The Legendary Twelve: Back Stories 1-3 *Alucard Complete*

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Re: The Legendary Twelve: Back Stories 1-3

Postby zebtrestalala » December 9th, 2009, 11:36 am

So far, so good. I agree with four, some of the plot points seem cliche (such as losing a brother) but other points are strong and good. also, on MIC's story, it would help if when Alucard is attacking him if you could space it out a bit more. I was confused with all the different points of view, if you could leave a line in between it would be nice.

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Re: The Legendary Twelve: Back Stories 1-3

Postby Buff_ » December 13th, 2009, 9:30 am

CHAPTER 1 OF ALUCARD'S STORY IS RELEASED!

I have done more, but I wanted to submit something since I haven't in quite a bit.
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Re: The Legendary Twelve: Back Stories 1-3 (Alucard's Chapter 1)

Postby AlucardX60 » January 6th, 2010, 1:11 pm

WHEN ARE YOU GOING TO RELEASE THE REST OF MY STORY!!!
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Re: The Legendary Twelve: Back Stories 1-3 (Alucard's Chapter 1)

Postby Buff_ » January 6th, 2010, 1:36 pm

Sorry, I've had other things going on, and I've been working on different things. I'll try to get it out as soon as I can.
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Re: The Legendary Twelve: Back Stories 1-3 (Alucard's Chapter 1)

Postby MessengerOfDreams » January 6th, 2010, 2:30 pm

The first two were a little tough to follow and seemed kind of Marvel-ish, but Alurcard's is amazing. No gramattical mess-ups (Like that one) it was clean, it was interesting, can't wait to read more!
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Re: The Legendary Twelve: Back Stories 1-3 (Alucard's Chapter 1)

Postby MICrophone » January 6th, 2010, 4:22 pm

MessengerOfYahweh wrote:The first two were a little tough to follow and seemed kind of Marvel-ish, but Alurcard's is amazing.


Ahem. What are you implying about Marvel? *Looks very intimidating.*

On-Topic: Yeah, looking forward to rest of story! :P
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Re: The Legendary Twelve: Back Stories 1-3 (More from Alucard)

Postby Buff_ » January 7th, 2010, 2:21 pm

More of Alucard's story is out!
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Re: The Legendary Twelve: Back Stories 1-3 (More from Alucard)

Postby megamario126 » January 7th, 2010, 2:37 pm

Cool stories of the lgendary twelve, Buff! They are, like I said in the shoutbox, very 'realistic'. Can't wait for more stories! (Or even Alucard's if his is not done yet.)
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Re: The Legendary Twelve: Back Stories 1-3 (More from Alucard)

Postby MICrophone » January 7th, 2010, 3:15 pm

Wow! I agree, alucard's is the best so far. :D It'll be interesting to see how he ends up on the forums…
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Re: The Legendary Twelve: Back Stories 1-3 *Alucard Complete*

Postby Buff_ » January 9th, 2010, 2:50 pm

Alucard's story has been posted. :D
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