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page from: life really sucks doesn't chpt 1

Postby Dark_Meta_Knight » December 30th, 2012, 1:19 am

Not sure where to put it hope its the right place.
However this is for a book I'm creating called
life really sucks doesn't it?
What I'm posting is a page of certain things that may have happened to you.
Although the first isn't it's more about me.
however don't you worry it only appears in between chapters
I'm only on chapter 3 the chapters are long though hope you enjoy I hope.
And yes this is modern world so at the end it includes an internet site I thing we all know.
Also remind me of typos.
And sorry if not quoted properly forgot how to.
the book wrote:My life and hatred of school and the social public
It all starts with preschool they teach you how to share and be kind to one another.
But we all know what they say is all but a lie.
They say they’re preparing you but at this age you don’t know what.
You get into the 1st-2nd grade, and they aren’t as nice as before nope not at all.
You lose your 1 and only true best friend and only have yourself to fend.
People start bullying you from all around nothing to do.
You can tell a teacher but what will they do?
They pretty much do nothing at all.
You learn this once you enter the 3rd- 4th
You now have someone lurking and stocking you.
You tell a teacher but they never find out whom.
You now have the school jumping on your back because of some disabilities.
To only find out you have more bullies to make it worse.
You now have one specific person to worry about.
It starts out as kicks and nudge but gets worse.
By the 5th grade you’ve had enough and even want to stand up to the school.
By this time the person traumatizing much worse than bullying makes you lose self esteem and courage. You’re now being picked on by your on principle and the teachers themselves.
They don’t let you do anything productive nope not this time.
You make one mistake and they put you in a class like your retarded.
It makes you so mad so confused why would they do this why?
You did nothing wrong you had nothing to do with it they did.
They are the ones to truly blame they are.
You have a girlfriend not that type but you know.
You start to wonder if she’s there because she truly wants to be your friend.
Or if she’s only there because she feels kind of sorry for you.
It’s hard to tell but if you asked well she might leave you as a friend.
So you do nothing say nothing, nothing at all.
She barely even wants to hang out with you what’s the point.
The bullies and the principle are now using the teachers against you.
You get in trouble even though you’re the one getting picked on.
Police sent by the school, Principle and teachers making a meal of you,
And your main bully, and random Mexican gangs traumatizing you into hating Mexicans.
You’re now in 6th grade much more prepared than you ever were.
Though you’re scared and still traumatized that they’ll be the same as the last school.
Your mom re assures you and comforts you saying it will be alright.
You listen however you’re too scared still.
Your friend if you even call it a friend starts seeing you less and less.
You’re now completely alone and scared of being and on coming target.
You soon learn the teachers are much friendlier.
You get sick all a sudden and miss yet another 3 weeks of school over an infection.
You make it to school just in time of a field trip but your school has lost some faith in you.
That where you meet your one best friend who’ll be there all the way.
You know that after all the times you’ve been betrayed this friend wouldn’t leave you.
You are now at peace and feel comfort real comfort not artificial.
You tell him your stories you guys laugh about it.
You think of him as a big brother though you soon find out he’s younger than you.
You don’t care though and keep praising him anyways.
You have lots of fun with him lots of it.
You don’t care what most people thing no not you.
Then we get into 7th grade this grade is much harder and fierce.
The classes they put you in are fine but you don’t see your friend as often.
You feel saddened and betrayed what to do?
One of your teachers one of the only nice ones feels your pain.
Somehow knowing how much of a best friend you think of him.
She arranges to put you guys in the same class in her class.
You’re happy that he’s there but don’t mess around too much
Only when your work and his are truly done well.
He soon meets another friend and sees you less.
You understand because of finding new friends.
You soon meet his friend but for some reason he doesn’t like you.
He thinks your weird and doesn’t want to talk you.
You wonder why he thinks that of you.
So for fun you say something weird to him.
He soon starts telling the entire school you’re a molester.
Now you hate him but at least you have your friend right?
No you do but yet you don’t have him to reside.
Why because your own super attendant cracks in and is holding you back for “being sick”
You now have more of the 7th to worry about yippy Sippy!
You notice your best friend’s new best friend is the person who despises you.
Well at least you still get to see him every last period
That soon goes to pieces soon because before you know it he’s moving away.
To a place far away from where you live somewhere in the country.
He moves before you even can say goodbye and this makes you your saddest.
You have one of his friends as comic relief but that does nothing.
Nothing to soothe your growing pains nothing.
Your new teachers now treat you like a robot nowhere to go.
You still somehow await for better more dedicated classes not these that put you through pressure. You also start thinking “what if I was home schooled, or what if I do want to be.”
Well we just have to wait buddy we’ll just have to wait.
But by waiting this mourning time you think to yourself why me?
This continues till high school ‘til you come across a place called 4chan.
You think it’s just gonna be another social path which will leave you friendless.
However to your avast they are kind heart and understand you.
Laugh with you just like your friend did.
4chan may not be the best but it’ll do.
However you do still miss the good things in real life. END
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Re: page from: like really sucks doesn't chpt 1

Postby *Emelia K. Fletcher » December 30th, 2012, 1:40 am

Please tell me you're older than 8.


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Re: page from: life really sucks doesn't chpt 1

Postby Dark_Meta_Knight » December 30th, 2012, 3:15 am

Emelia Kaylee wrote:Please tell me you're older than 8.

Please tell me you read the entire thing before you judge me.
Also check my age it easily says it in my profile.
If This book ain't for you STAY AWAY!
I'm sorry I yelled but have a nice day.
Also I somehow rhymed that
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Re: page from: like really sucks doesn't chpt 1

Postby Blablob » December 30th, 2012, 7:42 am

This is extremely depressing. O.o

I hope your future chapters include a bit more optimism to them, though by the title alone I probably shouldn't hold my breath.

One thing I'll point out is that the story was a little difficult to read at times due to the lack of spacing. Also, you don't need to hit the enter key every time you finish a sentence. I felt like I was reading a poem rather than a chapter to a book. I definitely recommend going back and structuring your story better.
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Re: page from: life really sucks doesn't chpt 1

Postby Dark_Meta_Knight » December 30th, 2012, 8:12 pm

Blablob wrote:This is extremely depressing. O.o

I hope your future chapters include a bit more optimism to them, though by the title alone I probably shouldn't hold my breath.

One thing I'll point out is that the story was a little difficult to read at times due to the lack of spacing. Also, you don't need to hit the enter key every time you finish a sentence. I felt like I was reading a poem rather than a chapter to a book. I definitely recommend going back and structuring your story better.

Don't worry they will also 4chan is only there till I find something better to put.
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Re: page from: life really sucks doesn't chpt 1

Postby Tune4Toons » January 6th, 2013, 9:37 am

Dark_Meta_Knight wrote:
the book wrote:END


To think this entire time, I completely missed that part till now.

It said chapter one, so I thought you were going to be adding more, but seeing as that might not be the case for the next while, I'll be moving this over to the Poems/Short Stories area for now.
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