Super mario 6X: Revenge of the dark

[Sonicfan253]

Bowser: wh...What happened to my precious castle?
Koopa: A meteor crashed into it, dont you remember great king?
Bowser: W....WHAT? A METEOR?
Koopa: yes master, do you not remember?
Bowser: no......What happened?
Koopa: you were possesed by an orb of power and decided to destroy the whole world with a meteor!
Bowser: oh.
?????: Hehe...I can fix this quite quickly
Bowser: but how?
?????: Ill show you
?????: But it will cost you your LIFE

Meanwhile....In the mushroom kingdom

Mario: Luigi, stop muttering at the window like a baby, bowser is D-E-A-D now
Luigi: WAAAAHHHHHHHH! I know hes back!!!!!!
Mario: Dude, you went into a huanted mantion and now your acting like this?
Luigi: BUT....MARIO...ACK! HES OUTSIDE!
Mario: MAMA-MIA! I BETTER WARN PEACH
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Peach: oh no! bowsers back!
Mario: Peach what should we DO?!?!
Peach + luigi: WHY ARE YOU ASKING US??!! YOUR THE ONE THAT KNOWS WHAT TO DO!!!!!!!!!!!
Mario: WHAT IF THERE IS A GIANT BLACK HOLE IN THE SKY THAT SUCKS THE ROOF OFF AND KILLS PEACH?
Luigi: uhhhhh.........that couulldddd happen
Peach: oh my! mario DO SOMETHING!
Mario: ok then....*akwardly walks outside*
Bowser: You wont beat me this time mario! I have power beyond the heavens!!!!!!!
Mario: you wouldn`t dare....................
Bowser: YES.....YES I HAVE!!!!! I HAVE TAKEN THE GLOW SPRITE
Mario: why was GLOW SPRITE in big letters?
Bowser: becuase I can now have my inner true form.
Mario: your True form?
Bowser: BWAHAHAHA *starts transforming into giant version of bowser with a really huge shell with sharp spikes*
Giga Bowser: THIS IS MY TRUE FORM
Mario: ooohhhhhhhhhh what the crap hes huge............
Gigabowser: NOW I WILL DESTROY THE MUSHROOM KINGDOM
Mario: crap.

[Kimonio]

OH NOES!!!!! ANOTHER CHAT STORY!!!!



.......Seriously, I can barely follow the storyline. It looks butchered. D:

[MICrophone]

Sonicfan…don't take this personally…but this is the same as your other story. Poorly written, little character development, no description, cheesy dialogue…I could continue. You definitely could use some work on this. But keep trying!

[spookyghost]

Sonicfan…don't take this personally…but this is the same as your other story. Poorly written, little character development, no description, cheesy dialogue…I could continue. You definitely could use some work on this. But keep trying!

I agree >.> Just people saying stuff.
(Also I noticed your sig is WAY to big sonicfan!)