Sonicfan253's short stories

[Sonicfan253]

Pinball panic
Me, Buffooner, Messengerofyahweh, and Kimonio were at the arcade.

"Guys! come look at this pinball machine! its freakin` sick!" I said, gazing at a huge pinball machine.

"Im coming!" said Buffooner, he had his mouth stuffed with potato chips from the consession counter.

Kimonio came and put a dollar in the pinball machine, he played for 20 minutes and then lost. Messengerofyahweh, Buffoner, and I watched Kimonio and his pinball skills.

Then I stepped up and inserted a dollar, I played for awhile. Suddenly the ball went into a small blue hole. And then there was a blinding lightning.

I looked up when the flashing stopped. Kimonio, Messengerofyahweh, and Buffooner were huge. REALLY HUGE!

I saw Kimonio insert another dollar then pull back the trigger for the pinball, the pinball was as big as a boulder!

Kimonio let go of the trigger and the giant pinball zoomed past me, I looked up again. Kimonio was talking to Buffooner, on the lines of "Hey, where`d Sonicfan go?". The pinball bounced off a bumper and rolled right toward me.

The pinball chased me into the hole at the bottom of the machine. I found myself in a small tunnel filled with pinballs.

I walked up to the pinball that was underneath the giant trigger, and sure enough. The pinball zinged up back into the light, Buffooner was playing now. I saw the look on his face when he saw me, tiny on a pinball.

"What the heck?!?" shouted Buffooner, "Sonicfan is in there!".

Kimonio and Messengerofyahweh looked at the pinball machine and saw me in there.

"Woah, Sonicfan253 how did you get in there?" said Messengerofyahweh, rasping with his knuckle on the glass.

"Help!" I yelled, but I was so tiny that no one could hear me. Buffooner bumped the ball off a bumper, and bounced it off walls.

"Maybe...if I get my score high enough, Sonicfan will get out!" Kimonio and Messenger of yahweh stared at Buffooner like he was crazy.

I went and punched a green bumper to make a ringing sound, And sure enough it did. DINNNGGGG!!!!! that seemed to get everyone on topic, Kimonio started pacing back and forth.

"Maybe I can get in there WITH Sonicfan" said Kimonio. "That would just make the problem worse, duh." Said Messengerofyahweh.

Suddenly a plastic dragon popped out and sent me and the pinball flying into a bumper. The pinball smashed into a wall, while I was hanging on to it for dear life.

The pinball hit four red bumpers and they all lit up, it revealed a green hole.

Messengerofyahweh was now in control. He bumped the pinball into the green hole, I felt myself fly. As I hung on to the ball it zoomed through corners and out back into the light, where I was now at another side of the machine.

Kimonio went back to the controls and inserted yet another dollar, then he made the pinball go into a purple hole.

"How is this getting anything done?" Asked Buffooner.

"Trying...to...get...a...HIGHSCORE!" shouted Kimonio, I looked up at the scoreboard. "100,000,00" I said. Kimonio oddly seemed to hear me because he bounced the pinball off more bumpers and platforms. The score soon went up to 500,000,00.

"Please give me a freaking break Kim!" I pleaded. Buffooner kicked the machine as if he were bored,

I rested on a flipper, I looked up at the scoreboard. 700,000,00.

Messengerofyahweh inserted his own dollar. Then he launched the ball again. "Oh crap" I said as the ball went flying toward me, I jumped out of the way.

But the pinball hit a bummper and reflected right back at me again. I dived for a platform and jumped out of the way every time the ball almost hit me.

"Give me the control" said Buffooner as he racked the score up to 800,000,000.

I was really tired, so I sat in the corner of the pinball machine and watched as Buffooner bounced the ball around.

The score was now 810,500,000. Boy, this was going to take awhile. I suddenly, and unexpectedly, fell asleep.

I was dizzy when I woke up, I looked through the giant glass. No Kimonio, No buffooner, No Messengerofyahweh.

I sadly watched as the score turned to 000,000,000. "No!" I said, but it was too late.

My freinds had left me, how was I going to get out?

Suddenly there was another blinding flash of light. I saw that I was at the arcade, the lights were out, no one was there. But it didn`t matter. I was safe, and out of the Pinball machine. I walked out the arcade doors and never touched that pinball machine again.

The end.

[Zunar]

ooooookkkkk.....

[YoshiKid54]

That isn't bad. You have great grammar skills.

[Blablob]

This is good....you are definitely getting better, Sonicfan....however, I still think it could be a bit improved. This shouldn't be a one-chapter story. In fact, the one section you wrote, that should be one chapter, and you can write more over time.

I really like the direction you're heading with your stories, Sonicfan. Keep working on your skills.

[Sonicfan253]

Ok. Its just a short story that I wanted to get out of my head, Ill change the title to "Sonicfan253's short stories".