Adventure of Mario

[SuperMIC]

Ohaidere. I'm gunna tell you a bit about what I thought of your series.

First of all, I probably won't do a full review, mostly because I'm a bit tired, but you should be able to get some things fixed. I only played up to pt. 6.

FUN - 6.5/10
GRAPHICS - 2/5
OTHER - 3/5

The series was not good, but not bad. It was average. It definitely doers have a little bit of work. First of all, I really can tell you're not being very serious with your story, and the jokes are kind of cliche. A great series has a great storyline, and obviously humour does play its part. Your series kind of has a quite weak plot. I get the moon thing, but the beginning really let me down. You have to know where to use humour, and saying "Another boring adventure" just declares your series boring. It's basically like offending yourself.

The levels were somewhat challenging, but not really at all. It took me at the most 1 minute to beat one part. It was that simple.

Part 5 lagged so much and made me not want to play it.

Graphics need a bit of working on. There was no cut-off or tiling choice issues, but there was no decor at all. Decor is an essential part to a level; it makes the level look nice. There's a third tab in the items place which was almost never visible in your levels.

There were many nit-picky things I really didn't like about your level, but I'm tired, as I said, so I won't list them at the moment.

OVERALL - 11.5/20

Okay, you have a bit of work to do here. This is mainly what you need to work on:

1) Expand your levels
2) Know when to use humour and build a better storyline
3) Decrease lag (Level transitions and less lava and/or enemies)
4) Add decor. You lost 3 graphics points on this.

If you work on this, then you'll have a BASICALLY perfect series.

Hope I helped,

-SuperMIC

Hold on, you only played up to Part 6?? I got a review up to part 6 before asking me to use more decor (MP3 Amplifier). And I started using more decor from there on, especially on Part 9 and 10.

Oh, oops. :S But... the whole point of a review is to point out what could've been better, so why not fix the first few levels? I know as a reviewer if the advice is taken but not ued I get a bit angry.

[Harmless]

Oh, shoot. I'm sorry if you thought I was angry. I was more surprised, no angryness. Sorry.

Err, scratch that!!! I read your message wrong. But the series is kinda... you know, done.

[SuperMIC]

I know, but what I'm saying is that just edit the first few levels, so when new people come to play this series, you're showcasing your best work and not the amateurish work you did when you were inexperienced. I remember going back to my second ever series and then seeing how much cut-off there was and the lack of decor in the level, so I have to go back and edit that sometime.

[Harmless]

True. Maybe I should edit it.

[Harmless]

In fact, I have just edited it now. That is, the first 1-6 parts. Can somebody give me a review on my improved series?

[Harmless]

I added a little red-coin challenge to Part 1, seeing that it was all dialogue, I wanted to add something to it.

[SuperMIC]

I LOVE YOUR COIN CHALLENGE. A bit small, yes, but now your level is more of a level. However, there's still a bit of cut-off in your levels... so, since I've been bummed-bored over the past 2 weeks, I'll help you!

The code is here:

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EDIT: Done! You don't have to use it. It was just really fun to make.

[Harmless]

...
Hmm... That's an interesting version. Oh, THAT'S what you mean by redoing the cabin!!

Erm.... I went up to the attic, yet the block squished me and I died...

Thanks for helping me though.

[ColdBellow0]

All your levels are great but they are too laggy...sorry to say that...also, I din't know you could use a snow music on a grass type
stage...Hey 8-Bit dude, Please teach me how you made another Mario in the picture inside the cabin?

[SuperMIC]

All your levels are great but they are too laggy...sorry to say that...also, I din't know you could use a snow music on a grass type
stage...Hey 8-Bit dude, Please teach me how you made another Mario in the picture inside the cabin?

Hmm, you talking about 8-Bit or me?