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Zack transfers to a new school and on his first day a rumor about him starts going around. He has to deal with this rumor as he adjusts to the new environment and makes new friends.

Taking inspiration from games like Persona 3, this story focuses on making detailed characters, something that I feel my previous realistic stories are lacking in. It's a bit of a slow burn with less of an emphasis on action, contrary to my previous story. It's also longer, being roughly 17600 words, which might be a little long for a short story but I don't think it really matters.

Of Rumors and Friendships

F̶e̶e̶l̶s̶ ̶l̶i̶k̶e̶ ̶I̶'̶m̶ ̶r̶e̶a̶d̶i̶n̶g̶ ̶t̶h̶e̶ ̶s̶c̶r̶i̶p̶t̶ ̶f̶o̶r̶ ̶a̶ ̶H̶a̶r̶e̶m̶ ̶a̶n̶i̶m̶e̶

Heeey, this is really good, it's probably my favorite from you so far!
Characters feel natural and you balanced dialogue and description pretty well. Probably better than I would, rip

Only thing that slightly bothers me is how often you point out stereotypes. (this is more of my personal taste and it's not necessarily a bad thing)

So yeah, good job!

I think you're actually better at writing than me now, rip again