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Re: STORY REVIEWS- (Today's Story- Runouw's Secrets)

Postby mariomasta » March 24th, 2010, 2:30 pm

This is good for a short story
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Re: STORY REVIEWS- (Today's Story- Runouw's Secrets)

Postby MessengerOfDreams » March 24th, 2010, 2:31 pm

What, Runouw's Secrets? Cause you DO know these are reviews, amirite?
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Silent Conversations and a Crow's Final Song!
My latest story, and one of my personal favorites. A girl bound in silence finds the words to say to her prospective girlfriend as they visit her religious father in a dusty town on the edge of Kansas, where the crows' migration south brings forth anchored memories, the path to resolution, and a new start.

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why do I write so much about dancing you don't dance you've never danced in your entire life
lying little ♥♥♥♥ with your ♥♥♥♥ story ♥♥♥♥ you
also Diddy/Lucina <3
Fanfic: Worth a Thousand Words
Because the world needed a Samus/Dedede story
Fanfic: Ecstatic Silence
Just wanted to write and ♥♥♥♥ like this happens, you'd think I'd know better.
Fanfic: Far From the Edge
It's a dance that's been a long time coming for a brand new man and an unchanging woman, but once one takes the plunge there's no falling back up.
Original: Jealous Ghosts of the Mississippi
The story of Rachel meeting Amber after a lifetime of silence and being shunned
Original: Your Hand in Mine
One of my most personal stories about a dangerous romance. Now to be published in a college lit journal!
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Level Series: Leaves From The Vine (ft Star King)
For the 29th LDC, a theme of grassland taken through the growth of our designing society. Won the 29th LDC!
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Re: STORY REVIEWS (Life inside a level)

Postby Sonicfan253 » March 25th, 2010, 3:12 pm

Mind if I do the next review?
And thanks for reviewing my story! Ill keep your advice for my future stories, Because I have alot of new things planned.

Life inside a level

An interesting story about Nin10mode getting trapped in levels, A storm happens and sends Nin10mode into his computer. Unfortunatley landing in Super mario 63, He passes through levels (With the help of the forumers). But through the story, The plot takes a COMPLETE twist, Nin10mode (Or...somebody?) Wakes up in bed, starting something else. Hang on just a sec. Nin10mode was supposed to be inside LEVELS, And now hes in real life? I dont know if this is a dream or not. But that takes off a point, Overall: An awesome story.

9/10

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Re: STORY REVIEWS- (Today's Story- Runouw's Secrets)

Postby nin10mode » March 25th, 2010, 4:14 pm

Yeah... I probably should've made it clearer. In "Stars of Hope - Preparation," That's Star-fawful that I'm speaking as. :)
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Re: STORY REVIEWS- (Today's Story- Runouw's Secrets)

Postby MessengerOfDreams » March 25th, 2010, 4:16 pm

I'd love to get a TRC review... crap I broke mah own rule! :wears shirt saying "Hypocrite" all day:
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I switch my signature a lot. If you wanna see some of my past ones, here you go.
Silent Conversations and a Crow's Final Song!
My latest story, and one of my personal favorites. A girl bound in silence finds the words to say to her prospective girlfriend as they visit her religious father in a dusty town on the edge of Kansas, where the crows' migration south brings forth anchored memories, the path to resolution, and a new start.

Form (25quared)
This might be like nothing you've seen before.
Updated Works! Some of my past best and current stuff: show
Writing Works!
Fanfic: Shut Up and Dance
why do I write so much about dancing you don't dance you've never danced in your entire life
lying little ♥♥♥♥ with your ♥♥♥♥ story ♥♥♥♥ you
also Diddy/Lucina <3
Fanfic: Worth a Thousand Words
Because the world needed a Samus/Dedede story
Fanfic: Ecstatic Silence
Just wanted to write and ♥♥♥♥ like this happens, you'd think I'd know better.
Fanfic: Far From the Edge
It's a dance that's been a long time coming for a brand new man and an unchanging woman, but once one takes the plunge there's no falling back up.
Original: Jealous Ghosts of the Mississippi
The story of Rachel meeting Amber after a lifetime of silence and being shunned
Original: Your Hand in Mine
One of my most personal stories about a dangerous romance. Now to be published in a college lit journal!
-------------------------
Recent LDC Work:
Level Series: Leaves From The Vine (ft Star King)
For the 29th LDC, a theme of grassland taken through the growth of our designing society. Won the 29th LDC!
--
Levels at Large:
Level Topic: Collection of MoD's Levels!
If you've ever wanted to see any level I made worth a damn, go here! From the quiet 14th LDC entrant Finis to the megasmash level series Dark, you can find links here!
"You were always a revolutionary, now there's just less of a chance of you crying in the corner." ~Ridder
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Re: STORY REVIEWS- (Today's Story- Runouw's Secrets)

Postby Kimonio » March 25th, 2010, 4:26 pm

Runouw's Forum: Review

By- Kimonio





The Plot: Okay, so like all stories, this is based on when the army of spambots, spammers and trolls attack at once. The mods and a few selected members are used to fight off the army and save the site.

THE GOOD: Good personalities, good descriptive writing, and great use of action. 10/10

THE BAD: At some point, when Nero was killed, you magically brought him back. But how? You were fighting Oren. Also, I got confused when I read about the merging. o_O......Meh, that's about it for me.


OVERALL: Meh. You got a good score. :D 10/10.
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Re: STORY REVIEWS- (Today's Story- Runouw's Secrets)

Postby Blablob » March 25th, 2010, 4:54 pm

I don't think it's fair to be reviewing your own stories, especially if you're gonna be rating 10's.
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Re: STORY REVIEWS- (Today's Story- Runouw's Secrets)

Postby MessengerOfDreams » March 25th, 2010, 5:00 pm

Which is why i need someone else to do it!
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My Most Recent Works: show
I switch my signature a lot. If you wanna see some of my past ones, here you go.
Silent Conversations and a Crow's Final Song!
My latest story, and one of my personal favorites. A girl bound in silence finds the words to say to her prospective girlfriend as they visit her religious father in a dusty town on the edge of Kansas, where the crows' migration south brings forth anchored memories, the path to resolution, and a new start.

Form (25quared)
This might be like nothing you've seen before.
Updated Works! Some of my past best and current stuff: show
Writing Works!
Fanfic: Shut Up and Dance
why do I write so much about dancing you don't dance you've never danced in your entire life
lying little ♥♥♥♥ with your ♥♥♥♥ story ♥♥♥♥ you
also Diddy/Lucina <3
Fanfic: Worth a Thousand Words
Because the world needed a Samus/Dedede story
Fanfic: Ecstatic Silence
Just wanted to write and ♥♥♥♥ like this happens, you'd think I'd know better.
Fanfic: Far From the Edge
It's a dance that's been a long time coming for a brand new man and an unchanging woman, but once one takes the plunge there's no falling back up.
Original: Jealous Ghosts of the Mississippi
The story of Rachel meeting Amber after a lifetime of silence and being shunned
Original: Your Hand in Mine
One of my most personal stories about a dangerous romance. Now to be published in a college lit journal!
-------------------------
Recent LDC Work:
Level Series: Leaves From The Vine (ft Star King)
For the 29th LDC, a theme of grassland taken through the growth of our designing society. Won the 29th LDC!
--
Levels at Large:
Level Topic: Collection of MoD's Levels!
If you've ever wanted to see any level I made worth a damn, go here! From the quiet 14th LDC entrant Finis to the megasmash level series Dark, you can find links here!
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Re: STORY REVIEWS- (Today's Story- Runouw's Secrets)

Postby Kimonio » March 25th, 2010, 7:15 pm

@Blab: So I made Runouw's Forum? Brandobrawl's epic story?.......Awesome. :)
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Re: STORY REVIEWS- (Today's Story- Runouw's Secrets)

Postby nin10mode » March 26th, 2010, 12:37 am

I think he's referring to Moy and his story, Kim.
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