The day after SM63, The second part of SM63 (SM123)

[Worst_master]

Super thx of Moy!
History:
Location: Castle Grounds
After getting 63 Shine Sprites and 63 Star Coins......
Mario goes to the cannon and get the last Shine Sprite and Star Coin...... on the Edge of M.K., but he needs the cannon to get to it!
Mario said," Oh, the cannon has some glitch, why I can't get on it?"
Mario said sadly,"Oh, the water switch in basement is broken, the water "rushed" into the cannon and blocked it. I should fix it......"
Mario Location: Basement
*Kamek rushes into the castle and goes to the Shine Orb Room*
Kamek shout," Bowser is dead already...... Hehe.....I'm going to destroy the Shine Orb......."
Eddie saw Kamek and went to Mario to tell him that Kamek wanted to destroy the Shine Orb.....
Kamek saw Eddie and he used a spell. Eddie become a dark toad......

Dark Eddie locked in Kamek's castle......
Kamek steal the shine one and one...... The mushroom kingdom become dark......

Mario fixed the water switch, he climb back to the castle ground.......

Location: Castle ground
Mario said strangely," It's night? I just fix the water switch for 1 hour...... "
"No, it is just early morning!"
???",Gwahahahaha"
Mario said," Bowser? Nope, I killed bowser! Who? Go out!"
???,"Gwahahahaha! I am Kamek!"
Kamek shout," Stupid Mario, I stealed Bowser's force and engery, so you can kill him so easily!"Mario: ......
Kamek cried," Now, all of the shine sprite is stole! You need to start again......"
Kamek take 63 shine sprite and go to bowser's castle...... he change his name to " King Kamek's castle......"

Peach come back from mushroom kingdom (The side of turioal).
Peach asked politely," What?"
Mario said," Kamek stealed Bowser's force and engery, and steal all the shine sprite......"
Peach shout," Nope! "
Mario said," I should go in to the castle first......"
Mario said again," No, all shine sprite is stold!I should have 1 shine sprite to open the door......"
Peach replied," no, you can go to the edge of m.k.! You fixed the cannon then you can go now!"

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Storyline and the shine sprite list:
First Shine sprie: The edge of M.K: 1 shine sprite, 1 star coin (The last star coin, the star coin didn't get steal, this star coin is very important (it is different, the star coin below is another......)
Mario: let open the door
Mario: I still can not go in to the door!
Peach, let back to the mushroom kingdom (Turioal side)!
Second shine sprite: Back to turioal, there have a toad, give him all the star coin and trade 1 key!
Mario: Oh, I get the key now, I can go in the castle!
Peach: Many of things in the castle changed, the painting changed!
Mario: I've no shine sprite to open the door to the painting......
Peach, nope, there have a secret course!
Secret course#1 (The sun)
Sunshine Island
Shine 1: Mind the cheep, on the beach
Reward (expert shine sprite):
A toad: Wow! you get 3 shine sprite!You can go to the Goomba's Green-hill!
Mario: ... where?
A Toad: There!
Mario: the bob-bob's battlefield door?
A (Stupid) Toad: What bob-bob's battlefield ? I don't know! (It's because it is SM123 toad, not Sm63 toad)
Shine 2: 5 dazzlingly on the sea
Shine 3: Climb on the tiny hill
Course#1 (The bob-bob's battlefield door)
Goomba's Green-hill, 5 shine sprite, 5 (new) star coin
Shine 1: The secret in the canyon
Reward (expert shine sprite):
A toad: Wow! you found that secret, do you know, if you have 5 Shine sprite, you can unlock another course?
Mario: I know it in SM63 already......
Shine 2: The windy sky
Shine 3: 8 Red coins in green-hill
Shine 4: Careful of Landslide on the hill
Shine 5: Defeat King Goomba
(Like the goomba in peach's garden)
Course#2 (The snowman's land door)
Glacier deep sea, 5 shine sprite, 5 (new) star coin
Shine 1: The secret in the freezed water
Shine 2: The sky freezed!
Shine 3: 8 freezed-sliver star
Shine 4: The floating platfrom near the iceberg!
Shine 5: Defeat Glacier bully (Can use a block bully and some blue bullet bills.)
Different: He can fired iced blullet bills (Use some blue or rainbow bullet bills is okay!)
(Like the bully in snowman's land!)
Course#3 Sky-Fly-Die
Shine 1: Goonie is busy
Shine 2: Kamek's Mini-toy-airship
Shine 3: Rainbow (bullet) blow the sky
Shine 4: Cloud field on the sky
Shine 5: Giant Dark Goonie (Can use blocks to make)
Secret course#1
Gravity Space. (Can use pipe to make.)
Shine: 1: under construction
Unlock:
1 shine sprite: Unlock Turioal
63 star coins: Unlock Main Hall
1 (From edge of M.K.) secret star coin: *secret, don't tell you*
3 shine sprite: Course#1 door.
5 shine sprite: Course#2 door.
8 shine sprite: Course#3 door.
10 shine sprite: Secret Course#1 door.

Under constrution, just know total: 123 shine sprite and 123 new star coin, to Complete the game, need to Save eddie.

[Zunar]

Nice ideas. But you need to fix errors like spelling, grammar, and punctuation.

History:
*Castle ground*
After get 63 shine sprite and 63 Star coins......
Mario go on to the cannon and get the last shine sprite and Star coins...... on the leadge of M.K., but he need the cannon to get on it!
Mario: Oh, the cannon has some glitch, why I can't get on it?
Mario: Oh, the water switch in basement is broken, the water "rushed" into the cannon, it blocked the cannon, I should fix it......
*Kamek rush in castle and go to the shine orb room immediately*
Kamek: Bowser is die already...... Hehe..... let me steal the shine sprite.......
Eddie saw Kamek and go to Mario to tell Mario Kamek want to destroy the shine orb.....
*Boom*Kamek saw eddie and he use a spell and eddie become a dark toad......

Like for example, this. It should be this:

History:
Location: Castle Grounds
After getting 63 Shine Sprites and 63 Star Coins......
Mario goes to the cannon and get the last Shine Sprite and Star Coin...... on the Edge of M.K., but he needs the cannon to get to it!
Mario: Oh, the cannon has some glitch, why I can't get on it?
Mario: Oh, the water switch in basement is broken, the water "rushed" into the cannon and blocked it. I should fix it......
*Kamek rushes into the castle and goes to the Shine Orb Room*
Kamek: Bowser is dead already...... Hehe.....I'm going to destroy the Shine Orb.......
Eddie saw Kamek and went to Mario to tell him that Kamek wanted to destroy the Shine Orb.....
Kamek saw Eddie and he used a spell. Eddie become a dark toad......

See? Much better. Edit it like that. Any questions?

[YoshiKid54]

Shouldn't this be in General Artwork?

[MessengerOfDreams]

Nope. It's game-related.

[Buff_]

Some good ideas there, keep it up.

[Worst_master]

Shouldn't this be in General Artwork?

I asked suyo, he said it is in Sm63 general

[Suyo]

Shouldn't this be in General Artwork?

I asked suyo, he said it is in Sm63 general

Yep, since this is a Suggenstion for a second part, just like Zunar's topic.

[Canine]

This is interesting... Sounds great!

[Worst_master]

This is interesting... Sounds great!

Thank you, but, do you have any Idea?

[Kirby859]

...Umm, I thought this was for praise? Yeah, great ideas.