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This is the story of 18-year-old Abigail who woke up one day without any idea of who she is.

Bars, shackles, and chains.

I'm in a prison.

I suppose this should have been obvious, considering the metal bars that are in front of me, but why was I in prison?


Hey, my name is Magnen and this is my first attempt to write a story.
(So please, cut me some slack here, I know it's not perfect but I tried )

I'll read pretty much any opinions you may have, I only ask that you be specific about what you dislike.
One last thing: Please use spoiler or hide tags for well, spoilers

Anyway I'll quit rambling now, here it is:

Google Document for "A Memory's Shadow."

Pretty good story. I liked it. Good job.

Well I fixed the first one, as for the second one, I'm not going to bother with it because honestly I'm not sure either and autocorrect said nothing about it

I agree with Nan, this was really good. There's a lot of detail and backstory, mixed with action and a pinch of romance. Thumbs up from me.

I did notice one other typo though:

This is what I get for only taking 20 minutes to do correctional edits
(Its been fixed)

I love it I love it I love it I love it, action was super tight.

For Nan's second note though, I think the correct word would be James'.

Man, you really want me to start trying my hand at storytelling again.

yesyesyesyesyesyesyesyes more writing please more of this ♥♥♥♥ people

You would be a fantastic writer for young adults. The style here's simple and in some ways it does get a little too tell, but considering what it's about it kind of has to be. I really felt engaged to what was going on, your narrator had a strong voice, but it was also easy to follow. I think you should keep writing if you've not already written millions of words as it is. I'm also happy with the ending- sometimes, even if it's expected, a happy ending is nice. The final fight scene was unique yet engaging, and I grew to believe the two of them really cared for each other, despite the security of the veneer of sarcasm and edginess. Great great work!

Thanks everyone for all the positive feedback I really appreciate it.

Also I have started writing stories before but I never really finished them, so while I have practiced writing stories before I've never finished any of them until now.
But I was determined not to be a procrastinate about it this time and essentially forced myself to write as much as I could every day.

Keep at it, Mags. You're boss at it.

Harmless wrote:For Nan's second note though, I think the correct word would be James'.

Actually, it's "James's." Names that end with an S always throw me off when I use a possessive, as it always looks and sounds odd with how it's meant to be presented.