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Awesome as always, MOD! However, I see one typo and something that confuses me.

Chapter 4 wrote:Chris and Ben should be waiting for Foster to land his plane, although if they left five hours I'm assuming that they must have gotten a cup of coffee and watched the re-release of Titanic or some useless ♥♥♥♥."

That should be "if they left five hours ago".

Chapter 4 wrote:He, Chris and Bryan were the three with the highest amount of power in the city. Now Chris and Bryan were both dead.

Isn't Bryan Ven and Myst's baby?

Thanks! For the case of Bryan, as stated, he is their baby but was named in memory of a different Bryan who died previously that was an active Runouw leader.

Brilliant as always, I love your ideas because their style is so natural. I used to do creative writing a lot, as a hobby, and it's making me want to get back into it.. ^_^

why suyo die

tony n is kirby

why am i shot

10/10

Pretty good,I liked it a lot.

Chapter 5 is up, and it is a doozy.

Holy butternut balls what the hell just happened.

This was a surprise, I wasn't expecting another chapter for at least a month. But what you delivered was quite interesting. I think it's obvious who the girl is, but as the guy, I'll just have to wait and see.

Anyway, once again, another great chapter. I can't wait for more.

Haha, if you know who that girl is you're a beast or you're an older member or some combination of the two.

MessengerOfDreams wrote:Haha, if you know who that girl is you're a beast or you're an older member or some combination of the two.

It must obviously be K- *shot*

So, a mini-update. I posted a page-long snippet of chapter 6. Also, I have the cast list sorted out, which is a huge step forward for me. I think I can really finish this. Probably be the longest piece I've finished that's actually decent.