Kimonio wrote:I glanced at Kirby, and took in what I saw. A male boy, roughly around the age of 12. Something that to me looked like a skater get-up.
Turning my head, I saw a wall blocking us
"Well, this is great", I say to Kirby,"I fricken firewall is blocking us..."
I notice Kirby's eyes widen. Apparently he isn't used to the way a Texan speaks when mildly frustrated. Shaking my head. I look up. The firewall isn't that high.....
I make a jump and place my foot against a brick. Since I am not good at climbing fences or walls, I slid off.....but not before getting scorched by the flames!
I flipped backwards and started running like an idiot, trying to put out the flames. My sleep-pants were taking the damage, so I take them off. Luckily, I had a pair of sleep-shorts underneath, so my dignity is kept.
Once the flames are put out, I take my glasses and inspect them....Why aren't they melted?....Then I feel a spark. Apparently, the electro-magnetic energy from around me has already found a way into my glasses.
I turn to Kirby."If we are in here......What exactly happened?"
Psh, I remember when you typed in Female Girl, it was funny, really.
But no really, this seems like too much of an action comedy. with really bad writing.
While I'm still screwing around with the level designer, I am warped into Runouw's Forums!
By What? Why? How?
I jump up and grab the SUBMIT button. I am inside the chat!
I see Ridder's expression. It stares at me, and I see it mouth out "What the F is that?!"
His mouse moves towards Four's name so that he can report me, but I begin typing."
First of all, you really don't need to space each sentence out. Second, I would never react that way, here's the right way to do it.
Ridder wrote:.........The Furk? Kemo on the screen? Someone get the swordfish!
Third, what were you typing with, and how did it feel like going from "Cyberspace" to the chat?
Rank:This story has so many little holes....
Rating: 6/10, but hey, at least it's better than MAWEEOS BIG BOO AD-FURKING-VENTURE!!!!!, THE MOST ORIGINAL STORY EVAH!
