Runouw: Danger and Deception

[nin10mode]

Ah, this chapter is okay. All it seems to be is the meeting, though.

Also, there are a few typing mistakes, such as a stray [/u] and [/i], and some spacing issues, like "Pani k"
I still like it though. Can't wait to see what a villain I am.

[SuperMIC]

I ratted out 4 language errors. :3

Thanks Ninny for feedback, yeah, this chapter was meant to introduce people, slightly develop plot without rushing it, and explain the land of Runouw more.
Reading between the lines reveals implications of who the real traitor is...
I'll probably get the next out tomorrow.

VEN: If you read this, I lied. The chapter took an hour, not 5 mins. :S

[RedLink]

Another awesome chapter SMIC.
Keep up the good work!
I rate this Chapter a 9.1/10 Because it was kind of slow ;-;
WHY AM I NOT HERE?! AM I A VILLAIN?! :O

[MessengerOfDreams]

Dee soospens is keeling me! Ahahahah

Damn, this wasn't the most eventful chapter but I loved it. It had good dialogue and good buildup, and I can't wait to see me in action!

[SuperMIC]

Welp, there goes Chapter 3. A whacking 5 pages in Word, 11 font.

[MessengerOfDreams]

Two notes.

1. Mind your characterizations. I don't think you quite nailed me. I mean... I'm way too cold commander with deviousness. And I didn't give a tenpenny ♥♥♥♥ that Panik died. And... Panik's one of my best site friends. o.o Other people need touchup... such as why is Foru a villain (he's the chillest guy on the site, he's like living weed.) I hope you explain the rebels more so we know why people joined, instead of being faceless villains.

2. Also, make sure we're detailed about the sides here and organized. It took me 4 guesses to confirm which side Aro was on. It was a bit messy.

Otherwise, I do like it. You still write well and you add in great moments, and your Characterization... is somewhat good in other parts. I think it still shows promise.

8.5/10

[SuperMIC]

Thanks Mod. I'll get editing tomorrow. Sorry... but I don't know Four that well... so... and I'm not that sure about all forum relations, except the obvious ones. Forgive me.

[Ridder]

BASIC RUNDOWN OF FORUM STAFF

Admin -
Runouw - Not very talkative. Keeps to himself many times. Applauds his staff once in a while.


Global Moderators -

Suyo - A programming genius. Loves PC games such as Super Meat Boy, BIT.TRIP, and Amnesia. The Gandalf of Runouw.
Blablob - Youngin' who rose to power in a short amount of time. Very mature and leader-like. The Aragorn of Runouw.

Moderators -

MessengerOfDreams - Passionate, young man who cares for all of us, emotionally sensitive, with a past he'd not like to discuss, yet strong. Brilliant.

Fourinone - Chillest person of Runouw. Upholds rules a little stricter when duty calls, but otherwise pretty hip and awesome.

Level Moderators -

Buffooner - English Gentleman who is intelligent and whacks things with sticks. Wears a tophat and monocle and has a highly valued opinion.

nin10mode - Brilliant artist, Anime lover. Philipino.

YoshiBoo118 - Quite experienced at his job and sprite comics. A friendly sort and overall pretty great.

Mr_Saxman: R.I.P.

AwesomeJRFD - Nintendo lover. Awesome Face Embracer.

MP3 - A mature female who loves Korean things.

Aznchau4ever- Asian anime loving, RPG playing, glutton-for-punishment sort of guy. Serious when he needs to be.

Panik! - Music Hipster.

User Representatives-

Brandobrawl - Mexican anime lover. Pioneer in story-writing, working for DirecTV for 5,000 pesos ($500) a month.

UsuarioTHf - Venezuelan with life issues. Cries rivers very often and acts like an ♥♥♥ when nervous. He's still pretty awesome when it comes right down to it, though.

Doram - Wisest Sage here. Don't mess wit him or he'll beat the crap outta you with his two cents.


The Honarary Members are old staff members.

[SuperMIC]

Where's that So Much Win pic?

TYVM RIDDER. TYVM.

[nin10mode]

We need a thumbs up for that post.