In a word... criticism

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An aspiring critic, Tengae Nurasaki, is trying to find out how to get better at criticism. he thinks, in order to be a good critic, One first must learn how to write.
so he started writing...

"chapter 1 pt 1 :the start of a new career": show

My first poem:
Criticism.
It can be constructive.
It can be disconcerting to a writer
But it really should be taken as grains of salt
To a writer that needs help.
And as a writer writes another piece of work,
They take that criticism into account.
That is what writers should do.

"i based it on my ideas as a critic and what i hope writers do with my critiques." said Tengae.
"its okay, for a first." said one of his teacher's. "it needs more flow, more emotion. this, this is just straight-foward. no subtleties of refinement."
"thank you" said Tengae. " I will try to make it have more emotion."

no biases here, please, all comments and reviews are appreciated.