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Re: ~Kirby in Dreamland~ Chapter 2 is here!

Postby Sonicfan253 » June 21st, 2010, 1:46 pm

Usario, if you believe me or not, that was sort of insulting.

WHO CARES A CRAP ABOUT HOW LONG I MAKE MY CHAPTERS? They may not be that interesting but you dont have to come and beat me up about it!
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Re: ~Kirby in Dreamland~ Chapter 2 is here!

Postby nin10mode » June 21st, 2010, 1:59 pm

That's not an insult. He's giving you constructive critisism. You might wanna try listening to it. Because what's the point of making a story public, if it's not going to appeal to anyone? Lots of people care the crap how long chapters are supposed to be. Do you see a best-selling novel with 3 pages of plot? No. Believe it or not, he's being nice. A real book reviewer would've been much harsher. And you may argue that this is a kid's forum and all that, but these forums also help our future. We learn what others like, and write something accordingly, or take a risk to see if its any good. I don't know if you want to be a writer, but if you do, you gotta step up to the plate. As your idol Sonic would say, "C'mon! Step it up!"
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Re: ~Kirby in Dreamland~ Chapter 2 is here!

Postby Sonicfan253 » June 21st, 2010, 2:14 pm

You know what? I CANT type long chapters. I eventually get bored if I type too long, and I get writers block.
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Re: ~Kirby in Dreamland~ Chapter 2 is here!

Postby Blablob » June 21st, 2010, 2:16 pm

Then write a little a time, rather than all at once. That's what many great writers do, to allow time to compose thoughts for their story. :P
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Re: ~Kirby in Dreamland~ Chapter 2 is here!

Postby MessengerOfDreams » June 21st, 2010, 5:42 pm

While I do say that Sonicfan can't take things so personally, however hypocritical that may sound from me, I must admit I do a large quantity of short chapters, and they work out fine. :D
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Re: ~Kirby in Dreamland~ Chapter 2 is here!

Postby nin10mode » June 21st, 2010, 5:45 pm

MessengerOfYahweh wrote:While I do say that Sonicfan can't take things so personally, however hypocritical that may sound from me, I must admit I do a large quantity of short chapters, and they work out fine. :D

You make short chapters? o_0 I need to start paying more attention to these other stories. 0_o
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Re: ~Kirby in Dreamland~ Chapter 2 is here!

Postby MessengerOfDreams » June 21st, 2010, 5:46 pm

Not as short as Sonicfan's but short by a novel's standards.
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Re: ~Kirby in Dreamland~ Chapter 2 is here!

Postby SuperStar X » June 21st, 2010, 5:53 pm

The intro looks fine
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Re: ~Kirby in Dreamland~ Chapter 2 is here!

Postby spookyghost » June 21st, 2010, 7:04 pm

SuperStar X wrote:The intro looks fine

Useless comment.

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And sonicfan, If you can't write for long, then story-writing isn't your thing.

And don't pull a TBG on us, complaining whenever we review you >_>

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A REALLY short story. One thing that doesn't help is that you double space the paragraphs, only do single space.
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Re: ~Kirby in Dreamland~

Postby MessengerOfDreams » June 27th, 2010, 5:01 pm

Everyone Shut up and Drop it.

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Original: Jealous Ghosts of the Mississippi
The story of Rachel meeting Amber after a lifetime of silence and being shunned
Original: Your Hand in Mine
One of my most personal stories about a dangerous romance. Now to be published in a college lit journal!
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Recent LDC Work:
Level Series: Leaves From The Vine (ft Star King)
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