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Re: The Replenishers-Chapter 4 Out!

Postby Buff_ » January 28th, 2010, 12:15 pm

It was alright. I'm going with MIC's comment. It doesn't seem to be going anywhere, but hopefully that'll improve by Chapter 5.

I think what would be good if you get the main body of the story, without flashbacks, then add them in later.
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Re: The Replenishers-Chapter 5 Out!

Postby MessengerOfDreams » January 29th, 2010, 12:23 pm

Chapter 5 out! Wasn't able to squeeze very much action in, I'm saving that for Chapter 6. But this is good too!
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Re: The Replenishers-Chapter 5 Out!

Postby MICrophone » January 29th, 2010, 12:58 pm

OK, good. No more flashbacks. That's a start. We're getting somewhere now. This is good, but…WHERE IS THE EXPLAINING? :x I still have no idea what is going on…and this far in I should at least know something! But…writing's good and story's good, so…keep going and start explaining.
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Re: The Replenishers-Chapter 5 Out!

Postby MessengerOfDreams » January 29th, 2010, 1:01 pm

Gosh, I'm getting to that. Maybe it was just a natural gift, maybe it's scientific, I have yet to figure it out for myself. But I think it will have something to do with the way that Torrance can manipulate the cells of an object.
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Re: The Replenishers-Chapter 5 Out!

Postby Buff_ » January 29th, 2010, 1:44 pm

I'm with MIC, I'm a little confused as to what's going on, maybe spend a minute on getting the presentation right to help people, and explain things more. :D
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Re: The Replenishers-Chapter 5 Out!, post 97

Postby Mario Levels » January 29th, 2010, 9:56 pm

Buffooner wrote:I'm with MIC, I'm a little confused as to what's going on, maybe spend a minute on getting the presentation right to help people, and explain things more. :D

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Re: The Replenishers-Chapter 5 Out!

Postby MessengerOfDreams » January 31st, 2010, 9:09 pm

Chapter 6!

Who wants to write Chapter 7? Like the runouw.com connection, best chapter gets in the book! PM ME ALL CHAPTERS! ANy length! Also, it must be in Flo's narration.
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Fanfic: Worth a Thousand Words
Because the world needed a Samus/Dedede story
Fanfic: Ecstatic Silence
Just wanted to write and ♥♥♥♥ like this happens, you'd think I'd know better.
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It's a dance that's been a long time coming for a brand new man and an unchanging woman, but once one takes the plunge there's no falling back up.
Original: Jealous Ghosts of the Mississippi
The story of Rachel meeting Amber after a lifetime of silence and being shunned
Original: Your Hand in Mine
One of my most personal stories about a dangerous romance. Now to be published in a college lit journal!
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Re: The Replenishers-Chapter 5 Out!

Postby MICrophone » February 1st, 2010, 3:17 am

Chapter 6 isn't bad. You finally did some explaining. Yay! We'll see about Chapter 7…I might be too busy with other projects to do that, but we'll see…
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Re: The Replenishers-Chapter 5 Out!

Postby Buff_ » February 1st, 2010, 9:13 am

I think you should solely write this story MoY. You know what's going on, where the characters are going and such, so really you should just do it alone. :D

Chapter 6 was alright... very short though.
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Re: The Replenishers-Chapter 7 Out!

Postby MessengerOfDreams » February 4th, 2010, 12:09 pm

Chapter 7 out!
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Fanfic: Shut Up and Dance
why do I write so much about dancing you don't dance you've never danced in your entire life
lying little ♥♥♥♥ with your ♥♥♥♥ story ♥♥♥♥ you
also Diddy/Lucina <3
Fanfic: Worth a Thousand Words
Because the world needed a Samus/Dedede story
Fanfic: Ecstatic Silence
Just wanted to write and ♥♥♥♥ like this happens, you'd think I'd know better.
Fanfic: Far From the Edge
It's a dance that's been a long time coming for a brand new man and an unchanging woman, but once one takes the plunge there's no falling back up.
Original: Jealous Ghosts of the Mississippi
The story of Rachel meeting Amber after a lifetime of silence and being shunned
Original: Your Hand in Mine
One of my most personal stories about a dangerous romance. Now to be published in a college lit journal!
-------------------------
Recent LDC Work:
Level Series: Leaves From The Vine (ft Star King)
For the 29th LDC, a theme of grassland taken through the growth of our designing society. Won the 29th LDC!
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Level Topic: Collection of MoD's Levels!
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