*REVIVAL* Runopolis -Chapter 6- *REVIVAL*

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Re: Runopolis -Chapter 3 and 4-

Postby Zunar » April 19th, 2011, 5:19 pm

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Chapter 3 : New Panic: show
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Chapter 3 : New Panic

"Alright, we are gone. We have a lot of supplies, a couple of cokes, and some weapons. I took the tent, clothes, and we even have a map. I'm sure nobody saw us leaving, so everything is okay," Zunar said. "So yeah, what do we now?" Mega asked. Zunar, Mega and SMX had been walking on a large road for an hour. "I don't know. We just follow the... road," SMX continued. Zunar took out the map in his pocket, and showed it to SMX. "Look. We are following the Illusion Road to the Kingdom of Illusion. There is a chance Star king went there. He went there a couple of times with his spaceship." Mega stopped, put his bag on the ground, and searched for a cold coke. "God I'm thirsty." He drank half his coke, but then Zunar took the bottle and said: "You noob! Don't drink all in one day, we'll need it." "But why is there this long road to the Kingdom?" SMX asked. "The first people that lived in the City made it, I think," Zunar explained. "They wanted to expand the City, but they died before completing it." SMX stopped, stared at Zunar, and asked: "Died? You mean... they are dead? Why?" "They died when they reached the Kingdom." Zunar replied. "You mean, we're going there?" SMX asked, shocked. "Yeah, but we have weapons, so we are safe. I planned everything."

Runouw City slowly woke up, and the users went on the road, and into the Chat Park, to chat, play football, etc. Some were going to the Quote Museum, others were waiting for the news. The Runouw Buses, something new, started to drive around the city, taking people aboard to take them to their destinations. The first boats for the FoA and beyond started to move, taking special people to the Island of Awesome. Every thing was fine. Until...

Demonik was walking in the street, whistling. For the first time since he opened the Tavern, he had a nice night, and he was happy. He reached the wooden door and he knocked. But there was no answer. "Mega, are you in there? You didn't bring my key back last night." But there was no answer. "MEGA?" No answer. "God where is that lazy b*stard?" Demonik wondered aloud. And he headed to the profiles, where he thought he could find him sleeping.
Wrong.
He was travelling around the Runouw region.

"WHAAAT?!?! You're not saying what I think you are, are you?! We must send people out there after him!" Suyo was looking at his feet, while Runouw was shouting at him. "No," Suyo replied. Runouw slapped his forehead, shouting: "Why, oh why do I have such a noob as a global moderator?! I'll give you one last-" "I SAID NO. Everyone thinks the same thing: He is probably dead. Why do other people need to die too?!" "A user disappears, half the users don't feel secure, the other half is ready to put Fourinone as the admin since They say I do bad work. And that... that... that son of a b**** we call Suyo says no!!" said Runouw, talking to himself. "GET OUT OF MY SIGHT!!" he yells at Suyo, and Suyo walks away. Demonik, running, bumped into Suyo, and entered Runouw's office, shouting: "RUNOUW!" He stopped, caught his breath, and said, slowly, to be sure he doesn't faint: "Ru... Runouw... there... there is a small... problem." Runouw took his cup of coffee, drank a bit, then asked: "What is it?" "I... I cannot find.... Megaboy." But Runouw didn't seem as shocked as Demonik expected, and he continued, as if it was talking about the weather forecast: "Well, that's a problem. He may be sleeping. Wait a little while." He turned around, looking through the window, drinking coffee, when Demonik said: "He isn't in his profile. Half of his things are packed." Runouw almost succeeded to spit all his coffee on his desk, saying: "You mean, he may have gone somewhere?" "I think, sir." Demonik replied. "Alright, find Blab. But if you find Suyo, tell that b*stard he isn't moderator anymore. Tell him MoD will take his place," Runouw said. "Alright, Runouw," Demonik answered. "And by the way, this conversation never happened."
Chapter 4 : The Kingdom of Illusion: show
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Chapter 4 : The Kingdom of Illusion

After many hours of walking, Zunar, Megaboy and SupahMarioX arrived at a forest. "Here we are," Zunar said, looking at the map. "We reached the Kingdom of Illusion." "You sure?" SMX asked. "Totally," Zunar replied. SMX entered the forest when, suddenly, a loud roar came out of nowhere. SMX, panicking, ran and hid behind Zunar. "What... What... What was that?" SMX asked, scared. "It's probably a dragon," Zunar replied calmly. "A DRAGON?" SMX shouted in response, shocked. Mega looked around him, and said: "God, it's dark in there. And it's almost noon. That's strange." A new roar came out from nowhere, nearer than before. Zunar took his bag and said: "We should take our weapons." Zunar took Pit's bow, Mega the sword, and SMX the spambot cannon. "I don't like this place..." SMX said. "Let's get out of here." "We can't," Zunar said. "Maybe he is in there." A new roar came from not too far away, then some noise of a flying animal... Then a loud roar came from above them and Mega shouted: "Behind us!" A huge shiny green dragon arrived in front of them and threw a fireball on Mega, but he protected himself with his sword. Zunar took Mega's arm and they started to run in the opposite direction. The dragon flapped his wings and flew high in the sky. "Where are we going?" SMX asked. "Cause I don't think he is following us..." They reached a lake, and there wasn't the noise of wings flapping anymore. "I think... he... he is gone..." Mega said, exhausted. Zunar looked at Mega and said: "Thanks, Mega. You saved our lives." Then there was a rumbling sound. The lake's water started to tremble. Everyone looked at the lake, and the dragon came from the depths. "My god, what is it doing in there?!" SMX wondered aloud. Zunar took his bow, loaded an arrow, and shot in the dragon's face, but it didn't seem to even feel it. "Alright, new plan: RUN!!" Zunar said. "Sounds like a good plan to me!" Mega replied. They all turned around and started running, but they saw the rocky mountain behind him. "GOD WHAT THE..." "That mountain wasn't there when we arrived!!" Mega said, shocked. They all turned around again, looked at the dragon in the lake. But he wasn't there anymore. He had risen out of it, and he was in front of them. The dragon threw a fireball at SMX, but Zunar shot an arrow on it, and it flew the fireball back onto the dragon. "Come on, run!" Zunar shouted, and they ran between the dragon's legs. They ran through the forest, the dragon running after them, throwing fireballs at them. "Look!! A manor, there!" Mega said. They ran, and arrived at the huge door. "There is something written on the door... Double Vision Chambers, I thi..." Mega started. "I don't care! Open that door!" Zunar cut in, pushing on the door.

Meanwhile, Runouw was thinking, looking through the window about the new sub forum he wanted to build when Blab, Demonik, and MoD broke in. Runouw turned around, and, without any question, Blab said: "Nope, I didn't find him!" Runouw sighed. "God. What can we do? Do we know where he was?" "Yes," MoD said. "I saw him yesterday at Demonik's Tavern. He was the bartender... I think he was substituting for Buff since he is goddamn sick." "Alright," Runouw said. "Was there someone with him?" "Yes there was," MoD replied. "Zunar and SMX. There were playing with the Wii. Zunar was kicking SMX's butt with Pit... He was winning 17 to..." "Alright," Runouw cut in. "MoD, Blab, go search them." Blab walked away, calling Four to help him. "Runuow, there is a little problem," Demonik said. "You said I mustn't tell anybody about the disappearance, but people will start to worry when they see that the Tavern is not open yet..." "That's true. MoD, can you show Demonik to the tool room? Maybe he can find something to open the door." Runouw said. "Yes, sir. But is it true what Demonik said? I am a Global Moderator?" Runouw nodded and they left.

"Zunar, I think it's not safe in there. Even Mega feels the same way," SMX said. "Well at least it's safer than outside," Zunar replied. Back at the Kingdom of Illusion, in the Double Vision Chambers, our three heroes were walking in a long corridor. There was a noise on their left, a high-pitched noise that went deep into their flesh. Suddenly a loud rumbling noise came out of nowhere, and the green dragon broke the right wall and entered the mansion. "What the heck is happening?!" Zunar shouted, and SMX replied: "Stop asking questions; nobody has the answers!!" Then it was Mega's turned to shout and he said: "Stop arguing about stupid things and lets run!!" And they ran, the dragon chasing them, flapping faster, shooting more fireballs. Zunar noticed a door in the wall, and he pushed it, entering it. The room was very tiny, and a complete silence rang in it... " What the heck is point of this room?! There's nothing in here!" And as they all turned around to get out of the room, but the the door wasn't there anymore. "WTF?! Where is the d-" But Zunar got slapped by SMX before he could finish his question. Mega turned around, and there was a door in the wall they were looking at not even ten seconds ago. They all ran into the door, and fell on the rocky ground of a mountain. Zunar stood up, wondering aloud: "What are we doing here?!" He turned around. "Hey, where did we come from?! There's no door, no manor, no nothing! Well good riddance; I hated that place!!"





I have to say one thing, Sk. Entirely too much capital text. But anyway, I hope I didn't butcher the chapters too much from my edits, but I had to change some stuff for it to make sense.
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Re: Runopolis -Chapter 3 and 4-

Postby Asterocrat » April 20th, 2011, 3:30 am

Thanks so much, Zunar.

*goes change the chapters*

And one question: What is the problem with capital text?
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Re: Runopolis -Chapter 3 and 4-

Postby Zunar » April 20th, 2011, 4:55 am

Well, I know you're trying to say they're shouting, but having all that capital text just seems way too much. All you need to put is something like "[speech]!" [person] shouted. I mean, sometimes capital text helps, but too much doesn't look right.
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Re: Runopolis -Chapter 3 and 4-

Postby Asterocrat » April 20th, 2011, 6:11 am

Alrighty then, I'll keep that in mind.

F*CK Zunar now I must modify Chapter 5 a lot. Wait, is he reading this? Oh FU-- *is shot by Zunar*
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Re: Runopolis -Chapter 3 and 4-

Postby Zunar » April 20th, 2011, 6:13 am

If you have to modify Chapter 5 a lot, then don't worry about it. I can just edit it when you release the chapter. Just keep it in mind for future chapters, 'kay? :)
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Re: *REVIVAL* Runopolis -Chapter 6- *REVIVAL*

Postby Asterocrat » August 16th, 2011, 2:43 am

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That's right, fanboys, I've decide to make a revival to save that topic of the deep claws of the Stories forum. Wow, what I just said is just awesome

So I present you, *coughthreemonthslatercough* CHAPTER 6!

And I should have time to continue it the next few days. Since I had time because my computer hadn't Internet.

Moderators, do not lock this topic. At least, not yet

Thank you, see ya later.
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