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Postby Lucas101 » November 28th, 2015, 5:04 pm

Secret in the sky
Well ... that and my first level, so if you have any errors so I can improve please let me know .

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Re: Secret in the sky

Postby Charcoal » November 29th, 2015, 12:44 am

It looks great. Just keep practicing.
Maybe make it longer or add other tiles to mix things up a bit and add more variety. Other than that, that's all I have to say.
Maybe take look at other really good designers for inspiration.

Also, there's an LDC, a Level Designer Contest, still open if you want to join it.
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Re: Secret in the sky

Postby Supershroom » November 29th, 2015, 2:31 am

There is a technical error with the right level transition.

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The half strip you've left free allows you to cross it, and you're glitched and have to restart. It needs a full tile next to the transition in order to block it. Also the bridge items at the silver star next to the pendulum are not visible while playing. The camera cuts away the lowest half tile. This could be intentional but it's still uncomfortable for players puzzling over if they need another switch or FLUDD etc. to get the thing. Those are just things you have to playtest a little more.

The left transition is kinda sparse, but the rest is very impressive for a first level! I also give 4 stars. :) And as said we have LDC open if you're interested
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Re: Secret in the sky

Postby Vajrin » November 29th, 2015, 4:43 am

Really good beginning level. But you should add more decorations in some places and add some tiles variation.

4 stars overall.
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Re: Secret in the sky

Postby Lucas101 » November 29th, 2015, 4:48 am

Vesoralla wrote:It looks great. Just keep practicing.
Maybe make it longer or add other tiles to mix things up a bit and add more variety. Other than that, that's all I have to say.
Maybe take look at other really good designers for inspiration.

Also, there's an LDC, a Level Designer Contest, still open if you want to join it.


in my next level I will try to follow your idea of ​​variety and mix parts , thanks for the tips .
I will not participate in the contest perhaps next , because I 'm still learning how to make levels. :P
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Re: Secret in the sky

Postby Lucas101 » November 29th, 2015, 5:20 am

Supershroom wrote:There is a technical error with the right level transition.

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The half strip you've left free allows you to cross it, and you're glitched and have to restart. It needs a full tile next to the transition in order to block it. Also the bridge items at the silver star next to the pendulum are not visible while playing. The camera cuts away the lowest half tile. This could be intentional but it's still uncomfortable for players puzzling over if they need another switch or FLUDD etc. to get the thing. Those are just things you have to playtest a little more.

The left transition is kinda sparse, but the rest is very impressive for a first level! I also give 4 stars. :) And as said we have LDC open if you're interested


well ... I looked at my mistakes you mentioned in your review , I tried to correct them and if you want to check to see if it's mistakes, be my guest . :)
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Re: Secret in the sky

Postby Lucas101 » November 29th, 2015, 5:23 am

FluorescenceLight wrote:Really good beginning level. But you should add more decorations in some places and add some tiles variation.

4 stars overall.


Thanks for the tips , I will follow them in my next level. :D
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