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Re: TBG's Dramatic Writings

PostPosted: March 24th, 2010, 3:01 pm
by mariomasta
Twas' New years
It was new years at 12:01 pm
People were exited and glad
2 minutes later people left
And the people were mad

Santa came back for another round
His elf was acting like a clown
Santa was looking until what he had found

TBG did i do better this time

Re: TBG's Dramatic Writings

PostPosted: March 24th, 2010, 3:28 pm
by TrappedTime
That last line was kind of crushed.
The grammar is weird.

But yes, you did better.

Re: TBG's Dramatic Writings

PostPosted: March 24th, 2010, 3:38 pm
by mariomasta
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* I just got that idea TBG and this is the new text box*
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Re: TBG's Dramatic Writings

PostPosted: May 6th, 2010, 3:49 pm
by TrappedTime
Torturing Is Fun, I'm Obsessed


Torture someone, but why?
Does it make sense?
How come, just tell me.
Torturing, I'm obsessed.

Your guts lay on the floor.
Bloody mouth, drooling blood.
Trying to cry, but too scared.
Yor guts spewing blood.

I let you in on a secret.
Something you need.
I tell you.
An evil deed.

You can't take it, cry.
Torturing is fun. So much fun.
I love how you can't take it.
But I'm not done.

More and more, revealed, one after one.
spewing more intestines, more from nowhere.
I tell you more, you cry more.
Oh what fun it is to torture, just you and me right now, right here.

Oh look, time is up.
Go along, leave my sight.
Time for another one to be tortured.
Time for another sol to take flight.

Torture, torture. Fun, fun, fun.
Am I obsessed? Well, am I?
These blood-spewing guts, I eat them in one gulp.
So much fun, fear struck by one eye.

P.S. I am a necrophile, so don't ask.

Que Este?

PostPosted: May 23rd, 2010, 11:11 am
by TrappedTime
Que Este?

[Lo siento si no estan los accentos, pero soy perezoso ahora...]
[this is not the translation I'll use "`" denoting accent marks for the letter befor.]
Que` este?
En mis ojos....
Algun agua?
O una bebida otro.....

No se` que` hacer.
Pues, ma`s o menos nada hacer aqui.
Estoy yendo a ir.
Que` ese alli?

Debo saber que` es?
Debo?
O debo llevar mi mismo,
Sobre de mis ojos?

No sabes.
No se`.
Este....
Que`...

(Jajaja.)
[Translation below]

Tranductor, no jk.

PostPosted: May 23rd, 2010, 11:14 am
by TrappedTime
[I am sorry if there are no accent marks, but I am lazy now...]
[I'll use "`" denoting accent marks for the letter befor.]
What is this??
In my eyes....
Some water?
Or a different drink.....

I don't know what to do.
Well, there's barely anything to do.
I am going to go.
What is that over there?

Should I know what it is?
Should I?
Or shouldI wear my self,
Over my eyes?

You don't know.
I don't know.
This....
What...

(Hahaha.)

2Hearts Minus Mine

PostPosted: June 20th, 2010, 4:36 pm
by TrappedTime
We've Got 2Hearts
Minus Mine, That Is


I met you, simple as that.
Love burning within you and I.
But something changed, something good though.
Now it's me you want to die.

I don't think it's silly, passionate actually.
What?
So you have a problem?
I'll spill my gut.

Remember that night, the one where you tried to kill me?
Well it was humorous how you didn't.
And also loveley.
I feel my mind, either, didn't.

It was that time at six o'clock that we burned in hell.
We've got 2hearts, minus mine, that is.
You finally got me, and I exploded with every emotion I had.
I'm undefined now, floating in gobbeldy-chiz.

I look over you with hap-emotions*.
I see you crying, but also trying to cover it up.
Impossible to understand what you did and why,
But whose to say I'm not the nut?

Ten years pass and suicide meets your brain.
Now we're together again, but something's different.
You're.....noticing me now, not trying to harm me.
We've got 2hearts, and I want nothing different.

Re: TBG's Dramatic Writings

PostPosted: June 20th, 2010, 11:25 pm
by YoshiKid54
Now that's dramatic. It also rhymes often. Nice work, TBG.

Re: TBG's Dramatic Writings

PostPosted: June 21st, 2010, 2:02 am
by SuperStar X
Thats cool..and nice rhymes..Cool work TBG

Re: TBG's Dramatic Writings

PostPosted: June 21st, 2010, 2:57 am
by Worst_master
Well, is not in Story?
Weeellll (Again), nice rhymes. (But some didn't rhymes............)
Also, don't make the sentence one is Looooong, one is short.
Like:
TBG wrote:Oh what fun it is to torture, just you and me right now, right here.

Oh look, time is up.


Eghh.....
Nevermind, The idea is good, nicely writings with easy word.