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Pokémon SS: The adventure of a life!

Postby UsuarioTHf » May 28th, 2010, 6:29 pm

So, you remember my other story? It was cut off because of random light cut-offs. So, I got SoulSilver, and I'll make a story about it. Here's a description or a brief preview of the whole 1st chapter:
"So, Professor Elm told me to help him on something?Cool. Wonder what it will be."Told Usuario to himself. He walked out of the front door to Professor Elm's lab.
"I need you to give this egg to Mr. Pokémon."Asked Elm to Usuario.Usuario answered "Okay."
Coming back to Elm's lab, Usuario saw a familiar face. He easily recognized that person, as he hated that person...
"...Stuff can really change in a year, you know."Replied Usuario.
"...Use Tackle!"......Avoided the attack, unluckily for Usuario.
After saying bye to his mom, Usuario set on a journey to beat all 8 Johto Gym Leaders.


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Part 1: The Mystery Egg.

"...Use Fire Blast!"...Man. It just HAD to miss.
Hello. I'm Usuario. I'm fighting someone. However, you may ask how did I get here, right? It all started a long time ago. It started when I got my 1st Pokémon...

It was a normal morning like every normal morning seen in Johto. The Pidgeys were flying on the blue sky, the caves were so calm...But who cares, anyway. It was a simple morning. I woke up, put my normal clothes on and went downstairs. I said hi to my mom. She told me my friend Lyra was waiting for me outside, so I grabbed my hat and my bag and went outside my house.

Once I got outside, Lyra's Marill came over to me and hopped into me. "Marill! Even though that was fun, it's tiring, too!" said an extremely tired Lyra. "Oh, hi Usuario! Professor Elm told me to tell you to visit his lab, as he needs help for something. Not sure for what." I was pretty excited. "So, Professor Elm told me to help him on something? Cool. Wonder what it will be," Usuario told himself. He walked to Professor Elm's lab, which was to the right of his house. Pretty close, huh?

???: Wai-wai-wait. Why did you all of a sudden start talking in 3rd person?
Me: Well, I got a narrator to tell the long story. Anyways, keep talking narrator.

Usuario walked into Elm's lab. "Hello, Usuario! So, ready to help me?" greeted Elm."Why not?" replied Usuario. "Good. You see, a while ago, Professor Oak gave me this egg, and I need you to take it to Mr. Pokémon."
"...Can't he just go to Mr. Pokémon's house by himself?" asked Usuario. Elm replied, "I was coming to that part. You see, Professor Oak knows that I'm researching of the bond of Walking Pokémon and their trainer, so he gave me the egg so a trainer would deliver it to Mr. Pokémon. I choose you to go and give the egg to Mr. Pokémon."
Usuario replied, "But I'm no-" Elm interrupted him and said, "I was GOING to that part. I'll give you a Pokémon so you can go trough the routes safely, as it's dangerous to go without Pokémon because wild Pokémon may attack you out of the nowhere. You may choose from 3 Pokémon. Chikorita, Cyndaquil or Totodile. Come here. I'll show you the starters."

Usuario followed him. He saw Cyndaquil and thought, "It seems too overselected for some reason." He looked at Totodile and thought, "He looks too...Crocodiley...Wait. Did I just make that up?" He finally put his eyes on Chikorita. "Nice. Not so overused, not so animally. I made that up?...Awesome!" Usuario told Professor Elm he wanted Chikorita. Once Cyndaquil and Totodile heard that, they sadly went into their Pokéballs. "Here, take the Egg Professor Oak gave me. Now, Mr Pokémon's house is on Route 30. There's where you have to go and deliver the egg." Elm gave Usuario the egg. Usuario left Elm's lab with his Chikorita following from behind.

Lyra saw Usuario getting out of Elm's lab with his Chikorita following from behind. "Hey, Usuario! Nice Chikorita! You should show it to your mom!" Lyra said to Usuario. "Well, I was going to do so, as I have to go to deliver this Egg to Mr. Pokémon." Usuario told Lyra. "Well, see you later." Usuario walked to his house, told his mom everything, and she answered, "Well, okay, but be careful! I'll give you 5 Potions. If your Pokémon feels tired, just give him one, and it will be just fine."
"Thanks mom, bye!" Usuario replied as he walked out of his house.

Usuario didn't know that this would be the start of a new adventure, with surprises, lots of battles, trust, friendship, and a rivalry with some old person he hated...

Part 2: The Grooving Cherry.
Usuario went trough Route 29, defeating Pokémon with his trusted Chikorita. He tried to catch a Pidgey, however, he didn't have any Pokéballs. He also saw an Apricorn, but he thought, "I don't have a place to store them, so why bothering getting one?" After some battles and some talking to trainers, he finally got to Cherrygrove City. As he entered, an old man saw Usuario's face, and he somehow noticed Usuario was a beginner trainer.

The old man walked to Usuario and told him, "Hello, trainer! I bet you don't know about Pokémon Centers or Pokémon Marts! You want me to introduce them to you?" Usuario, with a "What a weirdo" tone said "Okaaay..."
"Then, folow me!" said the energetic old man. He ran to the front of a building with an orange roof, while Usuario, compared to the old man, slowly tried to keep with him.

"This is the Pokémon Center. Here you can heal your Pokémon and trade Pokémon with friends." He then continued to a building with a blue roof, and again, Usuario tried to keep up. "This is the Pokémon Mart, or Pokémart for short. Here you can buy items for catching Pokémon, for healing your Pokémon, or even to prevent that any wild Pokémon from showing up!"

The old man ran to his house, and again, Usuario really slowly walked there. "This is my house. If you need any help, come see me." The old man quickly ran to Cherrygrove City's north exit, and when Usuario got there, he almost fell on the floor because he was pretty tired. "This is Cherrygrove City's exit to Route 30. Now, since you did well keeping up, I'll give you some Running Shoes." Usuario, with an exhausted voice, said, "Oh god finally."

He put the Running Shoes and went right away in Route 30 while saying, "Now to deliver that Egg to Mr. Pokémon!"
The old man then told to himself "...Hold on, those were my Running Shoes! Who cares. Funny, some while ago, my son made a song about some kid delivering an egg to Mr. Pokémon and he has it on his laptop that I hav-...WHERE'S THE LAPTOP?!"

While on Route 30, Usuario is transferring that song into his MP3. "Well, I'll hurry up and give the Laptop to the old man."
...Some while later, the old man sees the laptop in his backpack, while Usuario goes through Route 30 with his MP3, hearing that song.

He is a trainer with an important mission
He must deliver a really mysterious egg
His objective is a house in Route 30!
He's got some running shoes, given by an old man.

He has a Chikorita, and I bet you a fiver
His mission is gonna be successful
He is too young to drive a car
However he's not young to run

Aw yeah, I'll bet you a fiver!
That he'll be successful

Ooh-ooh-ooh, ooh-ooh-ooh, ooh-ooh! Woo!


Part 3: Apricorns and a Pokédex
After walking and fighting for a long while, Usuario finally got to a house. "Finally! Mr. Pokémon's house!" He entered the house and he saw an old man. "Oh, hello! If you're searching for Mr. Pokémon's house, it's not here. people confuse this house for Mr. Pokémon's house a lot," said the old man. "Aww," Usuario, disappointed, was about to leave the house until the old man yelled "Wait! I can give you something!" "What is it? Hurry up, I've got to deliver an egg."

The old man said, "Well, you know about Apricorns, right? You can't take them normally, but with THIS Apricorn Box, you can hold up like 99 Apricorns of each color! You want it?" "...Well, sure!" said Usuario while he grabbed the Apricorn Box and walked out of the house.
Usuario, again, walked, fought and saw a trainer battle until he found another house. "Hope this is Mr. Pokémon's house," Usuario entered that house. He saw Mr. Pokemon. "Are you Mr. Pokemon?" asked Usuario. "Why, yes I am," replied Mr. Pokemon. "What do you need, little young trainer?"

"Well, you see, Professor Elm told me to give you an egg. Here you go!" Usuario gave the egg to Mr. Pokemon. Mr. Pokemon noticed the egg was hatching and he put it on a desk. The egg hatched into a Sentret! Usuario saw it, and then Professor Oak went into the house. "Hello, Mr. Pokemon! Oh, you must be Usuario. Professor Elm has told me about you," said Oak. "Hello, Professor Oak. So, you're called Usuario? Usuario, would you deliver this egg to Professor Elm?" asked Mr. Pokemon.

"Well, okay," replied Usuario. Just before he walked outside of the house, Oak yelled, "Wait! Do you have a Pokedex?" Usuario's reply was "No."
"As I said, Elm has told me alot about you. You could go and fill the Pokedex so you could help me on my research. I'll give you one," Oak told Usuario. He gave him a Pokedex, and then Usuario left.

Part 4: Rise of a Rival
Usuario, after leaving Mr. Pokémon's house, ran to New Bark Town. He healed his Pokémon while he was at Cherrygrove City, and then went down the ledges again. Just when he was about to enter New Bark Town, he saw a familiar face. He easily recognized that person, as he hated that person...

"Andrea," said Usuario with a challenging tone. Usuario saw Andrea running from Elm's lab, dashing to get out of New Bark Town. Andrea bumped with Usuario, and they both fell to the ground. "Ow! Watch where you run!" said Usuario, and Andrea replied, "You watch where you st-" She stopped when she saw that she had bumped with Usuario. "Usuario?! What are you doing here?!" asked Andrea in a shocked impression.

"Well, I come here because I'm on summer vacation, but what are YOU doing here? All the 5 years I've been here in Johto while in the 104 days of summer vacation, I haven't seen you!" replied Usuario. Andrea aggressively replied, "That's not of your matter! Now, get out of my way or else I'll beat you up with that Cyndaquil I stole from that useless professor!" She sent out 'her' Cyndaquil.

Usuario said, "Whoa, Andrea. How did you get so aggressive in so small tim-...You stole Professor Elm's Cyndaquil?! I'm not gonna let you get away with this!" Usuario then told Chikorita to get ready to battle. "Cyndaquil, use Tackle!" "Chikorita, avoid!" Chikorita barely avoided.

"Now, Chikorita, counterattack with your own Tackle!" "Cyndaquil, avoid and use Tackle!" Cyndaquil avoided the attack, unluckily for Usuario. However, Cyndaquil had jumped in the air, and Usuario used that to his advantage. "Avoid that Tackle, Chikorita!" Chikorita avoided the attack, and the result was Cyndaquil smacking his head against the floor.

"...I got it! Cyndaquil, try to spin like a wheel while using Tackle to make a move like a Tackle Wheel!" Cyndaquil manages to do so. "Chikorita, run! RUN!" Chikorita fled from the bowling ball that was Cyndaquil. Oddly enough, some guys close by were singing a song...

Pin, pin, pin, pin-bowlin' along
Doo doo doo doo, doo doo doo doo
Yeah!
Pin, pin, pin, pin-bowlin' along
Doo doo doo doo, doo doo doo doo doo doo
Better put your quarter in and take me for a spin,
But you gotta pull the lever back before we begin,
We'll take a trip or two around the table
Before we drop.

Keep your fingers on the flippers and your eye on the ball
We'll be bouncing off the bumpers
And banging off the walls
Gonna run the score up so high
You'd think your ears are gonna pop
And we ain't never gonna tilt
Cause, baby, that's not the way we're built.

We're gonna pin, pin, pin, pin-bowlin' along
Doo doo doo doo, doo doo doo doo doo doo
Pin, pin, pin, pin-bowlin' along
Doo doo doo doo, doo doo doo doo doo doo
Pin-bowlin' along
Doo doo doo doo, doo doo doo doo doo doo
Pin-bowlin' along
Doo doo doo doo, doo doo doo doo doo doo
Pin-bowlin'
Yeah!

After a minute of running, Cyndaquil finally hit Chikorita, doing Chikorita severe damage. "Chikorita!" yelled Usuario while worried. "Well, time to finish this little battle once and for al-" She was interrupted when Chikorita was surrounded by a green aura. "Could it be?" asked Usuario to himself. "It can't be..." said Andrea to herself in a worried tone.

Chikorita had activated his ability, Overgrow! Chikorita jumped out really high, and to Usuario's surprise, he used Razor Leaf! It harshly hurt Cyndaquil, which left it pretty weak. "Chikorita, finish this with a Tackle!" Cyndaquil tried to do what Chikorita did before: Running. However, Overgrow made Chikorita faster, and Cyndaquil was hit, making Cyndaquil faint.

"Cyndaquil! Return! ..Ugh, you may have won this time, but I swear, the next time we battle, I'll win! I SWEAR!" yelled Andrea while she rushed out of New Bark Town. "Man. She changed ALOT," Usuario told himself. He then entered Elm's lab, and then he saw some Police officers in there. "So, I heard a girl stole a Cyndaquil," Usuario told Elm. "Well, how do you know? Did you fight her?" asked Elm.

Usuario's reply was: "Yes. Yes I did. And I have more useful information." Elm asked what it was, and then Usuario replied:
"Well, as a matter of fact, I do know that girl. Her name is Andrea. I know her from the Sinnoh region, and she's my classmate. On summer vacation, I come here to the Johto region. When I'm not on vacation, me and my mom go to a house at Jubilife City. Yes, we study at Jubilife City in the faraway Sinnoh Region. She's one of the populars on the classroom. I once had a crush on her, but then I noticed her selfish soul inside of her and I snapped out of it. For some reason, I started calling her a "Frierival" which meant she was my friend and my rival. However, now it gets me to think we're enemies again, as how she threated me. Oh, Mr. Pokemon told me to give you this egg."

Usuario gave the egg to Professor Elm, and at that time, he suggested that Usuario should go trough the Johto region to get all 8 Gym Leader badges and then challenge the Johto League. "Well, why not? I've nothing else to do this summer," replied Usuario. "Well, bye Professor Elm!" said Usuario while leaving the lab. He told his mom what he was going to do. Her mom let him do that, she gave him a badge case, and like every mother says to their child that's about to go on an adventure trough a region, she said, "Be careful!"

After saying bye to his mom, Usuario set on a journey to beat all 8 Johto Gym Leaders.
END OF CHAPTER 1.

Planned Johto chapters:
-The winds of a new adventure!(Page 1, it's on top of this.)
-Flying on the Bellsprout!(Page 2)
-Bugging Team Rocket!(Page 2)
-The biggest normal rod challenge!
-Ghostly legends awaken!
-Fighting on the sea!
-The Port of Steel!
-The Blizzard of Ice!
-The Golden Team Rocket Strikes Back!
-How to Beat that Dragon!
-The way of the Champion!

Pages are determinated by the default "10 posts per page" thing.

...Updated when I can.
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Re: Pokémon SS: The adventure of a life!

Postby YoshiKid54 » May 28th, 2010, 6:41 pm

So far the story is good.
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Re: Pokémon SS: The adventure of a life!

Postby SuperStar X » May 29th, 2010, 3:28 pm

Same here
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Re: Pokémon SS: The adventure of a life!

Postby SammerGuy » May 30th, 2010, 4:02 pm

I like it so far. Make some more, comrade.
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Re: Pokémon SS: The adventure of a life!

Postby Zunar » May 30th, 2010, 4:04 pm

You need an editor. Lots of grammatical errors. I'm up for the job if you need me! :)

Usuario THf wrote:So, you remember my other story? It was cut off because of random light cut-offs. So, I got SoulSilver, and I'll make a story about it. Here's a description or a brief preview of the whole 1st chapter:
"So, Professor Elm told me to help him on something? Cool. Wonder what it will be." Usuario told himself. He walked out of the front door to Professor Elm's lab.
"I need you to give this egg to Mr. Pokémon," Elm told Usuario. Usuario answered "Okay."
Coming back to Elm's lab, Usuario saw a familiar face. He easily recognized that person, as he hated that person...
"...stuff can really change in a year, you know," said Usuario.
"...Use Tackle!" The person avoided the attack, unluckily for Usuario.
After saying bye to his mom, Usuario set on a journey to beat all 8 Johto Gym Leaders.


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Part 1: The Mystery Egg.

"...Use Fire Blast!"...Man. It just HAD to miss.
Hello. I'm Usuario. I'm fighting someone. However, you may ask how did I get here, right? It all started a long time ago. It started when I got my 1st Pokémon...

It was a normal morning like every normal morning seen in Johto. The Pidgeys were flying on the blue sky, the caves were so calm...But who cares, anyway. It was a simple morning. I woke up, put my normal clothes on and went downstairs. I said hi to my mom. She told me my friend Lyra was waiting for me outside, so I grabbed my hat and my bag and went outside my house. Once I got outside, Lyra's Marill came over to me and hopped into me. "Marill! Even though that was fun, it's tiring, too!" said an extremely tired Lyra. "Oh, hi Usuario! Professor Elm told me to tell you to visit his lab, as he needs help for something. Not sure for what." I was pretty excited. "So, Professor Elm told me to help him on something? Cool. Wonder what it will be," Usuario told himself. He walked to Professor Elm's lab, which was to the right of his house. Pretty close, huh?
???: Wai-wai-wait. Why you stopped talking on 3rd person or something like that?
Me: Well, I got a narrator to tell the long story. Anyways, keep talking narrator.

Usuario walked into Elm's lab. "Hello, Usuario! So, ready to help me?" greeted Elm."Why not?" replied Usuario. "Good. You see, a while ago, Professor Oak gave me this egg, and I need you to take it to Mr. Pokémon."
"...Can't he just go to Mr. Pokémon's house by himself?" asked Usuario. Elm replied, "I was coming to that part. You see, Professor Oak knows that I'm researching of the bond of Walking Pokémon and their trainer, so he gave me the egg so a trainer would deliver it to Mr. Pokémon. I choose you to go and give the egg to Mr. Pokémon."
Usuario replied, "But I'm no-" Elm interrupted him and said, "I was GOING to that part. I'll give you a Pokémon so you can go trough the routes safely, as it's dangerous to go without Pokémon because wild Pokémon may attack you out of the nowhere. You may choose from 3 Pokémon. Chikorita, Cyndaquil or Totodile. Come here. I'll show you the starters." Usuario followed him. He saw Cyndaquil and thought, "It seems too overselected for some reason." He looked at Totodile and thought, "He looks too...Crocodiley...Wait. Did I just make that up?" He finally put his eyes on Chikorita. "Nice. Not so overused, not so animally. I made that up?...Awesome!" Usuario told Professor Elm he wanted Chikorita. Once Cyndaquil and Totodile heard that, they sadly went into their Pokéballs. "Here, take the Egg Professor Oak gave me. Now, Mr Pokémon's house is on Route 30. There's where you have to go and deliver the egg." Elm gave Usuario the egg. Usuario left Elm's lab with his Chikorita following from behind. Lyra saw Usuario getting out of Elm's lab with his Chikorita following from behind. "Hey, Usuario! Nice Chikorita! You should show it to your mom!" Lyra said to Usuario. "Well, I was going to do so, as I have to go to deliver this Egg to Mr. Pokémon." Usuario told Lyra."Well, see you later." Usuario walked to his house, told his mom everything, and she answered, "Well, okay, but be careful! I'll give you 5 Potions. If your Pokémon feels tired, just give him one, and it will be just fine."
"Thanks mom, bye!" Usuario replied as he walked out of his house.
Usuario didn't know that this would be the start of a new adventure, with surprises, lots of battles, trust, friendship, and a rivalry with some old person he hated...
Part 2: The Grooving Cherry.
Usuario went trough Route 29, defeating Pokémon with his trusted Chikorita. He tried to catch a Pidgey, however, he didn't have any Pokéballs. He also saw an Apricorn, but he thought, "I don't have a place to store them, so why bothering getting one?" After some battles and some talking to trainers, he finally got to Cherrygrove City. As he entered, an old man saw Usuario's face, and he somehow noticed Usuario was a beginner trainer. The old man walked to Usuario and told him, "Hello, trainer! I bet you don't know about Pokémon Centers or Pokémon Marts! You want me to introduce them to you?" Usuario, with a "What a weirdo" tone said "Okaaay..."
"Then, folow me!" said the energetic old man. It rushed in the front of a building with an orange roof, while Usuario, compared to the old man, slowly tried to keep with him. "This is the Pokémon Center. Here you can heal your Pokémon and trade Pokémon with friends." He then continued to a building with a blue roof, and again, Usuario tried to keep up. "This is the Pokémon Mart, or Pokémart for short. Here you can buy items for catching Pokémon, for healing your Pokémon, or even to prevent that any wild Pokémon from showing up!" The old man ran to his house, and again, Usuario really slowly walked there. "This is my house. If you need any help, come see me." The old man quickly ran to Cherrygrove City's north exit, and when Usuario got there, he almost fell on the floor because he was pretty tired. "This is Cherrygrove City's exit to Route 30. Now, since you did well keeping up, I'll give you some Running Shoes." Usuario, with an exhausted voice, said, "Oh god finally." He put the Running Shoes and went right away in Route 30 while saying, "Now to deliver that Egg to Mr. Pokémon!"
The old man then told to himself "...Hold on, those were my Running Shoes! Who cares. Funny, some while ago, my son made a song about some kid delivering an egg to Mr. Pokémon and he has it on his laptop that I hav-...WHERE'S THE LAPTOP!"
While on Route 30, Usuario is transferring that song into his MP3. "Well, I'll hurry up and give the Laptop to the old man."
...Some while later, the old man sees the laptop in his backpack, while Usuario goes through Route 30 with his MP3, hearing that song.

He is a trainer with an important mission
He must deliver a really mysterious egg
His objective is a house in Route 30!
He's got some running shoes, given by an old man.

He has a Chikorita, and I bet you a fiver
His mission is gonna be successful
He is too young to drive a car
However he's not young to run

Aw yeah, I'll bet you a fiver!
That he'll be successful

Ooh-ooh-ooh, ooh-ooh-ooh, ooh-ooh! Woo!

Part 3: Apricorns and a Pokédex
Coming soon...


Planned Johto chapters:
-The Winds of a New Adventure!
-Flying on the Bellsprout!
-Bugging Team Rocket!
-The Biggest Normal Rod Challenge!
-Ghostly Legends Awaken!
-Fighting on the Sea!
-The Port of Steel!
-The Blizzard of Ice!
-The Golden Team Rocket Strikes Back!
-How to Beat that Dragon!
-The Way of the Champion!


...And chapters will have their pictures too!


Here, this is edited. Hope you like! And I didn't understand about the laptop and the MP3 player. Did Usuario steal the laptop, get the song, and return the laptop? If not, then what happened there?
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Re: Pokémon SS: The adventure of a life!

Postby SuperStar X » May 30th, 2010, 5:33 pm

i like it so far....good luck
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Re: Pokémon SS: The adventure of a life!

Postby Worst_master » June 5th, 2010, 7:35 pm

Good good good...... But, my eyes almost bleeeeeed.......The words is sticky.
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Re: Pokémon SS: The adventure of a life!

Postby UsuarioTHf » June 5th, 2010, 7:53 pm

Zunar wrote:You need an editor. Lots of grammatical errors. I'm up for the job if you need me! :)
And I didn't understand about the laptop and the MP3 player. Did Usuario steal the laptop, get the song, and return the laptop? If not, then what happened there?

1: Well, note: turn on Mozilla Firefox's spellchecker-Wait...How do I do that?...My native language isn't English anyways. And I did notice some mispells, but was too lazy to edit them at the moment.
2: Yes. Yes he did. He did steal the laptop, get the song, and return the laptop.
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Re: Pokémon SS: The adventure of a life!

Postby Zunar » June 7th, 2010, 12:45 pm

Well, send me new chapters so they can be edited, if you want me to be editor.
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Re: Pokémon SS: The adventure of a life!

Postby Zunar » June 7th, 2010, 12:50 pm

Here, I edited!

Part 3: Apricorns and a Pokédex

After walking and fighting for a long while, Usuario finally got to a house. "Finally! Mr. Pokémon's house!" He entered the house and he saw an old man. "Oh, hello! If you're searching for Mr. Pokémon's house, it's not here. People confuse this house for Mr. Pokémon's house a lot." said the old man. "Aww," Usuario responded, disappointed. He was about to get out of the house until the old man yelled, "Wait! I can give you something!" "What is it? Hurry up, I've got to deliver an egg."
The old man said, "Well, you know about Apricorns, right? You can't take them normally, but with THIS Apricorn Box, you can hold up like 99 Apricorns of each color! You want it?" "...Well, sure!" replied Usuario. He grabbed the Apricorn Box and walked out of the house.
Usuario again, walked, fought and saw a trainer battle until he found another house. "I hope this is Mr. Pokémon's house." Usuario entered that house. He saw Mr. Pokemon. "Are you Mr. Pokemon?" asked Usuario."Why, yes I am," replied Mr. Pokemon. "What do you need, little young trainer?"
"Well, you see, Professor Elm told me to give you an egg. Here you go!" Usuario gave the egg to Mr. Pokemon. Mr. Pokemon noticed the egg was hatching and he put it on a desk. The egg hatched into a Sentret! Usuario saw it, and then Professor Oak went into the house. "Hello, Mr. Pokemon! Oh, you must be Usuario. Professor Elm has told me about you," said Oak. "Hello, Professor Oak. So, you're called Usuario? Usuario, would you deliver this egg to Professor Elm?" asked Mr. Pokemon.
"Well, okay," replied Usuario. Just before he walked outside of the house, Oak yelled, "Wait! Do you have a Pokedex?" Usuario's reply was "No."
"As I said, Elm has told me alot about you. You could go and fill the Pokedex so you could help me on my research. I'll give you one." Oak told Usuario. He gave him a Pokedex, and then Usuario left.

Part 4: Rise of a Rival
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