The adventure of Forum 23

[Sonicfan253]

Nope, im not writing anymore stories because you all secretly hate them.

Runouws secrets: bad reviews
Sonic trapped in a computer: even more bad reviews
Other stories: crap reviews
This story: also crap reviews

You see why im quitting storymaking now? I dont feel encouraged, I feel sad and down.

[Blablob]

Yes, keep going, but please remember what we said about improving. That's how people end up being some of the greatest authors the world has ever known; it all starts with some criticism

Edit: If that's how you really, really want it. I guess not all people are born to be authors, but you seriously are too personal about your stories, thinking every criticism means we hate you. That's not how it is, and I can only hope you understand that.

[Avo]

*sigh* Fine, if you think that we secretly hate them, which we don't, then you can just delete this. If what me and blab said won't change your mind then nothing will......

[Kimonio]

Kimmy would like to end this epic war between teen and.......elementary kid.o-O





GOOD:


.........Plot seems to be interesting me, but it could be a bit more detailed and hidden to keep the reader guessing.


BAD:

.....Spelling mistakes you can fix with Firefox. It has a special spell-check tool that you can use.







OVERALL:


........Dude, another catchy story from you. Of course, you need to make the chapters longer. Add description. Add action. Make the chapters longer.


SCORE: 8.3


It's a lot better than your first story, I'll give you that.

[Blablob]

Okay, before you just randomly call for the mods to delete this story, Sonicfan, hear me out. I want to help you write better. Every writer can improve in an area of one or another. Some more than others. I can tell you're a little new to writing stories, so I'm going to go over the flaws in YOUR story, and tell them how to improve them. Please take it into consideration next time you write a story, because I'm not just a mean critic; I want to see to it you do better because of my criticism

And now...

The Review

Bad Grammar:

Improving upon this area makes your story a whole lot more easier (and more inviting) to read, and you'll probably get better reviews that way.

Bad diologue:

Alright, this is an area that takes a little time to work on, if you're new. Instead of writing something like "Forum 23 is Blab blab blab", write like this: Suyo looked away, afraid of what would come out of his own mouth. "I should've known word would've gotten around sooner or later. Sonicfan....Forum 23 is blab blab blab". The more description you put in your diologue, the better.

Too short:

Too short a story can vary depending on what you think a decent-sized story is. I think most would agree that 1 or 2 paragraphs is not enough. But even if you plan to keep it that way, at least make the paragraphs decently long.

Written bad:

This kind of fits in with the bad diologue category...if you don't write out your story well, it makes it less exciting to read. Remember: every person writes differently, so you just have to find out your writing style. Do you like adding comedy to your stories? Scary? Happy? Sad? A spiced up, exciting story is always better than something bland.

Bad opening: There are 3 parts to a story....the beginning, middle, and end. Each part you need to carefully work at. I always feel the beginning is the easiest, because it's always where you can put all your ideas to work, and save your better ones for later. A great opening is always welcoming. Nobody likes a story that opens like "It was at Runouw.com some day" or something stupid like that. Be imaginative!


Anyways, there are plenty other topics we could go over, but these are the basics. I really hope you don't just throw away everything I just said (I spent about 15 minutes writing this up ) and actually take it seriously. Remember Sonicfan...I am not the enemy. I am not a mean critic. I am simply a guy trying to help someone

[MessengerOfDreams]

About the Flame War I just witnessed

To Kim- Thank you so much.

To Sonicfan- As a writer, you're going to run into criticism. Don't throw a hissy fit.

To Blab and Avo- To be honest, I am seriously disappointed in you for dragging this on so long. If the kid's yelling at you, ignore it and let the mods deal with it.

Flame me if you wish, I respond no further.

Thanks.