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Re: What Once Was

Postby Zunar » April 27th, 2012, 10:15 am

Awesome as always, MOD! However, I see one typo and something that confuses me.

Chapter 4 wrote:Chris and Ben should be waiting for Foster to land his plane, although if they left five hours I'm assuming that they must have gotten a cup of coffee and watched the re-release of Titanic or some useless ♥♥♥♥."

That should be "if they left five hours ago".
Chapter 4 wrote:He, Chris and Bryan were the three with the highest amount of power in the city. Now Chris and Bryan were both dead.

Isn't Bryan Ven and Myst's baby?
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Re: What Once Was

Postby MessengerOfDreams » April 27th, 2012, 10:30 am

Thanks! For the case of Bryan, as stated, he is their baby but was named in memory of a different Bryan who died previously that was an active Runouw leader.
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Re: What Once Was

Postby ~MP3 Amplifier~ » April 27th, 2012, 11:24 am

Brilliant as always, I love your ideas because their style is so natural. I used to do creative writing a lot, as a hobby, and it's making me want to get back into it.. ^_^
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Re: What Once Was

Postby SuperMIC » April 29th, 2012, 3:25 pm

why suyo die

tony n is kirby

why am i shot

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Re: What Once Was

Postby Lederp » May 1st, 2012, 12:31 pm

Pretty good,I liked it a lot.
And so it was,I posted.
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Re: What Once Was

Postby MessengerOfDreams » May 3rd, 2012, 12:47 pm

Chapter 5 is up, and it is a doozy.
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My latest story, and one of my personal favorites. A girl bound in silence finds the words to say to her prospective girlfriend as they visit her religious father in a dusty town on the edge of Kansas, where the crows' migration south brings forth anchored memories, the path to resolution, and a new start.

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Updated Works! Some of my past best and current stuff: show
Writing Works!
Fanfic: Shut Up and Dance
why do I write so much about dancing you don't dance you've never danced in your entire life
lying little ♥♥♥♥ with your ♥♥♥♥ story ♥♥♥♥ you
also Diddy/Lucina <3
Fanfic: Worth a Thousand Words
Because the world needed a Samus/Dedede story
Fanfic: Ecstatic Silence
Just wanted to write and ♥♥♥♥ like this happens, you'd think I'd know better.
Fanfic: Far From the Edge
It's a dance that's been a long time coming for a brand new man and an unchanging woman, but once one takes the plunge there's no falling back up.
Original: Jealous Ghosts of the Mississippi
The story of Rachel meeting Amber after a lifetime of silence and being shunned
Original: Your Hand in Mine
One of my most personal stories about a dangerous romance. Now to be published in a college lit journal!
-------------------------
Recent LDC Work:
Level Series: Leaves From The Vine (ft Star King)
For the 29th LDC, a theme of grassland taken through the growth of our designing society. Won the 29th LDC!
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If you've ever wanted to see any level I made worth a damn, go here! From the quiet 14th LDC entrant Finis to the megasmash level series Dark, you can find links here!
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Re: What Once Was

Postby Avo » May 3rd, 2012, 3:51 pm

Holy butternut balls what the hell just happened.

This was a surprise, I wasn't expecting another chapter for at least a month. But what you delivered was quite interesting. I think it's obvious who the girl is, but as the guy, I'll just have to wait and see.

Anyway, once again, another great chapter. I can't wait for more.
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Re: What Once Was

Postby MessengerOfDreams » May 3rd, 2012, 4:02 pm

Haha, if you know who that girl is you're a beast or you're an older member or some combination of the two.
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I switch my signature a lot. If you wanna see some of my past ones, here you go.
Silent Conversations and a Crow's Final Song!
My latest story, and one of my personal favorites. A girl bound in silence finds the words to say to her prospective girlfriend as they visit her religious father in a dusty town on the edge of Kansas, where the crows' migration south brings forth anchored memories, the path to resolution, and a new start.

Form (25quared)
This might be like nothing you've seen before.
Updated Works! Some of my past best and current stuff: show
Writing Works!
Fanfic: Shut Up and Dance
why do I write so much about dancing you don't dance you've never danced in your entire life
lying little ♥♥♥♥ with your ♥♥♥♥ story ♥♥♥♥ you
also Diddy/Lucina <3
Fanfic: Worth a Thousand Words
Because the world needed a Samus/Dedede story
Fanfic: Ecstatic Silence
Just wanted to write and ♥♥♥♥ like this happens, you'd think I'd know better.
Fanfic: Far From the Edge
It's a dance that's been a long time coming for a brand new man and an unchanging woman, but once one takes the plunge there's no falling back up.
Original: Jealous Ghosts of the Mississippi
The story of Rachel meeting Amber after a lifetime of silence and being shunned
Original: Your Hand in Mine
One of my most personal stories about a dangerous romance. Now to be published in a college lit journal!
-------------------------
Recent LDC Work:
Level Series: Leaves From The Vine (ft Star King)
For the 29th LDC, a theme of grassland taken through the growth of our designing society. Won the 29th LDC!
--
Levels at Large:
Level Topic: Collection of MoD's Levels!
If you've ever wanted to see any level I made worth a damn, go here! From the quiet 14th LDC entrant Finis to the megasmash level series Dark, you can find links here!
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Re: What Once Was

Postby SuperMIC » May 3rd, 2012, 6:26 pm

MessengerOfDreams wrote:Haha, if you know who that girl is you're a beast or you're an older member or some combination of the two.


It must obviously be K- *shot*
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Re: What Once Was

Postby MessengerOfDreams » June 1st, 2012, 1:18 pm

So, a mini-update. I posted a page-long snippet of chapter 6. Also, I have the cast list sorted out, which is a huge step forward for me. I think I can really finish this. Probably be the longest piece I've finished that's actually decent.
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Silent Conversations and a Crow's Final Song!
My latest story, and one of my personal favorites. A girl bound in silence finds the words to say to her prospective girlfriend as they visit her religious father in a dusty town on the edge of Kansas, where the crows' migration south brings forth anchored memories, the path to resolution, and a new start.

Form (25quared)
This might be like nothing you've seen before.
Updated Works! Some of my past best and current stuff: show
Writing Works!
Fanfic: Shut Up and Dance
why do I write so much about dancing you don't dance you've never danced in your entire life
lying little ♥♥♥♥ with your ♥♥♥♥ story ♥♥♥♥ you
also Diddy/Lucina <3
Fanfic: Worth a Thousand Words
Because the world needed a Samus/Dedede story
Fanfic: Ecstatic Silence
Just wanted to write and ♥♥♥♥ like this happens, you'd think I'd know better.
Fanfic: Far From the Edge
It's a dance that's been a long time coming for a brand new man and an unchanging woman, but once one takes the plunge there's no falling back up.
Original: Jealous Ghosts of the Mississippi
The story of Rachel meeting Amber after a lifetime of silence and being shunned
Original: Your Hand in Mine
One of my most personal stories about a dangerous romance. Now to be published in a college lit journal!
-------------------------
Recent LDC Work:
Level Series: Leaves From The Vine (ft Star King)
For the 29th LDC, a theme of grassland taken through the growth of our designing society. Won the 29th LDC!
--
Levels at Large:
Level Topic: Collection of MoD's Levels!
If you've ever wanted to see any level I made worth a damn, go here! From the quiet 14th LDC entrant Finis to the megasmash level series Dark, you can find links here!
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