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Re: The Legend of Avo 2

PostPosted: May 1st, 2011, 6:49 pm
by Avo
Chapter 5 - Search

''It's hard to explain, Blablob, but Superyoshi handed me that file.'' Runouw stated.

I don't what's more surprising, I thought. The fact that Suyo is alive or the fact that he handed a bunch of fake warnings to Runouw that were targeted at Avo. I was too shocked to speak, I didn't know what to say.

''He told me that he I won't be seeing him again.'' Runouw added.

''What does that mean?'' I asked.

''I don't know. I have no clue about the whereabouts of him right now.''

I rub my hand around my neck. This was surprising news, I didn't know what to do. Should I find Suyo and ask why he did this? He could be anywhere, he might not even be in this city....if he wants to keep his identity secret, staying here wouldn't be a good idea.

''How...is he alive?'' I asked ''Avo and Buffooner saw him hang himself with their own eyes.''

I started to see confusion in Runouw's eyes. It looked he didn't know.

''You...don't know?''

''Blab, things like that are personal matters and I don't want to butt in.''

''Butt in? BUTT IN?'' I shouted. ''Hanging yourself and suddenly come back to life isn't personal! Are you insane?''

''Blab, I have work to do. Now I don't know what you want to do with this but if you're going to look for him, you might wanna start at his mansion atop Mt. Runouw.'' Runouw replied.

Mt. Runouw...I remember that place. It's gigantic, not as big as Everest but still pretty big. Suyo must have put a lot of money into that mansion. He has guards guarding the elevator that leads straight to his mansion, it's like a super shortcut. If you're not allowed to see him, you'd have to climb up the whole mountain by yourself. It's devastating.

''I think I know what I want to do first.'' I said.

''What would that be?''

''Dig up his grave.''

''DIG UP HIS GRAVE?'' Runouw yelled. ''Are you insane?''

''Hey, you said he's alive, so I might have a theory why Avo and Buff saw him hang himself in his closet.''

''Fine, you have my permission, but you don't have is a shovel. Ever thought of that?''

Damn, of course I need a shovel. What was I gonna do? Dig him up with my hands like a dog?! I look at my watch...9:30? I need to get back home.

''I guess I'll have to wait 'til tomorrow, I need to get back home. My parents will kill me if I stay here for too long. I already missed dinner.''

''Logging out so soon? It's the weekend, there's no school tomorrow!'' Runouw said.

That is true, I thought. But it doesn't matter if it's a school day or the middle of summer, I always have to be back by a certain time.

''Damn it!'' I said. ''What am I gonna do?''

''Well, I have a plan. Why don't you wait until your parents are asleep, then come back late at night and dig up his grave?'' Runouw said.

That makes sense, I mean, digging up his grave when dozens of people are around? That would certainly turn heads.

''I guess that could work...I'll see what I can do.'' I replied. ''Until then, I'll see you later.''

''Bye.''

The way to log out is barbaric. And possibly the worst idea ever. You have to stab yourself, anywhere and you've logged out. What the hell? It doesn't hurt or anything but still. I take a knife from Runouw's desk and stab it in my right shoulder...

-----

''Get ready, Joe! In just 30 minutes, you'll be let out! You remember the plan right?'' R said.

''Yes, we've only been going over it 20 thousand times.'' I replied.

''Start the countdown.'' Delta said.

I was dead tired, I haven't slept for a long time. There is too much on my mind to do so. I keep thinking it's daytime or nighttime. If I go through with this, I'm hoping to god that it's nighttime.

''Do any of you know if it's daytime or nighttime right now?'' I asked.

''Nope.''

''No.''

Darn, that's too bad. If I really do have a house, where would it be? I don't know! I lost my memory!

''T Minus 28 minutes.'' R said.

I started to get goosebumps, I was worried like you wouldn't believe. More worried than presenting a speech in front of your entire school.

''This is gonna be a blast!'' R stated.

-----

I'm lying in my bed right now just thinking. I'll be going by Bryan while I'm here.

I didn't want to tell my parents about this dilemma, they really hate the transporter to Runouw.com. They don't think it's safe. But it's been done in almost every other site!

I saw a piece of lined paper and a pen on my table. It was supposed to be my homework for when I get back on Monday but I had another plan for it.

Bryan's Log #1

A lot of crap is happening at the moment.

Avo's banned, someone gave a folder containing a bunch of fake warnings to Runouw. And that person was Superyoshi!

What's more surprising? Suyo's alive? He gave a bunch of fake warnings to Runouw? That were about Avo? I didn't know.

I'm waiting for my parents to fall asleep so I can go back to Runouw City and dig up Suyo's grave, I have a theory. It's a longshot but still.

20 minutes later...

My parents just went to bed, I'd say in about 5 or 6 minutes, they should be asleep. I'll sneak downstairs and log back in.


-----

*knock* *knock*

I jumped out of shock, I wasn't expecting anyone to come to my door.

''Um, come in.'' I said.

''Hey Boss, can I talk to you about the whole speech back there?'' A Nighthawk said.

I already knew before he entered the room that he wanted to talk about that. What can I say? It just came out of nowhere. It's like saying 'Hey honey, I'm going to the store to buy some bread, oh and by the way, I'm cheating on you with your best friend.'

''I know, I know, you're shocked, aren't you?'' I proclaim.

''Well, yes. I mean...nuking the city? What good will that do?''

''Look, I don't know, but if we don't find civilization soon, we'll die in this forest! I mean, my office is a damn hut! Didn't you know that?''

''I know. I understand.''

He looked up at the walls. Which were made of a type of wood. Oak? I don't know. He then looked down on the floor, saw a small bug ans squished it. I knew he was uncomfortable.

''Any word on Jappa?'' He said as he changed the subject.

''Nope. The last update I got from him was him saying he found a mod. And he asked if he could become one.''

''This has been taking too long, why don't you contact him?''

''I tried a few minutes ago, actually. He didn't answer. I don't know what the hell he's doing...''

He was about to say something but was immediately interrupted by another Nighthawk, who barged in to my house....or hut...

''BOSS! BIG PROBLEM!'' He said.

I quickly stand up in confusion. ''What is it?'' I asked.

He paused after every word due to being out of breath from running. ''It's...Xavier...He's.....really sick.''

My eyes widened. I quickly run outside telling the Nighthawk to guide me to him, the other Nighthawk followed.

He led me to the town square, where most of the houses have been built. With a bonfire in the middle and a lake to the side.

''Right there.'' He said.

I kneel down and take a look, he's barely conscious. His eyes are slightly closed and a can see a red spot on his arm. It looks like a bite mark.

''What happened?'' I asked.

''I....I...'' He tried to speak, but hardly anything came out.

'' I think he got bit by a spider.'' A recruit said.

''A spider? What kind of spider?'' I said.

''I don't know, with a bite like that, it could be a Black Widow.''

All the Nighthawks and Recruits gathered around and made a circle between Xavier and I.

''Do we have any medicine?'' I ask.

I saw everyone shake their heads. I started to panic more and more with every second passing by.

'I'm sorry, we didn't bring any.'' A recruit said. ''It must have burned or something when our city was destroyed.''

''Damn it....DAMN IT!'' I stand up in anger. I didn't know what to do.

''Jappa better hurry with the modship so we could take over the city.'' A Nighthawk said.

I stormed off, back to my house. I didn't tell anybody why, but I going to contact Jappa. And I'll keep calling until he answers. This can't be happening.

-----

5 minutes later...

My parents are asleep, their TV is off. It's time.

I get out of bed and slowly open the door, hoping not to make too much noise.

I make it downstairs, I don't think they heard me. My computer is in sight.

I get to the site and log on, before I know it, I'm in Runouw City.


It's night out. It's hard to see anything, on the bright side, no one is outside.

I make my way to the Graveyard. I see quite a few graves here. not a lot but a around 20 or so. I walk up to Suyo's Gravestone.

''Man, I need a shovel.'' I said out loud.

I loom around and in the distance, I see, what else but a shovel. Convenient, eh? Someone must have left it here and they digging up a grave or something....creepy.

I pick it up and walk over to the grave stone, I start digging, with no guess in my mind about how long it will take...

-----

''JUST 2 MORE MINUTES YOU GUYS!'' R said.

''2 minutes?'' I said in nervousness. ''Are you serious?''

''I know, time went by quickly.'' R said.

''Where's Delta?'' I ask.

''I dunno, I think he might be asleep.'' R replied.

''Well, wake him up.''

''I don't know where he is! We're in LIMBO! I can't see crap!''

We both start yelling his name in hopes he would hear us.

After a couple seconds, he wakes up.

''What do you guys want? I'm sleeping!'' He said in anger.

''Delta! Just 2 minutes! Wait, now just 1 minute!'' R said in excitement.

I'm really worried, in a minute, we're about to commit another crime.

''I don't know if I'm ready for this!'' I yelled.

''Don't worry, Joe!'' R said. ''This will be fun! Like an adventure!''

''Seriously?'' Delta said. ''1 minute?''

I can't tell if Delta enjoys this plan or is scared like me. I'd say he's about neutral.

''30 SECONDS!'' R said. ''I'm counting down! 28!''

Oh my god. It's about to happen...

''25!''

I'm gonna be let out and R is gonna knock out the guard!

''22!''

I'm sweating a lot under the pressure. My breathing starts to grow heavy. I feel like I'm gonna faint.

''16!''

I can't stop this, I can't. There is nothing I can do.

''13!''

That's when I saw it, my life flash before my eyes. It's like I was dying. I quickly snap out of it when I hear R shout:

''1!''

...Then I heard a creak, followed by seeing a bright light and a shadowy figure, which turned out to be the guard.

''Avolerators, your time is up. You can come out now.'' The guard said

''Avolerators...?'' I said in confusion.

Then I heard it, the sound of a punch, straight to the guard's face. R punched him and knocked him out!

''GO GO GO! WE NEED TO GET OUT OF HERE! QUICK!'' R shouted.

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Re: The Legend of Avo 2

PostPosted: May 1st, 2011, 7:36 pm
by sirknightingfail
Whoa. just whoa. so much suspense. next chapter please. I cannot wait!

Re: The Legend of Avo 2

PostPosted: June 21st, 2011, 5:30 pm
by Avo
Chapter 6 - Friends/Enemies

Shovel in hand, determined look on face, I'm ready. I mean, you gotta be ready when you are about to up someone's grave.

I could feel the pressure, sweat dripping down my face, a bit nervous about this. You ever dig up someone's grave? It is...well, it feels weird beforehand.

I had an idea that I wanted to take control of. Either Runouw is mentally insane, or Suyo really did hand him that folder. Confusing premise, but hey, I don't care.

What was my plan? Think about for a second, Suyo hung himself, but that is only what Avo and Buff THINK. Maybe, he planted a fake Suyo in his closet, left a suicide note and then ran away.

"The things you do for your friends" I said to myself.

I was gritting my teeth, my grip on the shovel got tighter, like I was gonna break it in two. I put my other hand on the shovel and pushed it hard against the ground near Suyo supposed grave.

I gave it my all with every thrust of the shovel, I got pretty deep pretty quickly, seriously...you should have been there.

Then, I suddenly hit something, which I only assumed was the coffin. I dropped the shovel and brushed the dirt off with my hands, and soon enough...I saw it. A sign reading:

"Superyoshi"

I was finally done digging, I was already exhausted from all that work but I still had to open the coffin. I took the shovel again, put the tip against the coffin, put my foot on the shovel and pushed down hard. Soon enough, it was open.

"Phew."

Man, a lot of work just to dig up a coffin, I feel like Dampe, that dude from Zelda.

I glanced slightly to the right and saw three shadowy figures. I stepped a bit closer to try to get a better look, but they saw me and completely booked it. I thought of going after them but I already have enough on my plate.

I finally look down to see a body in the coffin, it looked like Suyo, but I didn't think it actually was. I looked closer and then saw a chilling piece of clear evidence.

Stitches.

Yep, it was a fake, I knew it. It was just a Suyo plush, available now in your nearest Toys R Us. I tried ripping it open but my efforts were futile. But it felt like it had heavy objects in it.

It did not seem possible, but I was right. This Suyo is a fake.

I immediately put the fake back in the coffin and started burying it, it didn't take as long, which was good.

I was exhausted as hell, and hell is exhausting. I still those 3 people on my mind that I saw earlier. Should I try following them? I thought. They seemed to be headed west, to the suburb area. I might as well, my curiosity always gets the best of me.

I left the shovel there and began heading west, I did not know what to expect, I looked at my watch, it was 2:34 AM. Damn, I thought. It got late really fast. But I was determined to catch them, whoever they were.

-----

It was Delta, R and I. My heart was racing, I couldn't think straight. It was hard to even remember my made up name.

...I waited for R to say something about my thoughts but I quickly remembered how we weren't in Limbo anymore.

"So, where is your house, Joe?" R asked.

That is another thing, I can't remember my house. I cannot remember where it is or what it looks like. What the hell. How are they gonna hide there if we can't even find it?

"I...don't know..." I said nervously.

"Oh damn, that's right, you are still suffering from Amnesia."

"Well, what are we gonna do?" Delta asked.

I was really worried now, we are out in the middle of the street, does no one but me realize this?

"Well, we have to figure it out." I said, I knew what I said didn't help the situation at all but I don't care.

''Maybe we can hide somewhere else" Delta suggested.

I wasn't too crazy about that idea, it's really dark and creepy here. I wouldn't be surprised if someone could here us...it's almost as quiet as Limbo.

''OK, here's the scoop" R said. "Delta and I will look for a place to hide, once we've found it, I'll call you. Make sure to get a lot of weapons, as much as you can carry.''

Without giving me a chance to speak, the two of them left. Leaving me here on my own. I didn't know where to start looking, I ended up walking east without realizing, hopefully my mind will take me somewhere interesting and helpful.

As I kept walking, I saw something, no...someone. He started walking towards me, making a B-Line. I got worried, was it a cop? No, this is the internet for crying out loud.

He kept getting closer and closer until he stopped about 10 feet in front of me, in a surprised voice, he said:

"...Avo?"

...That name, Avo...Avolerators...it was very strange to me. Was that by chance, my username?

I was skeptic, but that could be the only reason. I didn't know who he was, though. He walked a little closer. Only about 3 feet but it was too close for comfort.

''Is that you?'' He said.

I didn't know how to respond. I don't know who he is, but obviously he knew me. I tried to play it cool.

''H-h-h-h-h-h-h-h-h-h-h-hi.''

Well, might as well throw playing it cool out the window. But I think he was too surprised to see me to realize the abnormal amounts of stuttering.

''You're here! You're finally back!'' He said in excitement.

''Oh, yeah, I finally got released from my, uh, ban!''

I was really nervous, I don't know what else to say. Plus I got R and Delta running off somewhere.

...Then it hit me.

...They were supposed to call.

...Whenever they found a place to hide.

...And that might be very soon.

Now I was REALLY nervous. If this guy finds out I am harbouring two escapees, who knows how much crap I'll be in. Knee deep.

''How long has it been?'' He asked.

''Heh, it felt like ages, I can't even tell.''

THAT wasn't a lie. Being in Limbo felt like I was in there for a couple years. It's so boring there, time seems to actually run slower.

''What are you doing out this late?'' He asked.

''Oh...you know, just walkin' back home.''

I wish I could get this guy's name, but I can't ask, he was probably one my closest friends before I got Amnesia.

Then, my temporarily worst nightmare happened.

*ring* *ring*

...My phone rang.

I looked on the screen, and in a bright letter, it said:

''R''

It was him, they must have found a place. So what was I to do?

If I pick it up, I'll have to try to make it sound like I'm talking to someone else, which will be awkward. But if I don't answer it, I won't know where R and Delta are.

''Hey, your phone is ringing, Avo.'' He said.

''Oh, I know, uh, it's a telemarketer.'' I replied.

''But you haven't even answered it to see who it is.''

He looked confused, his expression on his face made it look like he knew I was up to something.

''Oh, it stopped ringing, look at that.''

Then...it rang again.

My only thoughts were, R again.

''Telemarketer again?'' He asked.

''Uh, I believe so.''

''Answer it.''

I got nervous, I had to disguise it. And explain to R later.

''Joe! There you are! Why didn't you pick up?'' R said.

''Uh...um...''

''Not important.'' R continued. ''Anyway, I found a perfect place! A sewer grate near some guy's house. Sure it sounds gross but it's perfect! Who would search there? What do you think?''

''Um, I don't want to switch phone companies!'' I said.

''Wha--'' I hung up immediately.

''Told you, telemarketer. Or something.''

''OK...'' He looked even more confused.

Geez, it's hard trying to hide all of this. But I better go to that sewer soon.

''Uh, listen, I gotta split, I gotta go to bed. I'm super tired.'' I said.

''Oh, sure, no problem. I understand, I'm pretty tired as well, so I best be going, too.'' He replied.

And with that, he left. Vanished, or logged out, I guess.

I dial R's number as fast as I can. I have to explain everything.

-----

Bryan's Log #2

Man, a lot happened over the past couple hours.

I met with Runouw, and he explained that Suyo gave him that folder with all the warning! Insane!

I then made my way to the graveyard to examine Suyo's grave. People believe he's dead, but what I found was shocking.

A Suyo plush. A fake, a red herring, whatever. So that means the real Suyo is out there somewhere. Who knows where.

As I was digging, I saw three figures walking past. Trying to sneak very quietly, I quickly noticed and they ran away.

I went to go see who they were after I was done. I followed in the direction they ran to and found a familiar face.

Avo.

Yep, Avo. He was finally released. It felt like forever.

But it was...strange when he got back.

He acted all weird when his phone rang.

He said it was a telemarketer, but he didn't even check to see.

Then it rang again, and he said it was a telemarketer.

But I'm still suspicious.

I think he might be one of those guys who was running away from me. It's the only possible answer.

But that's something I'll have to check out tomorrow.

Anyway, I'll best be getting to bed.

So, we'll see what happens tomorrow..

..Er, today, since it's like 3 AM.


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Re: Metropolis

PostPosted: December 20th, 2011, 11:03 pm
by Avo
I'll be continuing this. Since people lost interest in this ever since I...stopped writing. But, I'll continue. I'll try to dish out a chapter this week.

Re: Metropolis

PostPosted: December 25th, 2011, 12:43 am
by SuperMIC
Heh, you better continue this. ;)

Re: Metropolis

PostPosted: December 26th, 2011, 2:59 pm
by Avo
Yeah, I'm almost done Chapter 7. It will be released either today or tomorrow.

Re: Metropolis

PostPosted: December 26th, 2011, 4:23 pm
by Avo
Chapter 7 - Underground

I stood there staring out into the distance, the guy I was just talking to just logged out after stabbing himself in the arm, I don't know what that's about...

I tried to think of my next move. I barely remember what R told me during that phone call. I was panicking too much to pay attention.

After spacing out, I decided I would call R back and explain to him the situation and why I, well, didn't wanna switch phone companies.

But before I did, I took a look around the street. Houses everywhere. Not too big, not too small. I wonder what these houses look like on the inside. And if I do have a house, I wonder what that looks like. Am I a messy person? A clean one? I dunno.

I keep thinking about my lost memory. I keep thinking about Limbo, this very city, and R and Delta.

I'm constantly worrying about R and his plan. Getting "revenge" on this city. I swear he dreams of bloodshed every night.

But I never really think about Delta.

While R looks like a regular grade schooler, Delta looks like a high schooler, he even sounds like one, too.

There's nothing extraordinarily unique about the guy. But The one thing I DID notice was a weird tattoo on his forehead, which he keeps hidden behind his brown-hair bangs.

He just suddenly appeared right there in Limbo. He didn't give out his full name. Only Delta. And I never know what he thinks. He just goes along with whatever R wants to do. Does he want to get revenge on this city? Does he have any remorse. Did he have really close friends before his ban?

I had so many questions to ask the guy. But I need to find out where him and R are first.

I grabbed my phone from my pocket, then realized that it's almost out of battery. Do I happen to have a phone charger anywhere?

Time was running out, 4% left, it said on the battery. I quickly dialed R's number, which he gave me when we escaped Limbo.

But right before I could dial the last four digits, the phone rang again! It scared the ever living out of me, I almost dropped my phone on the hard pavement, but managed to catch it before it hit the ground.

Once again, it said "R" in a big, bright letter. I hesitated to answer, but finally pressed the talk button.

''H-hello?" I stammered.

"What the hell was that?" R yelled.

"What do you mean?" I replied.

But in reality, I knew what he was talking about. I can imagine being on the other side of that phone call. If I heard R say that he "didn't want to switch phone companies." I'd think that the guy needs to take some medicine and get some rest.

"I don't want to switch phone companies?'' R's tone was fierce and intimidating for a kid in his pre-teen years.

''Yeah...about that...''

I began to explain what had happened. What happened when R and Delta left, what happened when that random guy stopped me in my tracks, and how I dealt with the situation.

R was completely silent, even after I finished explaining, he didn't utter a word. I think he was trying to process what I said, but it was taking a while.

I called out his name, maybe he was spacing out. But he didn't answer.

I called his name again. No answer.

I looked at my phone screen. And the absolute worst thing had to happen.

My phone died.

Without thinking, I began to cuss out loud, I was pissed and shocked. I seem to be having the worst luck in the world.

Did he hear what I had to say? Did my phone die when I said my first word?

That was the last thing I cared about, I was really worried about their location. I tried to recall what R said in the last call about the two's whereabouts.

Sew....sewer? My memory was fuzzy. But I'm 75% sure that's what he said. It narrows it down, but not by much. I don't know how big the sewer system is in this damn city.

I started to run, I don't know where but I ran as fast as I could. I need to find a sewer grate. Any sewer grate.

And I need to find it quickly.

-----

I sat there in my office, my fingers tapping on the wooden desk.

One of my recruits is badly injured. A spider bite. A deadly spider bite.

What the hell was Jappa doing? I knew that getting something like modship was far from easy. But it would be nice to keep me updated every now and then.

I assume every Nighthawk and recruit is asleep in their respective...huts. We're running low on food. This isn't the place for 100 people to live in.

I looked up at the bulletin. Only one piece of paper was pinned in the center of the board. It said "Annual Recruit Graduation Ceremony...''

The date was scratched off. That paper was made when all of us actually had a proper place to live in. Our old hideout.

Who knows how many recruits could have become real Nighthawks. But I can't hold a graduation in this ♥♥♥♥ jungle.

I was running out of time. I had doubt in my mind when letting Jappa go into Runouw City, but that doubt wasn't big enough. Now that decision was possibly the worst decision I made in my life. I don't know why the Nighthawks thought Jappa could pull this off.

He's probably lollygagging about or chatting with the local residents. He probably forgot about the whole damn mission!

And calling is futile. Is his phone dead? Is it off? Did he lose it?

I kept thinking about the worst case scenario if Jappa fails to breach the city's security. It worries me.

We could all wind up dead in a matter of a couple days.

But I wasn't gonna let that happen. I had to take action. Jappa was taking too long, so I have no choice.

I must send another Nighthawk to that city. I'll hold a meaning for it tomorrow.

It's decided. I got up from my desk, bumping forcefully into it, several papers fell onto the floor. But only one caught my eye. One paper that I completely forgot that I had.

A "missing person" paper.

The guy on the paper. He was one of the greatest Nighthawks to ever live. He had the brains, the brawn and the all the logic. But he disappeared two days after our hideout was destroyed.

I only had one picture of him, meaning only one copy of the missing person report.

But it was enough. Every recruit and Nighthawk searched every inch of the jungle and anywhere else they could look. There was no sign of him anywhere.

Then gradually, everybody started to forget about him.

Everyone except me, I couldn't forget him. I even look for him at night every now and again without anybody knowing, hoping that he will return. He was like my right hand man.

I let out a huge sigh and picked up all the papers that fell and placed them on the desk neatly.

I couldn't get to sleep. There was too much on my mind. I felt like searching once again for him. Knowing I'll be setting myself up for failure. But what else is a leader of an organization that lives in a hut and is starving and dying of thirst supposed to do?

I opened the door and left silently. Trying my best not to wake anybody up.

-----

I was panicking. I didn't know where to go.

My phone is dead. It's pitch black outside and I need to find a sewer grate.

Why a sewer grate? I didn't know what was up with that. Even if I did find where R and Delta were hiding, would I want to stay there? It would probably stink down there. But I guess it would have to until the three of us find my supposed house.

Thinking about it more, where else would we hide? A sewer is the best place since no one would necessarily look.

I walked around the street, trying to keep low in case someone was still awake and ended up seeing me. That's the last thing I'd want to happen, another conversation with someone I don't know.

"I see you're finally back."

My heart skipped a beat, a sudden voice broke the dead silence of the night. I quickly spun around to see who spoke.

"W-who are you?" I asked.

The man standing 20 feet before me. He was wearing a trench coat and a top hat to cover himself. I guess he didn't want anybody to see him. But that made him more intimidating.

He began to walk forward, my heart started to beat faster with each step he took. His hands were deep in his pockets and he walked a little weird. Which was more scary.

"Me? I'm surprised you don't know."

He stopped about two feet in front of me, I took half a step back and gulped.

"You don't need to be afraid, my boy." He said in a calm but creepy tone.

"If you want money, I assure you, I don't have any." I took a couple more steps back. I didn't want this guy that close to me.

He took his right hand out of his pocket to reveal a folder. A large yellow folder. It had writing on the front but it has too dark to see what it read.

"Money is not what I'm here for. I see I timed my arrival perfectly.'' He added. ''Avolerators, Avo. How was Limbo?''

I gasped. This guy knew I was banned. He even said that name. Avolerators. That must be my username.

"H-how did you know that?" I stuttered. "How did you know I was banned?"

"Well, the answer is quite simple. It's like answering 1 + 1."

He walked toward me again, this time I was trapped between him and a wall. I started to sweat under the pressure. Was he going to kill me? Kidnap me?

The guy was so close, I could smell his breath. Which stank, by the way. He lifted the folder up near my face and whispered into my ear:

"I'm Superyoshi, the man that banned you."

Re: Metropolis

PostPosted: January 17th, 2012, 5:38 am
by Karyete
[quote=Avo]I already knew before he entered the room that he wanted to talk about that. What can I say? It just came out of nowhere. It's like saying 'Hey honey, I'm going to the store to buy some bread, oh and by the way, I'm cheating on you with your best friend.'[/quote]

:awe:

Re: Metropolis

PostPosted: February 14th, 2012, 7:20 am
by Zunar
Pretty good. Good suspense, and all. Could I possibly be in?

Re: Metropolis

PostPosted: April 6th, 2012, 10:29 am
by Yoshi Boo 118
I do hope you decide to continue this, because this story I find pretty interesting. I read the first story and I can definitely see the improvements in your writing style. Please add more chapters. :3