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Chapter 1 1-1
Narrator:Mario and Luigi were flying through the levels until they hit a bullet bill
Mario:Let's a go
Luigi:OK
Narrator:Luigi tripped Mario accidentally
Mario:What was that for?
Luigi:I did it on accident.
Koopa commander:We found em' koopas go full out!!!
Koopa troopa 1#:*throws fire bomb* They could never survive that!
Koopa troopa 2#:Wait........ *Mario & Luigi jump through the smoke* Oh No!
Koopa commander:Full retreat!!!!!!
Koopa 3#:Calling everybody Full retreat!
Koopa 4#:Copy that.
Koopa 5#:It could take months to get away from them
Koopa commander:No it doesn't.Lieutenant i want you to start up the airship.I have a plan!
Koopa troopa 1#:Yes sir
Mario:We got away from them *looks back* RUN!!!
Luigi:AH No.
Koopa commander:*gone crazy* Shoot the cannons!!!
Koopa 6#:Yes sir
Koopa commander:Now GO
Koopa 6#:Yes sir
Koopa commander:Can you shut up and go *koopa 6# runs to the cannons*
Koopa 3#:Steady...Steady.....steady *Bang Bang Bang Bang*
Luigi:I never thought that they would go that Crazy
Mario:They always Have Luigi
Luigi:Oh

Chapter 2 1-2
Narrator:So Mario and Luigi were being chased into a under water cave.
Koopa commander:Where'd they go!
Koopa troopa 1#:They went in the cave
Koopa commander well keep shooting at them
Koopa troopa 1#:But there in the cave
Koopa commander:Well shoot at the cave at all opening
Koopa troopa 1#:They're not that stupid they could a hammer bro to open the openings *walks away*
Koopa troopa 1#:OK you koopas Shoot at the openings at the cave.
All low rank koopas:Yes Lieutenant.
Narrator:Now this is Mario's and Luigi's Part.
Mario:Where are we.
Luigi:*get's out map* Right know were at 1-2.
Hammer bro ice & fire:Were the Hammer bro's
Hammer bro ice:We will freeze you up
Hammer bro fire:We will let you feel the pain of molten rock.
Starts RPG battle:*Hammer bro ice uses ice ball* *Luigi uses Super Hammer* Hammer bro fire uses molten meteor* *Mario uses fire ball* *Hammer bro ice uses Snow ball* *Luigi uses Super jump* *Hammer bro fire uses Earthquake* *Mario uses Flame attack* Hammer bro ice loses *Luigi use ultra hammer* Hammer bro fire loses. Mario & Luigi WINS!!
Hammer bro's Ice & fire:We'll do anything.
Hammer bro fire:see we're the highest rank koopas *All Cave's openings crashing Down*
All:I can't see a thing.
Mario:Can you open that cave opening we lost are hammers
Luigi:Are hammers are gone too.
Mario:Hammer bro fire do you have the fire element
Hammer bro fire:I can't do it in dark areas.
Hammer bro:I know who took are hammers.
All except Hammer bro ice:Who
Hammer bro ice:The ghost of the mine.*The ghost of the mine trips on Luigi*
Luigi:Hey i found are hammers
*Busts the opening*
Were OUT
Ghost:And so am I.Thank you.
Chapter 3 1-3?

Mario:Wow these are huge mushrooms.Luigi where are we.
Luigi:*takes out map*We are at 1-3
Mario:Were getting closer.
Hammer bros fire & ice:Just cause you think were gonna save you again well were not.
Luigi:We need your advice to get across these huge mushrooms.
Hammer bro fire:What we do is that we ride a bird.
Mario & Luigi:Ride a bird?
Hammer bro fire:See watch *jumps on top of a bird* SEE.
Mario:There are two birds coming.
Hammer bro ice:Those aren't birds.They're WARSHIPS!
ALL:RUN
Koopa commander:Watch out for those mushrooms lieutenant.
Koopa troopa 1#:Yes sir
Koopa commander:Tell them to shoot those dang bullet bills.
Koopa troopa 1#:But Why?
Koopa commander:To shoot those mushrooms down!
Koopa troopa 1#:Oh *walks to the cannons* Koopas shoot those mushrooms down
All low rank koopas:But were exhausted
Mario:*mist starts* This never happened before.
Hammer bro fire:That's cause This is World 1-3?You see 1 world 3 only happens when you go to the left cave but you went in the right cave which led to here.
Luigi:Then why you were in that cave.
Hammer bro ice:We were finding out the mysteries of 1-3?
Mario:Then why are they following us.
Hammer bro fire:Well it's called dimensional split.
Hammer bro fire:When a object goes to 1-3 it appears at 1-3?
Hammer bro ice:hey probably put koopas in both caves so there would be more koopas after us.
Mario:Why are they after you.
Hammer bro fire:Well you see we are outlaws of the koopa kingdom.
Hammer bro ice:We were hiding in the cave not studying the secret world but we have a lot of knowledge.
Hammer bro fire:So let us on your journey please we beg you.
Luigi:Let me think about it
Luigi:Yeah sure.
Hammer bro ice:Yes
Mario now lets go through that cave to get to the normal world.
Chapter 4 1-3
Mario:The air ships are way over there.
Luigi:So.
Mario:So we can invade it and control it.
Hammer bro fire:Like I said use a bird.
*birds come*
Mario:There's four birds.
*Mario & Luigi & H.M. F. & H.M.I. jump up.
*All of them jump down to the bouncy mushroom*
"Boing!"
Mario:Whoa these are bouncy *Boing*
Luigi:Even I can't jump this high.
H.M.B.F.&I.:Neither can we.
Mario:*Boing* Maybe we can use this "bouncy" mushroom to get to the others.
Luigi & the hammer bros.:Yeah sure.
*JUMP**Bounce*
Mario:That green mushroom is very close to this one so we can just jump to it regularly.
*jump*
Luigi:Why aren't we bouncing.
Hammer bro fire:That is because this is a green mushroom.
Luigi:So.
Hammer bro ice:So green mushrooms don't "hop"
Mario:What do you mean by "hop"
Hammer bro fire:Well you see that the red mushroom goes up and down we use that term "hop" for the red mushrooms.
Mario:So how are suppost to get up there.
Luigi:Are normal jump.
Hammer bros.:Yes yes indeed your normal jump.
Mario:Yeah what about it.
Luigi:Remember from super mario bros. 2
Luigi:When we had to jump higher we always had to duck then jump.
Mario:Ohhh.
*ducks down*
*all jump really high*
*jump again*
Mario:We made it to The Fortress

Chapter 5 1-fortress
Mario:We need to get to the top of this fortress.
koopa kid:you will never catch hahahaha.
Luigi:Why you little.
Mario:Bequite Luigi.
Luigi:Fine
koopa kid:What do think you're doing on my territory Hammer outlaws.
Hammer bro fire:They spotted us.
Luigi:We need your help a lot here.
Hammer bro ice:There just gonna cage us at world 9
Luigi:World 9?
Hammer bro fire:That's where we are from
Hammer bro ice:He is hiding there so you can never find him.
Luigi:Who
Hammer bro fire:Dark bowser he brought world 9 from the ? world.
Hammer bro ice:He can't live in the real world so he brought a part from his world.
Luigi:Then bring it here.
koopa kid:Why don't you just shut up and chase me
Mario:We'll get to you.
koopa kid:fine thwomp vator bring me up to the top of the fortress.
koopa kid:You will never catch me.
Luigi:How will we get to his "secret" lair.
Mario:I heard in this fortress there is a pipe that you go down and you flying up.
Luigi:There it is.
Mario: Koopa kid thought we were stupid
*Goes down pipe...............BOOM!*
Mario:Whaaaaaaaaa!
Luigi:I'm number one!
Mario:do you have to say that now!
Hammer bros.:Oh My God!
Koopa kid:How did yo- The pipe the koopas are stupid.
Mario:And so are you.
Koopa kid:You think im gonna fight you.
Koopa kid:Well say hello to Bowser's sun reactor.
Bowser's sun reactor:Raaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaa.
Koopa kid:So see ya.
Luigi:OMG
Mario:You aren't a phone.
*Luigi gets out phone*
*Mario's phone rings*
Phone:Text message from Luigi:OMG
Mario:you serious Luigi at this time
Luigi:
Mario:Shut up
Luigi:
Bowser's sun reactor:So you think that you could beat me well YOUR WRONG
Starts RPG Battle:*Cool music starts* *Bowser's sun reactor uses flame* *Mario uses meteor clash.* Bowser's sun reactor: I'll destroy YOU. *Luigi uses flame hammer* Bowser's sun reactor:You won't survive this. *Bowser's sun reactor uses metal crush* *Bowser's sun reactor uses Mass destruction* *Mario gets weakened fast* *Luigi still is healthy* *Luigi uses the power of shine sprite* *Fortress is crushing & falling* Bowser's sun reactor:Noooooooooooooo.*Runs away* Mario & Luigi WIN!
Koopa kid:You won this time but you won't win next time Muah hauh huah.
Luigi:Shut up koopa kid.
Koopa kid:you will never get to 1-5 never.
*Airship is flying still right next to the destroyed castle*
Mario:I can't wait till we abduct that airship.

Chapter 6 1-airship
Mario:Oh My God
Luigi:I can not believe that we are going to abduct a airship
Koopa troopa 1#:Shoot those bullet bi- There they are
Luigi:Not again
*Mario stage starts:*Jump move forward super jump slide crouch jump run high jump*got key to headquarters*Go through door*
Koopa commander:Peoples get in the battle ships I'll handle this.
Mario:HAHAHAHAHAHAHA You can't even hurt a fly.
Koopa commander:*Gets koopas 20-100*
Luigi:
Mario:
Koopa 100#: Do we destroy them commander?
Koopa commander:Nah bowser needs an arch enemy.Jump off the airship.
Koopa 100#:OK commander
*JUMP...................BOOOOOOOOOOOOOOM
Koopa commander:Help your self get in that battle ship
Luigi:
Mario
Luigi:Sure
Koopa commander:But your gonna have to race me to 1-6.
Narrator:To be continued

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*sounds the mod alarm*

this one is different kimonio do you have to be so mean

Do you have to accuse me of meanness?



I win for reversing what you said.




Anyway, this isn't truly a story. More of a chat story with little humor.

OK. First off, I didn't see anything except chat. What kinda narrative is this? Is this a dialogue narrative. That's the most baddest narrative I can think of. Do it like this. It's of course an example. You don't have to do it like that

(E.G.)

Chapter 1 - World 1-1

Mario and Luigi were flying across some levels, when suddenly, they hit a bullet bill, sorring through the sky.
"Lets-a-go!" Mario said, cheerfully.
"OK!" Luigi said as if he wanted to! They were walking when Luigi accidentally tripped Mario, who landed in the grass...

Something like that. I'm a bad story teller, as you can see!

This story can really be improved! For one thing, it didn't make any sense. First it goes to Mario and Luigi flying and they get hit by a bullet bill. Where did it come from in the first place? Next, Luigi trips Mario, not knowing where they are or what really happened. Then the Koopas come outta nowhere and attack the Marios. The story could definetly use more describing words, for instance when you wrote, "They went into the cave." It could be "They entered the deep, dark cave as they were being followed by the army of Koopa Troopas." It needs lot of work in story.

BTW, try to make it better and put into a real narrative with describing, action words and more detail on the plot!

Kimonio wrote:........I believe this got deleted one time....



*sounds the mod alarm*

Kim Kim Kim

Kim, Kim, Kim what?

He's not being mean. He has never been mean as long as I've known him. He hasn't been mean to me. He might've got mad at me before, but otherwise, he hasn't done anything wrong. He's saying that it got deleted once because it wasn't THAT good. He said this because you've recreated the topic! And plus, you've double-posted... >_>

LUIGIMAN, Kirby was not being mean; he was giving constructive criticism of how to improve the story. There's a difference.

Now, less fail and derail, and more relevant posts. Blah.

Like the others said, Its not good. No humor, Not very many details, and its poorly written in my opinion. And before you go off saying im an idiot or that im mean, This could lead to something better. So keep trying!