The Legendary Twelve Reunited *BRANDO'S TAKING OVER*

[MICrophone]

Hello, boys. I'm back!

That's right, I am back and better than ever (I hope)! I have posted Chapter 8, but before you read that, reread the last five lines or so of Chapter 7, since I made a change. Also, I have added a poll (hard to miss). Feel free to vote; you can change your vote if you decide later that your opinion has changed. Also, I have separated the characters at the very end of this chapter, so the next chapters will be a little easier to follow hopefully.

Also, I have started a new story called The Cycle which I will be working on simultaneously. So, chapters may come a little slower for both. However, chapters will come regularly again like they did before my little writing hiatus.

So get readin' folks!

[Ayrayen]

I think its geting better. Now it starts! I mean now it is Thinking. Not only If we can run or just fight them or balbalabla.
Good job =D!!!!

[zebtrestalala]

I liked it. Like Ayrayen said, it wasn't just "smash the spambots." Now we're using our heads!

The one problem I have with this is one that you probably can't really work around, and that's that with so many people it's hard to give individual characters to each person. It's still a good story, and I like it, I'm just observing that fact.

[MICrophone]

Yes, Buff pointed that out earlier. That's why I'm making them split up at the end of the chapter, and in Chapter 9 they will split up even more so I can focus on smaller groups, and through that will be able to give each character a personality.

EDIT: It is with great sorrow that I announce that I am suspending work on this for the time being. I sort of have lost motivation, I sort of made a mistake doing the sequel to begin with because I have too many characters to work with, and if I were to do a sequel I shouldn't have added any new characters (except the villains), and I want to work on other things. If I regain motivation to work on this at some later point in time, I will, but for now I am stopping work on this. I am sorry to disappoint my fans, but I will continue work on The Cycle (though that may come a bit slowly) and will also be starting a *gasp* new project that I'm really excited about. Not revealing any more details about that, but be on the look out for it. I also want to focus on getting my level series done, my music, and of course, my life outside of the forums. (Yes, I have a life. Shocking, I know.) So once again, I am sorry to disappoint my fans, but hopefully I will be able to build as great a fanbase as this series has had with my other work. Sorry guys.

[MessengerOfDreams]

Really fridging nice.

Wait till we get to the most suspensful part, then tell us "ah, forget it, I'm done."

I can understand why, though.

Maybe buff, since he has little on his plate, could take over, kill off all but five people and take it from there?

[Avo]

Yes, Buff pointed that out earlier. That's why I'm making them split up at the end of the chapter, and in Chapter 9 they will split up even more so I can focus on smaller groups, and through that will be able to give each character a personality.

EDIT: It is with great sorrow that I announce that I am suspending work on this for the time being. I sort of have lost motivation, I sort of made a mistake doing the sequel to begin with because I have too many characters to work with, and if I were to do a sequel I shouldn't have added any new characters (except the villains), and I want to work on other things. If I regain motivation to work on this at some later point in time, I will, but for now I am stopping work on this. I am sorry to disappoint my fans, but I will continue work on The Cycle (though that may come a bit slowly) and will also be starting a *gasp* new project that I'm really excited about. Not revealing any more details about that, but be on the look out for it. I also want to focus on getting my level series done, my music, and of course, my life outside of the forums. (Yes, I have a life. Shocking, I know.) So once again, I am sorry to disappoint my fans, but hopefully I will be able to build as great a fanbase as this series has had with my other work. Sorry guys.

Awww!!!!

Nah, I'm kidding!

Take your time, I don't mind.

It's good to take a break once in a while!!

[MICrophone]

Oh hai. Remember this? Yeah. I sort of abandoned this because I lost interest. I know I disappointed some of you fans out there, so I'm gonna give you a plot twist so huge that you're gonna flip out.







Drama space makes a comeback.













Unlike this story.










Unless this story is coming back too.











Yep, that's right. But that's not the plot twist.











Oh snap, Suyo needs me. Gotta run.




All right, here it is. Brandobrawl, the unbelievably awesome writer of Runouw's Forum, has expressed interest in finishing this story, and so he is taking over, though he will continue to roughly follow the storyline I was planning. I think that's it. I'm gonna go before I get tackled by a crazed mob of brando fans.

[brandoprojectm]

Hello Mic boy, I finlly got around to reviewing yar second fic. You may realize I don't often review people's fics, but I felt a responsibility to review this one since it's the sequel to a fic I did review.

First, let me start off with some praise. I haven't gotten a chance to get any new cool books from the library, so i decided to print out your little story and read it at home. Let me just tell you that it was just as effective. i usually read books while i eat, but this time my dad even had to take away the printed papers from me. That's how concentrated on them i was. It wasn't Harry Potter, but it did the trick.

Secondly, I've noticed that you did moderately improve your writing. Better word selection, a bit more complex than the one i use in teh kid-friendly Runouw's Forum, but good enough that no one older than 13 gets confused. Your sentence composition and flow have also improved, but it still has some issues that i'll talk about later on.

Finally, the story's plot is kinda wacky at worst, but it still capture my attention very nicely. Your characters are characterized by their words rather than their action like in RF, and you still made it work. You implemented some minor comedy this time around, but there was only one joke that made me lol. i have to personally complement you for your final villian's name: SwineFlu000. Truly a stroke of genius.

Sadly, there exists no decent review without criticisms, so here they are. To start, i want to scold you for your utter lack of investigation and downright lies towards my character in the story. I WOULD NEVER IN MY LIFE WANT TO JOIN THE FORBIDDEN WORDS. MAYBE ONLY IF I WAS POSSESED, OR CRAZY BEYOND HOPW. But still, since this is your story, i guess you can do whatever you want. Still, it doesn't excuse your complete ignorance towards alchemy. Let me teach you something.


YOU HAVE TO ACTUALLY TOUCH THE THING YOU WANT TO TRANSMUTE. AND THE ORIGIN STORY ABOUT THE COLDPLAY CONCERT IS UTTERLY RIDICULOUS. but oh well. Non-FMA fans can't help being uncool.

So yeah, criticims. Remember I told you there were still composition problems? It's true. You've improved, but there are still some sentences I have to read twice to get what's going on. With a bit of practice, you can do a million times better.

There's also the fact that your fight scenes are still....not so good. Add a little detail....surprise...pizzaz! You can make epic battle scenes if you try coming up with original moves and describe exactly what's going on a little better.

Well, that's it! Yes, incredible as it is, there are more compliments than criticims this time around. Your story was really good. Keep up the good work Mic.

PS: Anyone who wants me to review their story, just PM me a printer friendly version. ; )

[itooscary]

brando is taking over? wow!