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Re: The Legend of Avo 2

Postby Chaukai » April 16th, 2011, 9:42 am

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Re: The Legend of Avo 2

Postby MICrophone » April 16th, 2011, 12:45 pm

This chapter was very intriguing. I really like the situation that you've put your character in Avo, and the Suyo plot twist was quite good. Writing could still be improved, but otherwise I'm greatly enjoying it. 8/10. Keep it up! :P
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Re: The Legend of Avo 2

Postby Avo » April 16th, 2011, 8:10 pm

Before I go any farther, I'm going to post the main narrators for this forward on. To avoid confusion:

Avo (Currently in Limbo)

MessengerOfHawks (MoHawk, if you will, member of the Nighthawks) :troll:

Blablob (New Global Moderator)

Riptide (Leader of the Nighthawks (which will be Chapter 4))

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Re: The Legend of Avo 2

Postby AwesomeJRFD » April 16th, 2011, 8:50 pm

Can I be in it? :awe:
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Re: The Legend of Avo 2

Postby Avo » April 16th, 2011, 9:02 pm

I'm not currently accepting requests to be in it since most of the characters are already revealed or are fictional. But you never know.
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Re: The Legend of Avo 2

Postby Avo » April 18th, 2011, 8:34 pm

Alright, so here is how it is.

I got a total of about 4 chapters done in the weekend, but now is a new school week and I have to focus on that for now.

Now don't fret, I have started Chapter 4, there is not a lot done but I have started it. So I'm gonna say that this story will update every weekend. Unless I miraculously find time during the week to work on it. And I'm really motivated to work on it, I'm really surprised by the feedback. Knowing me, I'm not the best author on the site and I've had a bunch of failed stories.
But this will be finished, and will be way longer than the first.

Also, Avo fun fact. I'm one of the people with the most stories, mostly failed. Here's a list:

Avo For Mayor
The Runouw Files
No More Legends
Lies and Betrayal
Phantoms
Digital Ace Corps
The Spirit of Music
The Legend of Avo
The Legend of Avo 2
The Runouw.com Network
The Runouw Chronicles
Jasper's Country
The Mighty Jasper
Jasper and The Fire Sword
Partners in Time
The Last of The Calibrixian

There might be more. But yeah.
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Re: The Legend of Avo 2

Postby sirknightingfail » April 18th, 2011, 8:44 pm

Avolerators wrote:Runouw pulled out two giant banhammers from his briefcase, the green one being Suyo's and the yellow one being Demonik's Insert period here A banhammer is a Moderator's main weapon that they keep with them at all times, think of it as a police badge or gun. A Mod can swing the banhammer at the user they have to ban in order for it work. I've never seen one this close before.

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Re: The Legend of Avo 2

Postby Avo » April 21st, 2011, 8:54 pm

Chapter 4 - The Nighthawks

''OK Listen up everyone!'' I shouted to get the attention of the audience.

''Oh, great, what is it this time?'' Nighthawk 1 said.

''Hey, hey! Don't talk to your boss like that!'' I said. ''I just got word from Jappa, he made it into the city and is attempting to grab a moderator position.''

''I've always been wondering this, Riptide, why do you want Jappa to become a moderator?'' Nighthawk 2 said.

''How many times do I have to tell you? Don't call me by my name. Call me 'Boss'! And to answer your question, once Jappa is a moderator, he'll be able to access things that normal members aren't able to. If I'm correct, he'll be able to shut down the security system, then we attack the city''

That is my plan. I think about how foolproof it is. And I sometimes think about calling it off. Ever since my village was destroyed, I never felt any remorse. And if I go through with this, hundreds, even thousands would be killed.

Without realizing, I started to space out.

''...Boss...''

''...Boss...!''

''BOSS!''

I finally snapped out it, after a recruit yelled in my ear.

''You OK, man? You were staring at the wall for a while there...'' He said.

''No nothing, everything's fine.'' I replied.

''Now, someone was asking you a question.''

''Oh yeah, continue.''

Everyone looked at me like I had a monkey on my face. They thought I was going to pass out, I would tell them I just spaced out thinking about things but now is not the time.

"Given the circumstances, sir.'' He said. ''What if Jappa doesn't become a moderator? They wouldn't give a Moderator position to a newbie.''

''While that is true, I'll contact him and tell him to be as helpful to anyone possible. We may have to play the waiting game for a while.'' I replied.

''Do you think we can survive for a long period of time?''

''Well, if it takes to long. We might have to go to Plan B, which I hope isn't the case.''

I explain to the Nighthawks and the Recruits what the second plan is. I look around and see dropped jaws. Seems like everyone is in awe about it.

''....Why? We were never informed that you were in possession of one of those!'' A recruit said.

''I don't want it to result to that.'' I said. ''It could be very dangerous to us as well.''

The room went silent for a moment. I addressed everything for the meeting so I adjourned it.

''OK everyone. Back to your posts. This meeting is over!''

I stepped off the podium and headed to my office. While walking away, I heard the constant talk about the back-up plan.

''Can you believe it?''

''That's ridiculous!''

''Oh my god.''

I cover my face in disappointment. Something as big as that shouldn't be casually revealed in a normal meeting. I knew I caught everyone off guard. I could tell by their faces. I quickly escaped the room hoping no one would ask me any questions.

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I feel like a rat in a maze. I don't know where to go.

I keep thinking to myself, why is this place so happy? I guess I find it weird due to the way I was raised. No remorse. I stopped paying attention to where I was going but continued to walk, letting my thoughts guide me. I snapped out of it when I almost tripped over a rock on the floor.

Before I knew it, I was in an alley.

''This place looks depressing.'' I said out loud, with no one to hear my voice.

I took a couple steps forward and noticed a graffiti message on the wall. It read:

''Notorious A-holes''

Raymond1996
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Aelita_333


I was skeptic at first, what did this mean? Notorious A-holes?

I thought that they may have been members that did something really bad. I got out my phone and looked over the list of members on the site. I typed in the first name on the list:

Raymond1996

This guy joined pretty early when these forums started. I was more curious about what he did.

I typed in the other two and what popped up was this message:

''The following user(s) does/don't exist.''

I was confused, why have a wall of users when 2 of them don't even exist? The thought crossed my mind. This place had a pretty bad stench, but I was more focused on this message to be bothered by it.

3 members, deemed notorious a-holes, but only 1 of them actually exist...I kept wondering how this is possible. Whoever made this either made up those other members, or is psychic and made a theory that these guys would join and cause a ruckus.

Which makes me believe it might have been this Raymond guy. Whether he made this up or saw it in a vision or something, it sent shivers to my spine. I'm only gonna assume that he was banned.

''This is...silly.'' I thought to myself.

I kept thinking about it and realized, this was just a graffiti in a depressing alley! I shouldn't start thinking about it's message.

I kept staring at it until I heard someone's voice. I turned my head and saw someone standing at the end of the street.

''What are you doing there?'' He said.

I couldn't see his face, it was so dank and dark in this alley that it was hard to see things from far away.

''Excuse me, I asked you a question.'' He said.

''Oh, sorry, who are you..?'' I asked.

''I think I asked that question first. That or I'm mentally insane, which isn't surprising for my standards.'' He said.

He took a couple steps forward, revealing his face. He had short hair and was about as tall as me, maybe a little shorter.

''I'll be the mature one and introduce myself!'' He said. ''My name is fourinone.''

''My name is MessengerOfHawks.'' I reply.

''MessengerOfHawks, eh? Too long, how 'bout I call you...MoHawk!'' Fourinone said.

I started to laugh, and he joined with me. That name might stick, it's pretty clever.

That's when I noticed the colour clothes he was wearing, orange. He also carried a banhammer, which was shrunken down to about the size of a spoon and was tucked into his pocket.

I heard my boss's voice in my head. That's when I remembered the task he gave me...

''Find a moderator, any one will do, and ask them if they're looking for a new moderator. If so, do anything you can to get that job.

Damn, I want to know why. Why do I need to become a Moderator? What if they aren't accepting any? I'm creating more problems for, more questions than answers.

''So...fourinone, you're a mod, right?'' I asked.

''Righty-o.'' He replied.

''Well, do you know if you guys are looking for another guy as a moderator?''

''Well, at the moment we're looking for a Global Moderator since one of the candidates, Avo, was banned.''

''Really? What did he do?''

''Well, a lot of crap, which is hard to believe.''

He looked down on the ground, as if he was at a funeral. I don't know who Avo is but I'm guessing he was a loved member and broke the rules. Surprising. I was shocked to hear that there is a Moderator position. I quickly went in for the bait.

''So, you think I could have it?''

Wow, I thought to myself. That has to be the worst approach to get something you want. Ever. I'm a straight, A plus, 100% dumbass.

''Oh man.'' He replied. ''Um, You see MoHawk, it's kinda hard to answer that, I mean...you just joined a couple hours ago.We don't give moderator positions to just anyone. Um, Can I explain somewhere else? It smells like sh*t in here.''

He started to walk away, I took a couple steps until a remembered the graffiti, I quickly called to him.

''FOURINONE!''

''What is it?''

''Come here. There is something on this wall. A message, in Graffiti.''

He walked back into the alley to take a look at the wall. The look on his face turned into a confused one.

''This...is strange, to say the least.'' He stated.

''Do you know what this means?''

''I know Raymond1996, we should talk about this at my house. Let's go.''

Fourinone left and I followed suit. Whatever that message meant, it could either be a prank, or a warning.

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''2 hours, Joe.''

I hear the voice of R after a long silence, it's been a while since the three of us had spoken. I don't know why...

''2 hours 'til what?'' Delta asked.

''2 hours until Joe is let out. It's been about a week, I think, if I'm correct.''

2 hours until I'm free? Free from this prison? I was pretty excited, but terrified at the same time. R and Delta are breaking out with me. Oh my god. I knew this wasn't going to end well.

''You seem worried, Joe. What's the matter?'' R asked.

''Oh nothing...it's just...''

''Thinking about backing out of the plan?'' R asked.

''N-no...'' I stayed silent, this wasn't the kind of conversation I wanted to be involved in.

''Hmm. What do we do for the next couple hours?'' Delta asked.

''We plan. We're going to knock out the guard when he comes to release Joe. Then we hide out at his house while he looks for weapons.''

''Um, R, can I ask you something?'' I said.

''Shoot.''

''In your sleep, I keep hearing you mumble names...Level Story Mode, Aelita_333...''

''Um, that's strange. That probably means nothing!''

I knew by the way he stuttered that he was lying, he was intimidating but when it comes to bluffing, he's pretty bad at it.

''Seriously, there is no one here, just us three. You can tell us. I mean, you noticed as well, right Delta?''

R let out a big sigh and began to explain:

''Fine, you want to know so badly? Very well. While I was wreaking havoc on the city, I spray painted a message deep in an alley, where hardly anybody could hardly see it...''

''I'm telling you, MoHawk, I don't know where that graffiti came from or who made it!''

''It's really strange, I don't why I'm so intrigued by it! It could be a warning! Have you ever thought of that?''

''I think I'll talk to Runouw about it if you're that worried, we've never got any graffiti on the city walls before...


''...Aelita_333 and Level Story Mode, that's what I believe will happen.'' R continued. ''I see things, strange things...I have no choice but to believe them.''

Although no one could see, I put on a shocked look on my face. What I just heard was unbelievable. R believes that he's psychic and he saw those names...and what they would do to the city. I just think he's insane.

''They haunt my dreams, they never stop...'' R said.

I bit my lip and went with it. Listening to weird as hell stories seems to be the norm right now. I ask R how much longer until I'm let out and he said:

''46 minutes''

It's about to happen, in a matter of minutes I'm going to be let out and the plan will commence. It will be time to get revenge on that city. I feel like I'm turning into R with every second that passes...

Every god forsaken second...

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''Modship, my friend, is not something we give to any normal member. He has to be really nice and helpful and know how to do their job.'' Four said.

I'm currently at fourinone's apartment. He's explaining to me about how modship isn't easy to acquire...

''So you're saying I have to play the waiting game?'' I asked

''Yes.''

Damn, I thought. I would be failing my boss if I didn't get the position, but what else was I going to do?

''As for the graffiti...'' I continued.

''I told you already, dude. I would talk to Runouw about it.'' Four interrupted.

''But, don't you think it's a little weird? There is a list of members but 2 of them don't exist!''

Four was just as confused as I was, I knew asking him about wouldn't do any good. But I still tried.

''You know, why don't you come with me to Runouw's office tomorrow?'' Four said. ''We'll both explain this to him, sound like a plan?''

''Sounds like a plan!''

''Meanwhile, you can stay here for the night, since I'm assuming you don't have a house yet?''

''Not yet.''

''Well, no problem! Make yourself comfortable, plus my fridge is fully restocked, just don't eat too much, it's supposed to last 2 or 3 weeks.''

''Heh, no problem, buddy!''

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Re: The Legend of Avo 2

Postby MessengerOfDreams » April 21st, 2011, 9:27 pm

LMFAO at the Notorious ♥♥♥♥♥♥♥ graffiti. :lol:

And I really like the Nighthawks. They seem to be above the typical henchmen crew. Also, your best chapter yet in terms of storyline, writing and characterization. It seemed like a serious story.

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Re: The Legend of Avo 2

Postby Avo » April 22nd, 2011, 1:38 pm

The last part of Chapter 4 is released, happy reading!
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