Runouw: Danger and Deception

[RedLink]

Alrighty then... Another great chapter but not my fave
You could improve on details (mainly the two sides and who are in each side etc)
Also Description could be better
YOU can handle ME? Boi you Mad!!!
Also, Why does AVO have that sword? HOW did he get it? Will there be chapters explaining this etc?
So Yeaah.... Keep doing what you do : D
8.7/10 \o/

[SuperMIC]

Has... has it really been a month? Oh well, no matter, Chapter 4 out.

[RedLink]

ALRIGHT BRONY.
Heres my review for your chapter.
You ready?
I bet you are.

Okay so the description and character personalities are pretty much awesome.
The ending was cool and all.
The plot is getting awesome and stuff.*-1000 points for me not being here*
So yeah keep on writing foo and make it a little bit more actionier?(If you can bro no prob)

9.3/10

:3

[AwesomeJRFD]

Mr_Saxman: R.I.P.

AwesomeJRFD - Nintendo lover. Awesome Face Embracer.

Panik! - Music Hipster.

That's all? I think you need to elaborate on those a little.

Oh, and you got me all wrong.

[Ridder]

Mr_SaxMan: Emotionally Struggling

Panik!: Hardworking Gringo

AwesomeJRFD: Not That Complex.

[AwesomeJRFD]

Mr_SaxMan: Emotionally Struggling

Panik!: Hardworking Gringo

AwesomeJRFD: Not That Complex.

Ah, I see. But you're still a little vague on my description.

[SuperMIC]

Mr_SaxMan: Emotionally Struggling

Panik!: Hardworking Gringo

AwesomeJRFD: Not That Complex.

Ah, I see. But you're still a little vague on my description.

"Awesome JRFD:The ever scrutinizable."

[JSlayerXero]

*Looks at last post*
September 11
*looks at today's date*
November 6

Hey SMIC, I heard you like new chapters. Me too :3

[SuperMIC]

Ah, it's in progress, I promise.

[SuperMIC]

I realize I have lost virtually all readers with this. However, although my story may not be as good as the VAGs, I hope you'll keep reading. I'll do my best to keep coming out with chapters as quick as possible, I promise.

Chapter 5~