Runouw's Forums

[brandoprojectm]

Chapter 0 - Pilot

There was an air of pure, utter boredom inside the building, the only sound breaking the would-be deafening silence being the drumming of Aznchau's fingers.

Without mentioning the sound that followed: the sudden crack of the door being kicked open by none other than brandobrawl.

"HA! BOOM, BABY!"

The other 3 users inside the building turned their heads with surprising nonchalance even as the door fell in shreds mere inches from where they were sitting. Aznchau, fourinone AKA Four AKA Foru, and Blablob, the aforementioned users, were currently killing time inside Forum 23, the perfect escape for anyone wanting temporary refuge from the complete insanity that was never lacking in Runouw's Forums.

"Hai, Brando," was the first reply. It was Blablob, and his only other comment besides that one was, "Close the door, you'll let in a draft."

Brandobrawl had other plans. He sat down on the nearest chair, and put his legs up on the center table. He never lost the self-satisfied smirk he wore almost 24/7 in the process.

Foru, his own face showing the patented "always-amused half-smile", decided to play along. "GASP. WE'VE BEEN COMPROMISED. EVERY MAN FOR HIMSELF." He then proceeded to press a button which wasn't there just a moment ago, labeled "Self-destruct" and jumped out the window.

Brandobrawl walked over to the spot where Foru had been sitting, ignoring the blaring warning that there was an "IMMINENT NUCLEAR EXPLOSION IN 3 SECONDS". He sat down calmly, and pushed a smaller button on top of the Self-destruct button, this one labeled "Self-destruct button self-destruct button." The bigger self-destruct button blew up in a fantastic, yet surprisingly miniature fashion, and the warning stopped.

Azn finally looked up. "A Self-destruct button for a Self-destruct button? I'd say 'SELF-DESTRUCT-BUTTCEPTION' were it not such a mouthful and the possible double entendre at the end. Also I'm too busy watching Madoka Magica." Again, his eyes drifted from the scene before him and turned gray, signaling that he was once more absent in mind, though not in body.

"Okay, enough playing around," came Foru's voice from behind brandobrawl. Brandobrawl jumped slightly in surprise at Foru's sudden reappearance, something Four did a lot but Brando feared he might never get used to. "We should only be in here for official site business and stuff like that," he continued. "Maybe we could resume in the Off-topic forum?"

Blablob stood up, and nodded in agreement. He walked over to the door, which was completely intact, just as it had been before its fateful encounter with brandobrawl's foot, and led the others out of the room.

So it was, exactly the same, every single day. Such level of insanity would be, well, insane in any other city, world, universe, or plane of existence, but it was commonplace in the community of Runouw's Forums. And this insanity was made possible because of the world where the users of Runouw resided: The Internet.

"Hey guys, I just saw- uh....guys?" Azn only needed one glance at the room to know that everyone had left him behind. Considering his extremely literal absentmindedness, it was his own fault. Hm, I can probably find them at the Off-Topic forum or the Backup Chat Plaza, he thought.

And that's exactly where he was headed, but his plans came to a complete halt when he saw a certain user enter the room. More specifically, when he saw the state said user was in.

This user was in a terrible state, bloodied and beaten, and he looked ready to drop lifeless any second. As Aznchau watched the user stumble into the building in a state of shock, he noticed two things that made this encounter even more alarming.

One, the user's "identity". Azn was finally able to retrieve control of his own body, and exclaimed, "...Runouw? Runouw!!" He ran over to the wounded figure, who seemed to indeed be none other than their site's founder and leader: Runouw. But was he? "Runouw!!! What's wrong?!? What happened to you?!?!"

Two, what the figure was holding. A bloodied sword.

"Ru...nouw? ......Ha," said the figure in a wheezy, yet clearly mocking manner. "You wish."

As confusing and disorienting as these whole matters where, Azn couldn't help but feel a certain darkness to them. His instincts suddenly told him that he was in great danger, and he felt a momentary urge to run away and not look back. But another part, more foolish part of him told him that whoever this man was, he was in dire need of assistance.

The man on the floor raised his sword with a smile.

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This, as you can see, is the pilot for the remake of my series, Runouw's Forum. I decided to make a short pilot instead of a straight out intro to see what the response to it was, and if I should even bother to continue with it.

It's up to you.

[Ridder]

♥♥♥♥ good. Real good.









Still think you need to italicize a thought process, though.

[Avo]

Enjoying it to an extent. I approve. Continue, foo.

[Megar]

[Master1.0]

Same here mah boi.

[RedLink]

This was bombtastic! Even though i never read your first Runouw's Forums so yeah... Kind of short Intro and was not expecting that dude. Is this like a serious story or more of a random one? I think you should continue

[Zunar]

Great story. Hope you continue.

[Ridder]

This was bombtastic! Even though i never read your first Runouw's Forums so yeah... Kind of short Intro and was not expecting that dude. Is this like a serious story or more of a random one? I think you should continue

Serious with a side-dish of humor.

[MessengerOfDreams]

Good to have this back! The sentence structure is very nice indeed, especially the first paragraph. Everyone's IC and I hope not to be a sexist pussy. I'd watch for crossing too far into humor and balancing it, because I swear to god I thought this was a prank. Just be sure to measure it out, and keep your pacing managable instead of lightspeed, and this will go great!

8.35/10

[fourinone]

Aw man, seriously, brndn? You just love trolling us with these cliffhangers, don't you? : P Yesh, by all means, continue. If you don't, I'll dunk your head in hot gravy until you do.

I thought the humor and seriousness was well balanced; the difference in tone between the first half and the second half really accentuated how serious business the second part was.