The EL33T

[Megar]

Ow....? That hurt....?
How come the end of each chapter has SOMETHING to do with me though?

[MessengerOfDreams]

Chapter 4, while short, is out.

Get your tissues.

[Megar]

Gee, Me and Azn dead? OMG
That wrecked the rest of the story for me

[RazorTH]

9/10 So far it's been a goodGreat story...except for SS,and,azn...they probably did not have such a gret time dying in the story.Also,no spelling errors,great discriptoin,and, I like howe the pace of the story is sorta slow.

[MICrophone]

Moy was on a barstool, facing Mic. “Didja hear the news?” he asked Mic.

Mic shrugged. “I’m in charge of the news.”

How it could've been the most epyc line ever.

Moy was on a barstool, facing Mic. “Didja hear the news?” he asked Mic.

Mic shrugged. “I am the news.”

Jk, this chapter was very good. I'm drawn back in. So that's a good start. Looking forward to the next chapter. (But unfortunately, I went to the last page first since that's where the new posts would be and thus discovered that

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Supersponge and azn were dead.

That's what the spoiler tags are for, peoples.)

[Megar]

I just gotta say, I remember something saying that Salmo said "What have you done with the real SS?!"
Does that mean Dead me is Fake me? And Dead Azn is well... Dead Azn. :P

[Chaukai]

Sweet. I love dying. I'll just simply respawn at the spawn point and then go an-

Dead Azn is well... Dead Azn.

WHAT?! NUUUUUUUUUUUU!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

Jk, it's a decent story so far! :O It's still not far enough for me to take seriously... But it's coming along great.

[nin10mode]

6/20!!!!! >:U









...

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Kidding.

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This looks like it's going to turn out well, Moy. You're story have good gramar and speling. (lulz) This is one of the few forum stories that actually entice me! Although suspense could use work.

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Seriously. Someone barged in randomly, killed azn, and ran out? <_<

[MessengerOfDreams]

INSPIRATION!

For 2 reasons

1. Azn's forumwide death kinda spooked me into ideas

2. I want to use more pop forum culture in stories, and this seemed like a perfect outlet.

So, if anyone can cowrite for me in Survivor, I'll work on this!

EdiT: MODS PLEASE DON'T LOCK. I WILL...


Cry...

if you do.


Chapter 5

“Filing your papers again, Kim?” Kirby asked tentatively.

Kim nodded, adding “Yeah, I mean, today I’ve got a lot to sort out. First off, I know next to nothing about Venexis, she’s practically mute. So I don’t know her skills, who to place her with, I mean, Christ, she’s probably still shook up over SuperSponge.” Another paper went in the shredder kept next to her file cabinet. “Speaking of which, that reminds me of Salmo. I mean, I understand that you would be devastated when your friend dies, especially at such a young age, but Salmo… he seems more than that. He seems haunted.”

“Kim, maybe you’re not really the best death counselor.” Kirby said, not taking much focus off of his own work. “The worst death you ever experienced was when Sammy the Hamster died.”

Kim chuckled. “Maybe not. A third thing is that I didn’t know this, but there is a lot of tension between Vandarx and Yoshi Boo. Now whatever kind, you make of it. I wish I could separate them to make sure things run smoother, but, hey, I already made my case about it to Portal Guru.”

Kirb rolled his eyes. “Heaven forbid that the Great Kim be wrong about something for once.”

“Yes, for as long as heaven allows.” Kim replied in all seriousness. “Fourth, and best of all, I already have a task for them.”
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Vandarx cowered in her small jacket in the shiver-inducing cold. “God dang.” She muttered. “It’s the middle of May! Why does it feel like the beginning of November?”

Yoshi Boo, in a much goofier yet warm jacket, replied with “Because the weather here suffers from schizophrenia.”

Vandarx responded by grumbling “That’s easy for you to say, Mr. Walking Marshmallow.”

Portal Guru chuckled. “She’s right. You do look like a Walking-“

“Hey, you, shut up. I’m still really mad at you,” was the response.

“Can’t we just-“

“Zip it.”

“I mea-“

“Zip it.”

“C’mo-“

“Zip. It.”

TPG sighed and turned away.

Salmo was the first to venture into the tavern. Still shaken over SS’s death, he saw Azn’s dead body, placed in a body bag yet unzipped, and took a seat nearby. Venexis surveyed the scene. She really had no clue what to do, but did take note that the gun had been left behind. She silently pointed this out to Kim, who had accompanied them.

“Good observation, Venexis.” She replied with a smile. “Police have arrested a friend of Azn’s who turned himself in, saying that Azn had asked him to shoot him. Basically, this was a suicide.”

“So you mean…” Venexis said silently.

“You’re not here to solve this suicide, you’re here to make sure it never happens again.”

[MICrophone]

Short chapter, but good. Keep it up!