night and i was not really paying attention so i'm sorry, but in any case is it a good story or not?