Super Mario 2D World Pt.1

[bigboo]

Super Mario 2D World Pt.1
Only play this if you are Mario!

Code: Select all

226x30~0*10*6L9G*2*9S*6*9N:O9G9S*6*9N*2*0*10*6L9G*2*9S*6*9N:O9G9S*6*9N*2*0*10*6L9G*2*9S*6*9N:O9G9S*6*9N*2*0*10*6L9G*2*9S*6*9N:O9G9S*6*9N*2*0*10*6L9G*2*9S*6*9N:O9G9S*3*9d*3*9N*2*0*10*6L9G*2*9S*6*9N:O9G9S*3*9d0*2*9N*2*0*10*6L9G*2*9S*6*9N:O9G9S*3*9d0*2*9N*2*0*10*6V9J9G*7*9N:O9G*7*9N*2*0*14*6K6M*15*0*14*6K6M*15*0*14*6K6M*15*0*14*6K6M*15*0*14*6K6M*15*0*14*6K6M*15*0*14*6K6M*15*0*14*6K6M*15*0*14*6K6M*15*0*14*6K6M*15*0*14*6T6Z*15*0*1250*6M*2*0*8*6M*448*6\6M*29*6K6M*29*6K6M6Z*16*9G97*2*9:97*5*9:97*2*6K6M0*16*9G97*11*6K6M0*16*9G97*2*9:97*5*9:97*2*6K6M0*16*9G97*11*6K6M0*16*9G97*2*9:97*5*9:97*2*6K6M0*16*9J99*11*6K6M0*28*6K6M0*24*6U0*3*6K6M0*24*6L9C98*2*6K6M0*24*6L9@9:976K6M0*24*6L9@97*2*6K6M0*24*6L9@9:976K6M0*24*6L9D99*2*6K6M0*24*6V0*3*6K6M0*28*6K6M0*28*6K6M0*28*6K6M0*28*6T6Z0*29*9F0*28*9F9>0*28*9>*2*0*28*9>*2*0*28*9>*2*0*28*9>*2*0*28*9>*2*0*28*9>*2*0*28*9>*2*0*28*9>*2*0*28*9>*2*0*28*9>*2*0*28*9E9>0*29*9E0*582*6U6W6Y7=0*25*6q6s6u6M7<0*25*6r6t6v6M7<0*26*6L6N6M7<0*26*6V6X6Z7>0*25*7E*9*0*21*7E*9*0*21*7E*2*7U*5*7E*2*0*21*7E*2*7U*5*7E*2*0*21*7E*2*7U*2*7Z7U*2*7E*2*0*21*7E*2*7U*5*7E*2*0*21*7E*2*7U*5*7E*2*0*21*7E*2*7U*2*7Z7U*2*7E*2*0*21*7E*2*7U*5*7E*2*0*21*7E*2*7U*5*7E*2*0*21*7E*9*0*21*7E*9*0*21*7E*9*0*21*7E*9*0*21*7E*9*0*21*7E*9*0*21*7E*9*0*21*7E*9*0*21*7E*9*0*23*7G7E*6*0*23*7G7E*6*0*23*7G7E*6*0*21*7E*9*0*21*7E*9*0*18*37*3*7E*9*0*18*37*3*7E*9*0*15*7T*6*7E*9*0*15*7T*6*7E*9*0*15*7T*6*7E*9*0*15*7T*6*7E*9*0*15*7T*6*7E*9*0*15*7T*6*7E*9*0*15*7T*6*7E*9*0*15*7T*6*7E*9*0*15*7T*6*7E*9*0*1326*8O8K*3*0*26*8K*4*0*26*8K*4*0*26*8K*4*0*26*8K*4*0*26*8K*4*0*26*8K*4*0*26*8N8K*3*0*180*~1,64,832,0,0,Right|73,64,864,Mario%3A%20%20What%20the%3F%20%20Why%20is%20everything%20is%20all%20flat%3F%21%0DVoice%3A%20%20Mario%21%20%20Mario%21%20Maaaaaaaaaaaaaarrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrriiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiioooooooooooooooooooooooooooo%21|45,158,832,0,140,67,-1,92,1,0,0|39,16,864,184,576,1|39,184,576,16,864,1|45,218,297,45,100,100,-1,699,0,0,1|59,189,292,0|73,96,576,Mario%3A%20%20What%20was%20that%20weird%20voice%3F%20%20What%20the%3F%21%3F%21%3F%21%3F%21%3F%21%0DMama%20mia%2C%20my%20house%20is%20on%20fire%21%21%21%21%21%21%21%21%21%21%21%21%21%21%20%20Plus%20I%27m%20snowed%20in%2C%20it%20looks%20like%20ITS%27%20THE%20FIRE%20EXIT%21%21%21%21%21%21%21%21%21|77,144,840|77,144,824|77,160,824|77,168,832|77,159,841|77,169,831|77,170,849|77,151,856|77,147,851|77,147,831|77,188,822|77,165,814|77,160,814|77,151,830|77,153,842|39,16,576,2480,864,4|45,15,482,0,200,200,120,140,0,0,1|44,3183,776,0,0,5,20,4,0.1,3,30,0|44,3392,776,0,0,5,20,4,0.1,3,30,0|45,3272,720,0,50,300,259,50,0,0,0|39,2480,864,16,576,4|141,3122,825,1,90|73,3240,864,Watch%20out%21|54,3182,855,1|52,3389,847,1|73,3328,864,Mario%3A%20%20What%20are%20you%20trying%20to%20do%20you%20weirdos%3F%0DThwomp%3A%20%20We%20are%20not%20weirdos%20you%20idiot%21%20%20We%20are%20trying%20to%20crush%20the%20roof%20so%20we%20can%20get%20back%20into%20our%20house%21|19,3613,866,0,-50|7,3698,765,0,2,0,232,0,0,none,Up,0.5,2,1,232|9,3799,379,0,0,0,0,0,0,none,none,0.5,50,13,Right,6,0,1|14,3961,380|40,5360,88,6832,760|42,6832,760,1,0|6,6960,726|73,6896,800,Find%20out%20what%20happens%20next%20in%20part%202%21|56,4808,304,1|56,4784,304,1|56,4744,304,1|56,4704,304,1|59,4376,304,0|55,4314,282,1|55,4364,261,1|70,2704,853,1|70,2744,850,1|70,2799,848,1|70,2838,855,1|70,2889,853,1|52,2929,843,1|51,2976,856,1|51,3000,856,1|51,2960,856,1|51,2904,856,1|51,2880,856,1~1~2~Super%20Mario%202D%20World%20Pt%2E1

[lordpat]

Review Time!

Man, this level was...underdeveloped.

Fun:5/10
Mmmm....sorry, it's just....look, lots of enemies is not equal to fun, the skellegonies were really annoying, I would take them off. The plataforming is OK, but the level is quite short, though, so there's not too much to enjoy. What else....I give you credit, the design is pretty intresting, the fire columns were well implemented (kind of) and the thwomps fit quite well. The main problem? The part of the breakble glass. I found that simply evil. Fix it, or put a plataform...Just give it a try.


Graphics: 2/5
This was kind of a mixed bag. The house's design was pretty intresting both from the inside and from the outside, but it's just the cut-off which hurt this level really bad, the snow design is horrendous, and the floating plataforms and house(s) feel really out of nowhere. The decoration....was there any? Inside the house, I guess it could be worse, but outside, try putting at least a couple of trees! Work on it.

Other: 2,5-1,25=1,25/5
Unoriginal storyline: -0,5
Overuse of enemies: -0,5
Unoriginal or atractive title: -0,25

Overall: 8,25/20=2.06/5
This levels is shouting of improvement. I would actually recommend to remake this level. Make it longer, add level Transitions, reduce the ammount of enemies, fix the cout-off...Don't take this offensive, you only need to practice a bit. Beleive me, the more you practice the better you become. Try to make the house bigger, because it was the srtongest part of the level. Again, I think that fixing all these would be really hard, just try to make it from scratch. Take your time to make the level, it works great!

Good luck on your series (BTW, I will put you a 3/5 because I'm looking foward to you, remember: Improvement is the key)

Also, sometimes other users tend to be tough with begginers, don't take their reviews to the negative, they're trying to help (although sometimes you won't notice )