Survivor: Runouw Style

[MICrophone]

Ok, sounds good!

[Kimonio]

............I wanna go swimming with Hobbes.




Otherwise, you matched me exactly! Keep it coming!

[Canine]

Sorry Kim, but he's sleeping. It's rude to wake up a tiger.

[MessengerOfDreams]

I like me.

And the chemistry I produce.

And the rest of the team.

But you know a voting system will most likely fail.

I suggest a number randomization

[Canine]

DAY 3 AND THE VOTING THINGY IS OUT! 3 DAY TO VOTE!

[MessengerOfDreams]

How do I put this lightly...?

I have read VAGs. I have read Runouw's Forum. I have Unlocked. I have read so many amazing things on this forum and in real life.


THIS MAY BE ONE OF THE BEST THINGS I HAVE EVER READ, ANYWHERE, AT ANYTIME, ANYPLACE!

And Certainly the best story of the Forums!

I don't know how, or if I can trump that. I may postpone my Survivor just because I don't wanna steal your thunder.

A few suggestions, though

1. Either do the voting yourself or have the actual contestants vote. This isn't American Idol. People will most likely choose a name and do nothing.

2. In typical Survivor Format, On the day before the elimination challenge, there is a reward challenge.

And as for the things you are definitely good at, that would include Humor, Chemistry between the team and just the feel of the story.

If you ever need help with season 2, let me know.

[Chaukai]

I voted Azn. Whatta tool that guy is. I want to see him voted out of the island.

Anyways, review time?

I think if you're going for a humorous, you're hitting it square on! You have good, witty lines that made me laugh a little. But... The problem with comedies is that not all comedic attempts will ever be comedic. Some did make me die a little inside...

As for the story itself, I really have a problem with the fact that it's basically all talk, no detail. Basically every chapter, the people just talk back and forth, maybe do one or two things, and then talk more. I mean, this isn't just you, even Brando's story bugs me with the excessive amount of back and forth talking.

The Characters are very nicely portrayed. You can tell who is who and how and whatnot and schmuckfulness.

But again, your actions, as well as your grammar, is quite confusing. It goes along too fast and I really am just thinking, "okay, this must not be important since the author just skimmed over that." >_>

It's good overall, but once you look at the details, it's a bit flawed.

[Canine]

Yeah, thanks azn!

And MOY...

1. The voting? Well, I'm just gonna test it out and yea...To see if it'll work...I'm assumed PMing the users in the story would be harder since four is gone and Ridder doesn't come on always...

2.Reward Challenge? How stupid am I. >_> How can I forget.....O_o

3. Wait...there is no #3? Ah well....

Well, thanks for the review. If I need your help, I'll call you! Thanks!

[MessengerOfDreams]

No problem!

[General Guy 101]

I wanna join pleeeeeeeeaaaaazzzzzzzzzzzeeeeee