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Posted: **February 6th, 2011, 5:45 pm**

So, I write poetry too...

First one:

Corrosion

No, I never told you
About the thing that’s breaking me,
Constantly shaking me
When I sleep at night

And I can’t tell,
Or I’ll finally shatter,
Finally scatter
The string that holds me together.

But this never-ending guilt,
It just won’t let go,
It just seems to grow
Until I’m completely corroded.

Posted: **February 6th, 2011, 8:01 pm**

Stop taking acid then. LOLZ.

Posted: **February 6th, 2011, 11:06 pm**

Always count on Riddah to corrupt something as beautiful as poetry. EVER HEARD OF /B/?? GO THERE. AND DON'T COME BACK.

The poem was great. The word choice, the theme, the pace, everything was great, until the end. The word "corroded" sounds a bit out of place or pace. And yes, I noticed the poem's title. But still.

Posted: **February 7th, 2011, 3:45 pm**

IT'S GENERIC, FOO.

Posted: **February 7th, 2011, 3:59 pm**

I really really like this. It's really pretty. I think all poetry, whether you like it or Not, is inspired. Never generic.

B-b-but that's just me. *avoids gunfire*

Posted: **February 7th, 2011, 4:05 pm**

Actually, me, Venexis, and Jello all agreed the previous night that this poem was pretty generic.

Posted: **February 7th, 2011, 4:10 pm**

...I don't think it is. I really like the word choice and other such things...

Course that's just me

Posted: **February 7th, 2011, 5:01 pm**

brandobrawl wrote:Always count on Riddah to corrupt something as beautiful as poetry. EVER HEARD OF /B/?? GO THERE. AND DON'T COME BACK.

The poem was great. The word choice, the theme, the pace, everything was great, until the end. The word "corroded" sounds a bit out of place or pace. And yes, I noticed the poem's title. But still.

MessengerOfDreams wrote:...I don't think it is. I really like the word choice and other such things...

Course that's just me

Posted: **February 8th, 2011, 2:47 pm**

Posted: **February 8th, 2011, 5:42 pm**

You spoofed...a poem.

A poem.

:arrow:

Not the smiley face you were expecting, huh? :awe:

Yeah, and I hope you noticed that that doesn't work out too well. Poems are worlds apart from stories, the only similarity being that they're expressed in words.

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