Thwomp Tower Galaxy

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Thwomp Tower Galaxy
Star 1: To the Top of the Tower

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Just A regular level. However, here is a review.

+ No Lag
+ Size
+ Other

- Thwomp Layout
- Some Bad Tiling

Overall Rating: 3/5

[Republic]

Level to be reviewed: Thwomp Tower Galaxy

Sorry of being a bit harsh, but if I don't you can't get to moral/lesson.

FUN: 1.25/2
The level isn't very bad, but not really very very good. Firstly, from the start to the end, what's you have is just crashing thwomps. Yes, your idea is thwomps, your title is also Thwomp Tower Galaxy, but you can't only do thwomps as the idea. You can use more function of thwomps. Not just letting them moving around. More function like let them ot talk, or add some storyline as this is a part of your level series. Secondly, the red coin searching idea was good, however, they're too easy to get. They're not supposed for us to get them as yellow coin right? We need to have some challenge and difficulty. Moreover, the lag is too heavy as I doesn't recongize I've moved. And the level actually is a bit short, you can make it a bit bigger, which you supposed to do, read forward.

(I put it here to link them up, I don't want to put in other)

What I've thought is: it is not a galaxy, there's only one semi-demi-hemi-mini-mini-mini-planet, and a air-ship like stuff. Style of your level is extremely important. You said it is a galaxy, then you've to make a galaxy, but you just make two stuff floating in the space. You need more planets, like some thwomp planets, thwomp towers on the planets. They're very important for a galaxy, without planets you can't do a galaxy. What is it? It is a Space Thwomp Tower. Not Thwomp Tower Galaxy.

Back to FUN topic, I don't think it is really fun, as I said, you only have the idea of thwomps, you don't have another idea. So, the level will be very tedious, even you have how many sets of thwomp, even how much effort you've given to do in the thwomp, it will be even more tedious if there's lagging. For fun, you can take up the challenge of more hidden red coins, 100 coins challenge. And some glitches usage.

Also, you have to guide people where's the shine, how to you get them as an objective (as I said in overall). People maybe will confused if your level is bigger, even your level is very small, you are also supposed to guide them. This can show your carefulness. But at the end, shooting to the shine is really special.

Graphics: 1.25/2
Firstly, there's a mini planet as a introduction of the level, you also used a cannon-shoot as the starting of the level, there's also a sling star, which is completely merge with the galaxy topic, if you use more, I'll give you more marks. That planet is well-looked on each side. You have nearly used all tiles in the category Jungle Tile. Secondly, the item placement is quite good, they don't overlap or bad-placed like mad. The coins are also placed goodly, althrough there is some double-overlapping coins. I recommend you to sever them up or delete some of them and replace with blue coins, to reduce the level of lag. But I still like the function of the coins.The thwomp placement and setting is even better! They're set very well. Thridly, you've use various types of tiles. They don't cut-off. However, this advantage is also a disadvantage, the airship of thwomps is too colorful .Too, too colorful. I'm imagining as if I'm standing on a rainbow.

There's also some deocrations, like the fence on the top and some twisted tree on the bottom. But is that enough? Althrough it's in the space, you still need some logical and appropriate decorations. But watch out the lag. You can control them by using some tricks.

However, the top of the "tower" isn't decorated well, as you only used one orange roof, there's also nothing there. I just see there's a big orange triangle. Also, when the thwomp spin and you grab the shine, you'll fall down to the bottom, which I personally don't like. You may have a stable platform for the shine sprite.


Other: 0/1
++Good set thwomps
+Some lava and lava-like blocks
+Planet as introduction
-A bit tedious
--Some lagging
--It's not a galaxy

0.5+4(0.5)+[-5(0.5)]=0

Overall: 3/5
Sorry, but there's just five stars for me to do the review. To solve your problems. Firstly, to erase the lag first, so you can test it faster afterwards. Delete some inapproprate goombas and boos. They're not supposed here, but a few of them is acceptable. After that, disable all decoration (I know you can do that.) and cut some blocks from the bottom which basically you can't see them without editting the level. Also, use a bit fewer types of tiles, it make me feel dizzy.

Secondly, you can add some function of the thwomps, like putting a shocked thwomp and a sign which represent the thing that the thwomp said, like "You need to collect N coins to......", it is a kinda idea I can think of, which also is a solution of no objective is in your level: You need an objective to encourage players to play right? Just don't make the gameplay too tedious. Avoiding them spinning , vibrating, turning or moving, isn't really fun.

What I think is, you just want to make a thwomp tower, but you want to put it in your level series, you just forced yourself to turn it into a galaxy. If you do that, I've nothing to say, but at least, you've satisfy with your title.


Make it better, and keep your advantages up, I'll give you a better marks.

@down: Well, yes, althro' I've not play yet coz I've no money. I've atch some video in Youtube, it is really bad. I've visited the nintendo website and take a look at it, I'm not going to buy it.
Back to the topic: Thankyou for reading 946 words, I just suggest you to make, a bit more. ;D

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Some galaxies in super mario galaxy 2 (for example: Stone Cyclone Galaxy(which i really really hate)) is just one planet. But your right, Republic, it's not a galaxy.