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Re: Kympo

Postby Blablob » April 22nd, 2010, 1:37 pm

Dear God! What have you done with my story? :o
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Re: Kympo

Postby MessengerOfDreams » April 22nd, 2010, 1:40 pm

blablob wrote:Dear God! What have you done with my story? :o
Great. He hates it. Too much humanity? If you need me i will be in a cave... :cry:
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Re: Kympo

Postby Blablob » April 22nd, 2010, 1:46 pm

I'm not saying that I don't like it, I'm just saying that it's just not the way I'd prefer. But, we'll see what the real critic (AKA MIC) has to say.
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Re: Kympo

Postby Yoshi Boo 118 » April 22nd, 2010, 3:53 pm

I like it! I get to be one of the brawlers! Good job, Moy! :D
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Re: Kympo

Postby MICrophone » April 22nd, 2010, 4:03 pm

All right, this chapter was actually the best since you took over MOY. I only have two major complaints. One, do you know what a deus ex machina is? Yeah, the whole thing with YB and the spirits and ghost is a deus ex machina. Deus ex machina isn't a good thing. If nothing else, you should at least explain it…which you failed to do. Two, this hint of a romance between Ridder and star came out of nowhere…no development leading up to this point. Truth is, this story didn't need a romance, and why are you always picking on Ridder when it comes to that?

Other than those two things, this was pretty good. Oh, and:
Chapter 11 wrote:Buff could tell that Avo and Buff both looked terrified.

Does Buff have trouble knowing when he's terrified that you pointed out that in this case he can tell? Might wanna fix that…should be blab, no?
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Re: Kympo

Postby MessengerOfDreams » April 22nd, 2010, 7:50 pm

marioiscool254 wrote:Why are you always picking on Ridder when it comes to that?


marioiscool254 wrote:Why are you always picking on Ridder when it comes to that?


marioiscool254 wrote:Why are you always picking on Ridder when it comes to that?


Bowser in Super Mario Bloopers wrote:Ohhhhh... sh*t.



I hope you're not expecting me to make a love confession of any sort. I just think Ridder's the only one who doesn't care to be labeled a female. Whoops for me. >_>
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Fanfic: Shut Up and Dance
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lying little ♥♥♥♥ with your ♥♥♥♥ story ♥♥♥♥ you
also Diddy/Lucina <3
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It's a dance that's been a long time coming for a brand new man and an unchanging woman, but once one takes the plunge there's no falling back up.
Original: Jealous Ghosts of the Mississippi
The story of Rachel meeting Amber after a lifetime of silence and being shunned
Original: Your Hand in Mine
One of my most personal stories about a dangerous romance. Now to be published in a college lit journal!
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Recent LDC Work:
Level Series: Leaves From The Vine (ft Star King)
For the 29th LDC, a theme of grassland taken through the growth of our designing society. Won the 29th LDC!
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Re: Kympo

Postby MICrophone » April 23rd, 2010, 2:10 am

I wasn't expecting you to make a love confession…that wasn't what I was driving at at all. Rather, I just think that you should pick somebody else for a change…make somebody else a girl and if they don't like it, tough. But that's just me
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Re: Kympo

Postby MessengerOfDreams » April 23rd, 2010, 6:23 am

marioiscool254 wrote:I wasn't expecting you to make a love confession…that wasn't what I was driving at at all. Rather, I just think that you should pick somebody else for a change…make somebody else a girl and if they don't like it, tough. But that's just me


:twisted: :twisted: :twisted: Oh, that gives me a sweet idea for The RPG! :twisted: :twisted: :twisted:
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Silent Conversations and a Crow's Final Song!
My latest story, and one of my personal favorites. A girl bound in silence finds the words to say to her prospective girlfriend as they visit her religious father in a dusty town on the edge of Kansas, where the crows' migration south brings forth anchored memories, the path to resolution, and a new start.

Form (25quared)
This might be like nothing you've seen before.
Updated Works! Some of my past best and current stuff: show
Writing Works!
Fanfic: Shut Up and Dance
why do I write so much about dancing you don't dance you've never danced in your entire life
lying little ♥♥♥♥ with your ♥♥♥♥ story ♥♥♥♥ you
also Diddy/Lucina <3
Fanfic: Worth a Thousand Words
Because the world needed a Samus/Dedede story
Fanfic: Ecstatic Silence
Just wanted to write and ♥♥♥♥ like this happens, you'd think I'd know better.
Fanfic: Far From the Edge
It's a dance that's been a long time coming for a brand new man and an unchanging woman, but once one takes the plunge there's no falling back up.
Original: Jealous Ghosts of the Mississippi
The story of Rachel meeting Amber after a lifetime of silence and being shunned
Original: Your Hand in Mine
One of my most personal stories about a dangerous romance. Now to be published in a college lit journal!
-------------------------
Recent LDC Work:
Level Series: Leaves From The Vine (ft Star King)
For the 29th LDC, a theme of grassland taken through the growth of our designing society. Won the 29th LDC!
--
Levels at Large:
Level Topic: Collection of MoD's Levels!
If you've ever wanted to see any level I made worth a damn, go here! From the quiet 14th LDC entrant Finis to the megasmash level series Dark, you can find links here!
"You were always a revolutionary, now there's just less of a chance of you crying in the corner." ~Ridder
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Re: Kympo

Postby StarF » April 23rd, 2010, 7:53 am

Ok i'll be walking into a sh*t load of Magma now o.x .

Lol at the crossover *coughUnlockedcough*

As always good. But cut the romance -.-
I'm Pretty sure I should put something here...
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Re: Kympo

Postby MessengerOfDreams » April 23rd, 2010, 7:57 am

Mebbe...

mebbe not...

Personally, I think a spambot story needs a bit of humanic personality. Wait till we get to the RPG! Mic and Buff! Avo and Blab? O_O
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I switch my signature a lot. If you wanna see some of my past ones, here you go.
Silent Conversations and a Crow's Final Song!
My latest story, and one of my personal favorites. A girl bound in silence finds the words to say to her prospective girlfriend as they visit her religious father in a dusty town on the edge of Kansas, where the crows' migration south brings forth anchored memories, the path to resolution, and a new start.

Form (25quared)
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Updated Works! Some of my past best and current stuff: show
Writing Works!
Fanfic: Shut Up and Dance
why do I write so much about dancing you don't dance you've never danced in your entire life
lying little ♥♥♥♥ with your ♥♥♥♥ story ♥♥♥♥ you
also Diddy/Lucina <3
Fanfic: Worth a Thousand Words
Because the world needed a Samus/Dedede story
Fanfic: Ecstatic Silence
Just wanted to write and ♥♥♥♥ like this happens, you'd think I'd know better.
Fanfic: Far From the Edge
It's a dance that's been a long time coming for a brand new man and an unchanging woman, but once one takes the plunge there's no falling back up.
Original: Jealous Ghosts of the Mississippi
The story of Rachel meeting Amber after a lifetime of silence and being shunned
Original: Your Hand in Mine
One of my most personal stories about a dangerous romance. Now to be published in a college lit journal!
-------------------------
Recent LDC Work:
Level Series: Leaves From The Vine (ft Star King)
For the 29th LDC, a theme of grassland taken through the growth of our designing society. Won the 29th LDC!
--
Levels at Large:
Level Topic: Collection of MoD's Levels!
If you've ever wanted to see any level I made worth a damn, go here! From the quiet 14th LDC entrant Finis to the megasmash level series Dark, you can find links here!
"You were always a revolutionary, now there's just less of a chance of you crying in the corner." ~Ridder
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