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Postby Avo » January 22nd, 2010, 7:38 pm

Check the third page for teh storeh by Ridder. :awe:
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Re: Phantoms

Postby Ridder » January 22nd, 2010, 10:48 pm

Fales have to be dealt with somehow, and this is how I deelz with dis.


Go to Page 2 for the new Bolshevik.
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Re: Phantoms

Postby Kimonio » January 23rd, 2010, 9:19 am

....And I had a pretty good thief part too.-_-



I agree with Ridder. Why are you hating yourself for not being able to have time? I barely have time to update Dimotri when I am grounded, but I always manage(....Still figuring out Flighteron's realm though..). You may not have time, but you could always find a chance to add onto it.

And...I kinda liked that Niklaw thing. :)


Still, story was very good. When you feel that you want to try it again, give it a go.
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Re: Phantoms

Postby Blablob » January 23rd, 2010, 11:08 am

What about me? I only have time on the weekends to update my story, and since I have 2 stories now, progress is going even slower. And with many other things to do, I rarely find time to update, but I make room. You Avo, you can do it. Just don't rush yourself. If you can't update every other day, then just work on a chapter little bits at a time, and when you're done, submit it. Nobody said you have to do it all at once.
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Re: Phantoms

Postby Avo » January 23rd, 2010, 3:41 pm

Well guys. I posted it, and I`m continuing it.

Here are some profiles!! YAYZ!!!


Captain Ridder:

Age: 18
Likes: Treasure, adventures, discovering new things.
Dislikes: People who get in her way.
Other things: She controls the S.S. Phantom and stops
at nothing to get what she wants.


Sean (star-fawful), The Thief King:

Age: 27
Likes: Stealing things, controlling his gang of thieves.
Dislikes: Jokers, intruders in his hideout.
Other things: He`s been the king for 10 years but his
time is almost up, then it`s Kyle`s Turn.


Austin (aznchau4ever):

Age: 19
Likes: Joking around, playing games.
Dislikes: Being yelled at, working.
Other things: He often drifts off into his own world, and
he is very lazy.


Kyle (Kimonio):

Age: 21
Likes: The fact that he is gonna be the next thief king.
Dislikes: Intruders, Lookout duty, teasing.
Other things: He can balance a toy ball on his nose for
20 seconds. :shock:

More will come!!
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Re: Phantoms

Postby MICrophone » January 23rd, 2010, 4:22 pm

Hmm…this is good. However, watch out for proper grammar and punctuation. While the plot is more important, a correctly written story makes it a much easier read. Keep going! :P
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Re: Phantoms

Postby MessengerOfDreams » January 24th, 2010, 12:32 pm

I like avos but ridders prologue is much much much :2700000000000000000000000000 years later: much much much better.
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Re: Phantoms

Postby Ridder » January 24th, 2010, 1:34 pm

Now MoY is probably thinking-

"Why can't Ridder put so much enthusiasm in the ALT ending?"



ON TOPIC:

I'm Glad to see you got more of your prologue in.
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Re: Phantoms

Postby MessengerOfDreams » January 26th, 2010, 2:16 pm

Ridder wrote:Now MoY is probably thinking-

"Why can't Ridder put so much enthusiasm in the ALT ending?"



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Re: Phantoms

Postby Avo » January 26th, 2010, 6:10 pm

MessengerOfYahweh wrote:
Ridder wrote:Now MoY is probably thinking-

"Why can't Ridder put so much enthusiasm in the ALT ending?"



guilty as charged. ;) Anyway, keep up the good work!


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