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Re: Survivor- (Elimination Round+Bonus Twist)

Postby MICrophone » June 16th, 2010, 5:55 pm

MessengerOfYahweh wrote:BTW to help me manage Daily and TRC, I've hired Kimonio and Ridder to Co-write this with me.

MessengerOfYahweh wrote:Ridder

MessengerOfYahweh wrote:Ridder

:lol: :lol: :lol: :lol: :lol: :lol: :lol: :lol: :lol: :lol: :lol: :lol: :lol: :lol: :lol: :lol:

I literally just fell on the floor laughing. Have you no recollection of the last time you hired Ridder to aid you on a writing project? This story is now my favorite story on the forums just for the entertainment that will ensue:
Chat wrote:MOY: Ridder, story? :awe:
Ridder: ♥♥♥♥ off you judgmental being.




Wait, you want a real review? Fine…Buff & Mic convo = pretty good. Kirby's team convo = bleh. Boring…not as well developed. Pretty good though…7.5/10. :)
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Re: Survivor- (Elimination Round+Bonus Twist)

Postby Worst_master » June 17th, 2010, 4:29 am

Well, good! The converstation is very good! Also very long. I like this story because it is not all is chat, it have some intro and stuff on the first paragraphs.
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Re: Survivor- (Elimination Round+Bonus Twist)

Postby MessengerOfDreams » June 17th, 2010, 5:07 am

I cried laughing when I read that, but the truth is, I'm more worried about the likes of Lazy Kimonio. >_>
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Re: Survivor- (Elimination Round+Bonus Twist)

Postby Yoshi Boo 118 » June 17th, 2010, 6:01 am

I really like alliences, they make things more interesting. Keep up the good work! 8/10 :awe:
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Re: Survivor- (Elimination Round+Bonus Twist)

Postby YoshiKid54 » June 18th, 2010, 12:48 am

An excellent introduction, MoY.
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Re: Survivor- (Elimination Round+Bonus Twist)

Postby MessengerOfDreams » June 22nd, 2010, 5:28 pm

[size]REWARD CHALLENGE[/size]

As customary, the previous winning team came in first. Doram’s Tribe walked in, Doram wearing the immunity necklace. Runouw acknowledged them with a scowl and by yanking the necklace off of Doram’s neck.

Kirby’s team followed “And now we have Kirby’s team,” Runouw stated, “With Brandobrawl voted out last tribal council.” To Runouw’s annoyance, no one on Doram’s team really cared.

When both teams lined up, Runouw made the next announcement. “Well, guys, we got a busy day today. It’s a reward challenge, and boy is it a doozy. You’re going to each stand on a small pillar 10 feet in the air. The pillar’s gonna be about 1 foot in diameter for both feet up at the top, 3 feet in diameter at the bottom. At the bottom, those godforsaken health officials forced me to have the platforms nailed to the ground. Your job is to stay as balanced as you can for your team. Wanna know what you’re playing for?”

Everyone nodded at the same time.

Runouw pulled yet another cover off of a pile of stuff, which, upon its reveal, turned out to be…

“Bedding.” He said, grinning, “9 pillows and 9 blankets. Unless you’re up for sharing.”

Several team members gave him dirty looks.

“You sure?” He raised an eyebrow, smirking. “I can spot several of you who probably wouldn’t mind sharing depending on their neigh-“

Linkdroid took a pillow and threw it at Runouw, with a dirty look. “Get on with it, you brainless sludge.”

Runouw grinned. “Great attitude. Also, the winning tribe will send two of their members over to raid the other tribe’s things. They can take two things from the other tribe, anything they want. Also, the winning tribe sends someone from the losing tribe to something I forgot to mention- Exile Island.”

Aznchau gulped. “Exile Island, man? What’s that?”

“Exactly what it sounds like, my man.” Runouw replied. “You’re alone there until the next immunity challenge. But there’s a twist, which you’ll discover once you arrive. Enough of that, though, let’s get started on the fun part. Or at least it is to me. Watching you all fall!”

“God, we need a new host.” Linkdroid griped. For the first time, everyone agreed with her.

5 minutes later, everyone was standing on their stilt-type pillars. “Ready?” Runouw asked as the crew prepared to let go with their hands.

“No…” Kimonio said, struggling to get himself steady.

“Too bad!” Runouw said, grinning. “Go!”

As soon as they let go, Moy, Linkdroid, Avo, Azn and Kirby fell off of their platforms, Runouw rolling on the ground laughing. “That was great!” he said, laughing. “Encore!”

“I’m going to *%$&# SMOTHER you with this pillow!” Linkdroid yelled.

“Seriously!” Runouw laughed. “You gotta love that woman!”

The five fallen took a seat on the benches as the rest found their balance.

5 Minutes later, one of the platforms started to wobble. “Oh, crap.” Kim blurted out. “Oh, crap, oh crap, oh crap!” Then, the sound of someone falling was heard. “Hah!” Kim added. “24’s out! 24’s ou- WHOA!” he screamed as he fell onto the ground. 24 and Kim took a seat on the benches, heads in their hands.

Blablob, Nin10mode, Yoshi Boo 118, Niklaw and Fourinone were left for Kirby’s team, Doram, Mic, Buff, Aznchau, YoshiKid69 and Ridder were left for Doram’s team. The only ones truly stable were Doram and Blablob. Blablob was even waving at the crowd below, grinning. When Runouw looked at him, Blab flipped him the bird, smiling like a kid on Christmas Eve.

“Hey, you little punk!” Runouw started to bang on Blablob’s stand, wobbling it. Blablob responded by spitting next to him.

“Oh you immature little- get it out!” Runouw grimaced as he ran into the ocean, thinking some of it had gotten on him. Everyone laughed jovially, causing YoshiKid69, Aznchau and Ridder to fall off of their platforms.

Yoshi Boo 118 was the next to start wobbling. “Oh crap, crap crap!” she shouted. “Someone, distract me. Get my thoughts off of falling!”

“Oh, okay!” Nin10mode scrambled for an answer. “Uhm, how’s the weather?”

Yoshi Boo groaned. “That’s the best you got? Goddang it to heeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeee!” she screamed as she fell onto the ground face-first.

Nin10mode gasped, jumped down and surveyed YB. She was alive, thank God. “YB?” Ninny asked, turning her over gently.

YB managed a weak scowl. “Dude, you should have stayed up there.”

“She’s OK.” Nin10mode grinned.

“He’s over reactive.” Was Yoshi Boo’s revelation as she got up and stumbled to the seats, Nin10mode taking the seat next to her. She gave him an odd glance but didn’t mind.

And there they stood, Blablob, Fourinone and Niklaw for Kirby’s team, Doram, Mic and Buff for Doram’s team. And to make a long story short, that was how it remained for an hour. AN HOUR.

Then, a sudden gust came and knocked out Niklaw. Mic just plain old lost his balance. Fourinone was distracted by a bird and tried to catch it, causing her to fall off and Buffooner got dizzy from the heat and fell. That left Doram and Blablob.

Doram seemed unmovable, and Blablob was wavering. Blablob tried to steady himself when he got an idea. “Hey, Runouw!” He said, this time flipping him off with both hands.

Runouw walked over and kicked the stand. “Learn some respect, you little %*$@! I could have you booted at any moment!”

Doram chuckled at this predicament.

Blablob spit below him again, purposefully missing but causing Runouw to flip out again. “You little piece of spit! Get this off of me! I could get some sort of disease!”

Doram started laughing and in turn fell off the platform gracefully. “Goddang it, Kirby’s team wins!” Runouw called from the ocean. Blab leapt off of the stand and cheered with his team.

Doram walked over with a smile on his face and went straight to Blablob’s team. “Unusual technique,” he said, holding out a hand, “But well played. Congratulations.”

Blab wasn’t sure how to react, so he gave Doram an odd look and shook his hand.

Runouw gave each of the eight of their tribe a blanket and pillow. “Congrats, guys, I guess. Now pick who you’re sending to Exile Island.”

After a short discussion, the tribe announced “Ridder.”

Ridder moved over to a nearby boat, not showing any emotion as usual.

“Okay, now you guys, get lost.” Runouw griped, shoving Blablob forward a bit. He then faced Doram’s team and said “I’ve got nothing for you except nothing. Get back to camp.”
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also Diddy/Lucina <3

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Just wanted to write and ♥♥♥♥ like this happens, you'd think I'd know better.
Fanfic: Far From the Edge
It's a dance that's been a long time coming for a brand new man and an unchanging woman, but once one takes the plunge there's no falling back up.
Original: Jealous Ghosts of the Mississippi
The story of Rachel meeting Amber after a lifetime of silence and being shunned
Original: Your Hand in Mine
One of my most personal stories about a dangerous romance. Now to be published in a college lit journal!
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Recent LDC Work:
Level Series: Leaves From The Vine (ft Star King)
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Re: Survivor: Unknown

Postby MICrophone » June 22nd, 2010, 5:54 pm

This is decent…I like Runouw a lot, but it's starting to get repetitive…the challenges really aren't much for the reader to get excited about. Maybe it's just the type of thing that really ought to be seen rather than read, but maybe not…try and make the challenges more interesting.
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Re: Survivor: Unknown

Postby MessengerOfDreams » June 22nd, 2010, 5:55 pm

That's a problem I had, but I have no flash skills whatsoever. It'd be great as a flash show.

But here's the thing. Expect a lot of people cuts. I can't handle more than 10 very well.
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Fanfic: Shut Up and Dance
why do I write so much about dancing you don't dance you've never danced in your entire life
lying little ♥♥♥♥ with your ♥♥♥♥ story ♥♥♥♥ you
also Diddy/Lucina <3

Fanfic: Worth a Thousand Words
Because the world needed a Samus/Dedede story
Fanfic: Ecstatic Silence
Just wanted to write and ♥♥♥♥ like this happens, you'd think I'd know better.
Fanfic: Far From the Edge
It's a dance that's been a long time coming for a brand new man and an unchanging woman, but once one takes the plunge there's no falling back up.
Original: Jealous Ghosts of the Mississippi
The story of Rachel meeting Amber after a lifetime of silence and being shunned
Original: Your Hand in Mine
One of my most personal stories about a dangerous romance. Now to be published in a college lit journal!
-------------------------
Recent LDC Work:
Level Series: Leaves From The Vine (ft Star King)
For the 29th LDC, a theme of grassland taken through the growth of our designing society. Won the 29th LDC!
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Levels at Large:
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If you've ever wanted to see any level I made worth a damn, go here! From the quiet 14th LDC entrant Finis to the megasmash level series Dark, you can find links here!
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Re: Survivor: Unknown

Postby Kimonio » June 23rd, 2010, 12:05 pm

Kirby's Team


After their victory, everyone on Kirby's side of the island were throwing a party. They were making so much noise, Doram and the bunch had to go underwater just to get sleep.

While everyone danced and acted like idiots for winning, Kirby and Kim were sitting back, having a conversation. Kim appeared to not be paying attention, but he would always respond with an on-topic answer.

It wasn't until a few hours later that Kim decided to have some fun while everyone was sleeping.

He waited until everyone had closed their eyes before unleashing his major plan.

He did the rain dance.

Rain started pelting his co-members on any skin it could hit. Kirby cursed at Kim, who returned the thanks by flipping him off.

But the show wasn't over yet.

Kim climbed on top of a tree and started singing as loud as he could. What song was he singing exactly?

..........Barney and Friends.


He got as far as "Barney teaches lots of things, like how to play preteeeeeeend." before the team finally had enough. They all jumped from their beddings and ended up getting soaked by the pouring rain.

Kim just grinned and kept singing.

"Shut up already, Kim!", Nin10mode shouted up.

"Nu-uh! I want a toy first, Nanny!"

A few teammates began chuckling at this comeback, but that only made Mode more mad. He started picking up stones and throwing them up at the tree. All but one stone missed Kim, and that one stone got him in just the right spot.

He let go and fell on his back. All he could say was "My wee-wee", which pleased Mode.

The team, satisfied that they had shut Kim up for the night finally went to sleep.




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Re: Survivor: Unknown

Postby MessengerOfDreams » June 23rd, 2010, 12:07 pm

Pretty hilarious, and story building, only Doram's 10 miles away from Kirby's tribe. O_O
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Silent Conversations and a Crow's Final Song!
My latest story, and one of my personal favorites. A girl bound in silence finds the words to say to her prospective girlfriend as they visit her religious father in a dusty town on the edge of Kansas, where the crows' migration south brings forth anchored memories, the path to resolution, and a new start.

Form (25quared)
This might be like nothing you've seen before.
Updated Works! Some of my past best and current stuff: show
Writing Works!
Fanfic: Shut Up and Dance
why do I write so much about dancing you don't dance you've never danced in your entire life
lying little ♥♥♥♥ with your ♥♥♥♥ story ♥♥♥♥ you
also Diddy/Lucina <3

Fanfic: Worth a Thousand Words
Because the world needed a Samus/Dedede story
Fanfic: Ecstatic Silence
Just wanted to write and ♥♥♥♥ like this happens, you'd think I'd know better.
Fanfic: Far From the Edge
It's a dance that's been a long time coming for a brand new man and an unchanging woman, but once one takes the plunge there's no falling back up.
Original: Jealous Ghosts of the Mississippi
The story of Rachel meeting Amber after a lifetime of silence and being shunned
Original: Your Hand in Mine
One of my most personal stories about a dangerous romance. Now to be published in a college lit journal!
-------------------------
Recent LDC Work:
Level Series: Leaves From The Vine (ft Star King)
For the 29th LDC, a theme of grassland taken through the growth of our designing society. Won the 29th LDC!
--
Levels at Large:
Level Topic: Collection of MoD's Levels!
If you've ever wanted to see any level I made worth a damn, go here! From the quiet 14th LDC entrant Finis to the megasmash level series Dark, you can find links here!
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