The Runouwlutionary War

[Zunar]

Well, looks like I'm gonna have to rewrite Chapter 26. Ugh.

CURSE YOU, STUPID PM ERROR!!!

[*Emelia K. Fletcher]

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When you've finished, PM it to yourself, back it up twice in two different folders, and IMMEDIATELY POST IT.

[Zunar]

After a long wait, Chapter 26 is FINALLY finished. TMO, Ridder, it is almost completely different from the version I sent you (if you got to read it), since it is a rewrite.

Anyways, enjoy everyone.

[*Emelia K. Fletcher]

WHEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEE--

[SuperMIC]

An extremely big flaw in your chapters is that they're consisted almost solely of dialogue. ALmost nothing happens in your chapters and they get... excessively boring to read. I can't really even tell what's going on at points with the lack of text. And if you didn't know, every time someone new talks you're supposed to start a new line...

[Zunar]

An extremely big flaw in your chapters is that they're consisted almost solely of dialogue.

It's better than having either no dialogue or sh*tty dialogue.

ALmost nothing happens in your chapters and they get... excessively boring to read.

I do admit, sometimes I sidetracked with dialogue and leave out action, but that shouldn't make it boring to read. I try to make my dialogue entertaining by adding in memes or jokes (for example, Shade's line of "Well excuuuuuuuuuse me, princess,").

I can't really even tell what's going on at points with the lack of text.

Lack of text? The entire story is composed of text.

And if you didn't know, every time someone new talks you're supposed to start a new line...

I've heard this mentioned a few times before, but I prefer breaking up the paragraphs into four or five lines, rather than starting a new line every time a new speaker talks. If I chose the latter option, there would be really long paragraphs and really short paragraphs. I think my way is better.

[SuperMIC]

As in each paragraph is basically composedof dialogue. I want text, like no quotation marks... just words.

No offense, but the really only way your way works is because you, lack actual descriptive language.

[Zunar]

No offense, but the really only way your way works is because you, lack actual descriptive language.

I'm not quite sure I get what you mean by actual descriptive language.

Question. Have you read The Runouw Emissary? Is that better in terms of "actual descriptive language"?

[nin10mode]

An extremely big flaw in your chapters is that they're consisted almost solely of dialogue.

It's better than having either no dialogue or sh*tty dialogue.

No entirely true. As long as your write in a way that appeals to all senses(aka, descriptive writing) and still carries on with the plot, a story can be considered good.

ALmost nothing happens in your chapters and they get... excessively boring to read.

I do admit, sometimes I sidetracked with dialogue and leave out action, but that shouldn't make it boring to read. I try to make my dialogue entertaining by adding in memes or jokes (for example, Shade's line of "Well excuuuuuuuuuse me, princess,").

I think it's better for a story to have one main tone to it. I haven't read this, but if it's a serious story, leave it serious, with the occasional hint of humor, and vice versa.

I can't really even tell what's going on at points with the lack of text.

Lack of text? The entire story is composed of text.

Lol, SMIC explained above, so...

And if you didn't know, every time someone new talks you're supposed to start a new line...

I've heard this mentioned a few times before, but I prefer breaking up the paragraphs into four or five lines, rather than starting a new line every time a new speaker talks. If I chose the latter option, there would be really long paragraphs and really short paragraphs. I think my way is better.

Unfortunately, its a very unprofessional way of writing. It might take up more space, but it is the correct way. Plus, it's easier on the eyes.

By descriptive language, he means writing that appeals to the senses. "The park smelled of fragrant, pink cherry blossom petals, and the wind gently whistled into our ears. In the distance, we saw the pond; the Sun's light shimmering in the tiny waves, the splashes of tiny coy fish jumping about. A magnificent place."

Like that.

[Zunar]

Unfortunately, its a very unprofessional way of writing. It might take up more space, but it is the correct way. Plus, it's easier on the eyes.

Either I'm misunderstanding this statement or you are contradicting yourself. If it is a very unprofessional way of writing, then why is it the correct way and easier on the eyes?