Destructive

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Destructive

Postby lordpat » August 17th, 2012, 10:53 am

Jones came a the door. He hated it. He entered the house. He talked with the owner.
"Your door is horrible, it lacks colour and skill. It doesn't fit the style of your house. The material is very poor. How much it costed you, 5 or 10 dollars?
"Hey! I like this door, I know it's not top but...
"I don't care. I'm being honest." he said and he left.
He was in bed. He thought. He liked talking with the owner of the door. He liked critizing it. He applied a job for a house reviewer. He knew nothing about houses. But the company liked it anyways.
"You are what we need."
"I will do anything needed to help people."
The next day he had to review a house. It wasn't bad. It wasn't good. It was Ok.
The next day on his review:
Yesterday, I saw Angelica's house. It lacked decor, the color mixing was bad, the structure was trully poor. It was plainly and simply ♥♥♥♥.
Angelica met him.
"Why did you do that! My house has nothing good?"
"Yes it had. But there's no point on telling you, is there? After all, you won't improove in that case."
"But you said it was ♥♥♥♥!"
"I don't care, I was just being honest."
He left.
The next day came. He saw a short-movie. A friend made it. He liked for the most part.
"This movie is clearly unproffesional. Gosh, maybe you can do better next time. A piece of advice? Start from scratch. Please, just start again."
His friend was speechless.
"Jeez, I was just being honest."
He left. He never talked to his friend again.
He bought a piece of meat. He went home.
He tried a to cut the piece of meat. The knife wasn't sharp enough.
"God, this knife is awful! It can't cut a simple piece of meat."
The knife slipped from his hand. The knife landed on his neck. It could cut a piece of meat.
"I....was.....just.....being.....
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Re: Destructive

Postby BrawlerEX » August 17th, 2012, 2:21 pm

lordpat wrote:Jones came a the door. He hated it. He entered the house. He talked with the owner.
"Your door is horrible, it lacks colour and skill. It doesn't fit the style of your house. The material is very poor. How much it costed you, 5 or 10 dollars?
"Hey! I like this door, I know it's not top but...
"I don't care. I'm being honest." he said and he left.

So he just walks into a random guys house and starts insulting him for the heck of it?

lordpat wrote:He was in bed. He thought. He liked talking with the owner of the door. He liked critizing it. He applied a job for a house reviewer. He knew nothing about houses.

TTYYPPPOOOOOOO
Is the owner an "it" or did you mean he was criticizing a door even though it can't hear him?

lordpat wrote:He bought a piece of meat. He went home.
He tried a to cut the piece of meat. The knife wasn't sharp enough.
"God, this knife is awful! It can't cut a simple piece of meat."
The knife slipped from his hand. The knife landed on his neck. It could cut a piece of meat.
"I....was.....just.....being.....

Ohoho I love how you make all of your endings like that.

EDIT: BTW there is anotherr typo excluding the one I already mentioned. I will let you find it.
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