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Re: What Once Was

Postby Megar » March 12th, 2012, 11:35 am

I'm going to be honest here.
I do love what you have so far, but I can't clearly see the situation at hand. It also wasn't made to clear about who wad who after chapter 1. For now, an 18/20 for me. Keep up the good work, MoD.
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Re: What Once Was

Postby ~MP3 Amplifier~ » March 12th, 2012, 12:22 pm

Yay for chapter 3! :D *shot*

Just kidding. :p It's all really awesome, you're a great writer. Definitely did not waste those 10 minutes of my life reading everything, look forward to seeing more soon.
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Re: What Once Was

Postby Avo » March 12th, 2012, 11:22 pm

Well, now you have caught my attention even more. Hurry the frack up bro and get Chapter 4 out. Preferably before March break ends, maybe? :3

Just kidding. Great chapter. Grammar was good, character interactions were amazing. I cannot wait for more. I'm curious to see how you'll write me, IF you write me, but I won't be that kind of dude. Which is why I hid this in such small font. I guess no will see this, so...I secretly look up to Elijah Wood as a role model.
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Re: What Once Was

Postby NyansIsAPyro » March 12th, 2012, 11:26 pm

I want moar of this! I've never seen most of the people mentioned, so it's nice to get an insight as to how they acted!

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Re: What Once Was

Postby SuperMIC » March 21st, 2012, 9:07 am

MIC the homeless man.... HA! I loved it as usual MoD. :3
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Re: What Once Was

Postby Chaukai » March 22nd, 2012, 1:54 pm

Ahh, a great feeling of nostalgia just enveloped me and made sweet love to me. That was a very satisfying chapter, and I do enjoy the hints at something greater, but I'm hoping that you have an idea as to where this is going, because I'm starting to get antsy and want a bit more than just characters. Maybe some plot development please?
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Re: What Once Was

Postby Master1.0 » March 22nd, 2012, 6:34 pm

Tired as ♥♥♥♥ right now, but I stayed up to type something up just for you.

Just the way you put together the site and real life is simply astounding. This isn't some average forum story, like a lot of people make just to fail at the start. Your words just add more to the description, and it feels like you bring the characters of your story out of the computer screen. Not only to I look forward to more of your work, but so does about everyone that has taken 15 minutes out of their lives.

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Re: What Once Was

Postby Zunar » March 23rd, 2012, 7:24 am

Great as usual, MOD. Except for one thing...

The last sentence is missing a word.

"After all, how does respond to something like that?"

It should be:

"After all, how does one respond to something like that?"

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Re: What Once Was

Postby MessengerOfDreams » April 26th, 2012, 10:46 am

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Re: What Once Was

Postby Avo » April 26th, 2012, 2:49 pm

All I can say is.

Worth the ♥♥♥♥ wait.

Keep going, bro. It's getting better and better by the chapter.
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