Sandy Wonderland

[SonicSpeed1919]

Sandy Wonderland
This is just a simple level i decided to make.

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Review time. (Because I felt like it.) It can seem a bit harsh. But I tried my best to find your main problems in it.

Fun 5/10
Your level shows very simple platforming. How about some cicling platforms, moving platforms, moving blocks, flipping platforms? There could be done pretty much for making better platforming at all. For example: You need to jump over some pits with platforming in form of cycling platforms helps already. The start point was at the wrong point.
The switch trick with the koopas down here don't works for me. But that's probably because they never work for me. So I don't know if that's only by me. But I know that the switch blocks kill you if you go to the right. You get crushed between switch block and sand. Some coins and challenge could be added overall. Hmmm... It needs some fixing. But wasn't too bad at all.

Graphics 2/5
Maybe a bit more varity with the decoration and tiles. There are lots of sand tiles. Your desert is very flat. You could add some sand dunes. Also the cutoff for the oasis in the end of the level looks weird. and you haven't filled the ground under the grass.the pits were just horizontal sand walls. That looked actually a bit strange too. But you tried to put in decoration, pyramids and stuff. It needs some fixing too, though.

Other 3/5
No lag or loading time issues. +0.5
I disliked the 'in the sand path' -0.25
you hit the coin ring only half. It could be fixed too. -0.25

All 5+2+3=10/20 (2.5/5 I will give you three stars.)

Your level had some flaws and problems in it. But I think you should be able to come up with a solution by yourself by most of them. (Or I told already how to fix it.) Overall this level needs some work to fix this stuff.

You should improve your level before starting another though. I hope this review helps you to see the main things you need to work at in your levels.

That's all. Sorry if I was too strict.

[SonicSpeed1919]

Oops you are right i didn't know i put the start point there.

i know i need practice,and i like it when you review my level, it helps to know what i did wrong.
and when i play it again i can see what you mean by it needs more platforms and sand dunes and stuff.

I will make a new level and i will work very hard on this one .
And i don't think you were harsh,like i said,i like it when you review my level.