Mario's Forest

[NingNing63]

Mario's Forest
This is my first level so it's not to good but I might make a part 2 or extend edition

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This is great for your first level! It's a lot better than the first level I ever made.

[CedarBranch]

Here's my review (I haven't given anyone a full one in a long while):


Fun: 4.5/10
There wasn't very much that one could find interesting. This is average, I'll tell ya that. Some fun COULD be found in this but, for the most-part, it wasn't so engaging. I did like climbing upward. It was an O.K. attempt at making something memorable. But, there was so much more that could've been done to make it funner (I'm sorry if that wasn't very descriptive. It was a bit hard to explain.).

Graphics: 2/5
The graphics were also average. Things were out-of-place, but some aspects were executed better than others. The very end of the level was weird, in my opinion. It was just a floating "outline" of tiles that didn't fit with the theme very well (I'm sorry if this wasn't well-explained either...).

Other: 2/5
+.25 I thought it was a little creative(?) to dissuade the player from climbing higher.
-.5 This wasn't exactly a forest.
-.25 If you somehow manage to forget to collect some Red Coins and enter the pipe, there would be no way to return.
-.5 The Hover FLUDD wasn't necessary.

Overall: 8.5/20 (2.125 > 2 Stars)
Do not look at my review as if you failed, but as a resource to, hopefully, make your levels better. I did not exactly dislike your level, but I am just giving you feedback that could be used to improve it. This level is average, and it shows you have potential on the long run, but there are things that you need to work on in the meantime.



Peace!