Fix that error! (forum game)

[Sonicfan253]

This is a forum game where I give you a chapter of a random story, and you have to fix the errors I have made on Perpose.

Players:
Kirby_999


ROUND 1

CHAPTER ONE




There was something abuzz in the chatroom or the Anti-Spam Society headquarters. Everyone was suspicious of Ridder's sudden disappearance from the group. All they knew was that he found their ideas to be stupid when it came to killing the spammers.

And yet, there was still another topic to discus.

Fourinone had told the group that Kimonio was designing weapons that would aid them should a war break out. He said that he had sent Marioiscool to do exploration involving TheBetterGamer's job. Recently, TBG had retired as he felt that war was getting to him. They had already lost 24Murph and Bowserban to previous encounters, with which MIC and Brandbrawl had retold. They figured MIC was making this up as they all knew that Runouw wasn't a microchip. But still, they needed TBG. He was clearly the only member of the squad who could sneak into cities undetected, appearing as that of a regular lunatic, the best way to infiltrate spam plans.

Superyoshi slammed his hand on the table."This is taking to long! Runouw, clearly Kimonio was lying about this NEW WEAPON idea thing! You know how he always submitted those test blueprints for his battle plan series too early, showing flaws! How can we trust him

Runouw held up a hand, sternly meaning that Suyo should calm down."Kim has told me of his theories. I must say that although TBG had a very scientific theory, Kim was able to piece together myths very astoundingly. Plus, I saw his ideas for the secret weapon..."

Niklaws eyes widened."......Secret.....weapon? You mean that the weapons we used against SuperZario's spam army weren't secret?!"

Four and Suyo started to glare at the door, ready to kill Kim when he walked in

Runouw chuckld."Oh, they were secret enough! But from the plans I viewed, this weapon could be the best out of all the weapons!"

Suddenly the door to the chatroom flung open and Kimonio rushed in, gasping for air. In his hand he held a diamond container in which was......


"A BULLET?! THAT IS THE SECRET WEAPON?!" Suyo gaped at Runouw, who in told told him to shut up and listen to Kim.

Kimonio finally caught his breath and placed the box on the table."My dear comrades, what I have brought unto you is not a bullet, but a nuclear anti-spam bullet!"

Four stared at Kim."........But it's a bullet.>_>"

Kim nodded.

"......And it goes into our BASIC Spammist Guns like usual ones, huh"

Kim shook his head."Fals. I tested the bullets with hundreds of guns, and only guns that were made of diamond appeared to withstand the nuclear energy the formula I used could handle the bullets."

Niklaw stared at the diamond."Aye, I see now. But have you tested it out on the spammers?"

Kim grinned."Heck no! You and MIC always beat me! So in order for testing.......

He tossed it to Niklaw who in turn couldn't grip it.

The container began plummeting to the ground, close to Nik's feet.

Kim flinched, praying for the worst to not happen.

Just then, a hand caught the diamond.

Runouw straightened up and sighed."I'll be testing this on whatever bots we have left in the testing grounds....what exactly will happen though?"

Kim frowned."It isn't pretty...." He pulled up the sleeve to his ar.

The group gasped at what they saw.

In the place of the human arm was that of a mutant one. The skin was scaly and black. The fingers were rotted to the flesh and the bones were showing. The veins now were a ghastly color of white. And in the place of the fingernails were red claws.

Kim sighed."I was mixing the solution together and poured the water into the acid...."

MIC, who was sitting beside Buffooner, groaned. He knew what happened.

"....instead of the acid into the water. Of course, this wasn't regular acid. I had Buff go to Mount St. Helens and extract lava. Then I mixed the lava with acid......which produced the chemical used for the bullets."

Runouw frowned and glanced at the bullet."But what will happen if the bullet touches the spambot?"

Kim sighed and looked out the window."I was testing to see if I could reverse the negative ions of spambot blood to positive ions by using the solution.....but it appears I still need testing."

Niklaw nodded and looked to MIC."Now that the case of the.....SECRET WEAPON....has been discussed, what is TBG up to?"

Kim grinned and sat down."Now that I can answer! He is trying to be the mascot for the Tavern, Nik! "






Find all the errors before the deadline! April 27, 2010

[Canine]

There was something abuzz in the chat room or the Anti-Spam Society headquarters. Everyone was suspicious of Ridder's sudden disappearance from the group. All they knew was that he found their ideas to be stupid when it came to killing the spammers.

And yet, there was still another topic to discus.

Fourinone had told the group that Kimonio was designing weapons that would aid them should a war break out. He said that he had sent marioiscool to do exploration involving TheBetterGamer's job. Recently, TBG had retired as he felt that war was getting to him. They had already lost 24murph and bowserbane to previous encounters, with which MIC and brandobrawl had retold. They figured MIC was making this up as they all knew that Runouw wasn't a microchip. But still, they needed TBG. He was clearly the only member of the squad who could sneak into cities undetected, appearing as that of a regular lunatic, the best way to infiltrate spam plans.

Superyoshi slammed his hand on the table."This is taking to long! Runouw, clearly Kimonio was lying about this NEW WEAPON idea thing! You know how he always submitted those test blueprints for his battle plan series too early, showing flaws! How can we trust him?

Runouw held up a hand, sternly meaning that Suyo should calm down."Kim has told me of his theories. I must say that although TBG had a very scientific theory, Kim was able to piece together myths very astoundingly. Plus, I saw his ideas for the secret weapon..."

Niklaws eyes widened."......Secret.....weapon? You mean that the weapons we used against SuperZario's spam army weren't secret?!"

Four and Suyo started to glare at the door, ready to kill Kim when he walked in

Runouw chuckled."Oh, they were secret enough! But from the plans I viewed, this weapon could be the best out of all the weapons!"

Suddenly the door to the chat room flung open and Kimonio rushed in, gasping for air. In his hand he held a diamond container in which was......


"A BULLET?! THAT IS THE SECRET WEAPON?!" Suyo gaped at Runouw, who in told told him to shut up and listen to Kim.

Kimonio finally caught his breath and placed the box on the table."My dear comrades, what I have brought unto you is not a bullet, but a nuclear anti-spam bullet!"

Four stared at Kim."........But it's a bullet.>_>"

Kim nodded.

"......And it goes into our BASIC Spammist Guns like usual ones, huh"

Kim shook his head."False. I tested the bullets with hundreds of guns, and only guns that were made of diamond appeared to withstand the nuclear energy the formula I used could handle the bullets."

Niklaw stared at the diamond."Aye, I see now. But have you tested it out on the spammers?"

Kim grinned."Heck no! You and MIC always beat me! So in order for testing.......

He tossed it to Niklaw who in turn couldn't grip it.

The container began plummeting to the ground, close to Niklaw's feet.

Kim flinched, praying for the worst to not happen.

Just then, a hand caught the diamond.

Runouw straightened up and sighed."I'll be testing this on whatever bots we have left in the testing grounds....what exactly will happen though?"

Kim frowned."It isn't pretty...." He pulled up the sleeve to his ar.

The group gasped at what they saw.

In the place of the human arm was that of a mutant one. The skin was scaly and black. The fingers were rotted to the flesh and the bones were showing. The veins now were a ghastly color of white. And in the place of the fingernails were red claws.

Kim sighed."I was mixing the solution together and poured the water into the acid...."

MIC, who was sitting beside Buffooner, groaned. He knew what happened.

"....instead of the acid into the water. Of course, this wasn't regular acid. I had Buff go to Mount St. Helens and extract lava. Then I mixed the lava with acid......which produced the chemical used for the bullets."

Runouw frowned and glanced at the bullet."But what will happen if the bullet touches the spambot?"

Kim sighed and looked out the window."I was testing to see if I could reverse the negative ions of spambot blood to positive ions by using the solution.....but it appears I still need testing."

Niklaw nodded and looked to MIC."Now that the case of the.....SECRET WEAPON....has been discussed, what is TBG up to?"

Kim grinned and sat down."Now that I can answer! He is trying to be the mascot for the Tavern, Niklaw! "


There.

[Sonicfan253]

O_O

Well I guess its your turn. Kirby,

[MessengerOfDreams]

Maybe this should be in stories?


Just saying, And feel free to use any of my stories, if copywright is an issue.