story

[princesspeach]

Once apon a time in a land far far away called runouw.com was a group of people who lived there. One day princess peach was walking along and saw a fellow named usuario thf he was big and purple.
they became friends and talked allmost every day for at least an hour. and they were geting along very nicely but a person named blablob cam and he was a big orange.
so they all were talking when they saw a hideous beast coming u the road and they came to see that it was a a little cute shy guy
looking for some chow. the next day another person came and his name was demonic
he was big and yellow and had a shine in his eye. they talked and talked and talked and came a 2 yoshies nomed superyoshi
and yoshiboo. so one day they saw a pokemon named wobofet he wodnt leave them alone so they ran away to pokefarm.com this land was at the othr side of the wide web world.
one day they went back to runouw.com but they discoverd that itr had been invaded by everybodyedit people they had no feet or armed or anything exept for a smile.
this creeped them out so they ran away to a plase called achevments unlocked.com this place was nice but there was 1 problem. THEY COULDNT GET OUT ETLESS THEY DID ALL 100 ACHEVMENTS !
so they worked together to discover a lovley badg they all won for being a good team but one day usuario thf
was cursed and became a very scarey opasam he was tricked into voting for obama so we had to change him back tu human so they
went to a nother place and searched for a cure and one day they found the magic flower they were looking for and gave it to usuario thf
and they all lived happlly for a long long time the end.

[MessengerOfDreams]

...meh, I'll admit, it's not that great, but it's nice to see that at the very least after all the drama of you and Usuario, at least YOU consider him a friend.

[UsuarioTHf]

Some things:
1. ...Uh, nothing to say. You were pretty wise. I'm NOT princes' friend. I find her as an obstacle.
2. We can be at PF and Runouw at the same time.
3. I have nothing against EE.
4. wtf I can't even vote for Obama. I'm too young to even vote.
5. Lrn2spell.
6. Um...Cliché and lame story.

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...Oh crud. I feel like a heartless machine giving my honest opinion about this.

[Ridder]

I consider most scripts to be N/A to 2 /10, seeing as how they aren't real stories most of the time.

I consider actual and good stories to be from 5/10 to 10/10.


This is neither. a 3/10 at most.

[MICrophone]

4. wtf I can't even vote for Obama. I'm too young to even vote.

…I think another small issue with this is that you live in South America. Wouldn't be a huge factor, but yeah, you'd have to do quite a bit of traveling to find a voting machine with Obama's name on it, plus you'd have to get this thing called U.S. citizenship which doesn't mean crap but looks nice on a resumé because Thomas Jefferson said it should be that way and George Washington was too busy getting drunk to really care one way or the other.

Oh, sorry, you want a story review? Bah, it's practically midnight. So I'll do one real quick. Effort was nice, but you need to work on having a bit more of an interesting plot and need some serious work on grammar…half the time I couldn't even understand what you were saying.